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Reviews for Naruto's Spy Network

By : EroMind
  • From ANON - x on June 26, 2013
    good but maybe before kumo add the other girl from iwa bee summons
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  • From KaelHyun on June 26, 2013
    Please do Fu next. Partly because it would have been nice for this story to have a followable plotline (In which case Fu should have been this chapter) and it would be nice for a chapter were Naruto finds an equal.
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  • From KaelHyun on June 26, 2013
    May I suggest Sakura (Shes the main student of the Hokage and closely tied enough to get information that most wouldn't be able to get). Karin another Uzumaki and a great Spy against Orochimaru and to keep her ears out for Sasuke. Karui would be great asset as well to help Samui.
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  • From joeparas1988 on June 26, 2013
    Your story will become exponentially less interesting the more the subsequent girls act in the same way as the previous one.

    Naruto can be a dom all he wants, that's not the issue. The issue is the same one cop13r has with his stories. The females are just weak sluts with no fire and carbon copied personalities. Strong women are attractive. Aggressive (sexually) are attractive. Being coy, cunning, dominant, sensual, erotic or shy. All these traits are important because no two women are the same. Other stories, including this one, will and have lost their spark because of unimaginative narrative and characterisation.

    It's also naive to think just because Naruto has a massive cock (which makes anal impossible, especially for first timers, idc what you spin about kunoichi. How pleasurable do you think a baseball bat up your ass would be? That's essentially what's happening) women will be instantly turned on by him. Surprise surprise, not all women like dominant men. Different women are turned on by different things.

    If you're just going to have every woman in this story turned on by Naruto being a domineering douche and turning into cockslaves, why should anyone read further? It works as a one-shot (unless you do fifty of them the exact same way *coughcop13rcough*), but I can see Kurotsuchi in the chapter title for the next one. Why should I read it if all that's gonna happen is Naruto comes on strong, shows her his dick, turns her initial fire-ness into subservience before fucking her in ever way possible before moving on?

    That already happened. With Samui.

    You want my tip on being an infinitely better writer than those other guys? Work hard on making your female leads unique. Trust me, you'll be the best Naruto lemon author on this site if you master that. Varying up the sex wouldn't hurt either. That ties back into being unique. Samui shouldn't have done anal, she has no experience with it and it would be incredibly, unimaginably painfl. A woman down the road in the story who has lots of experience with anal though would be the perfect time to introduce anal play into the shenanigans.

    That's just an example.

    toodles
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  • From ANON - Aha on June 26, 2013
    A few repeating words and some grammar mistakes but other than that a good chapter. Hope to see Temari show up eventually, even if she and her brothers are friends of Naruto she can still be taken as a lover that Naruto doesn't intend to blackmail or humiliate, or just as a one-night stand.
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  • From ANON - k amamoto on June 25, 2013
    like the story so far...

    and here are some requests and suggestions

    requests
    hinata
    isaribi
    yakumo kurama

    suggesions
    sakura
    ino
    tenten
    yugito nii
    guren
    kagura (former anbu and attempted apprentice of tsunade)
    tsunade
    shizune
    Suzumebachi
    tokiwa
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  • From ANON - Anonymous on June 23, 2013
    Put Hanabi Too xD and Story Can Get Interesting if Added Bit more Plot
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 18, 2013
    Hanabi and maybe some sound girls.

    I am in agreement with you that Eroinja is better but your story still needs to take credit where credit is due; it is far from a low level story!
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 18, 2013
    Karui and Yugito of Kumo. I believe her name was Ringo 7 Swordsmen member. Unknown when she died but she was dead by the 4th Great War. Sara (although it can be inferred they slept together due to her daughters age and appearance).

    Maybe some genderswaped characters. FemSasuke, femAkatsuki, etc.
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  • From ANON - LilianaVessFanBoy on June 16, 2013
    Since Naruto just finished Samui you could use her as a plot device to get him set up with Yugito. i.e. "She hears about Yugito being ambushed by Akatsuki and immediately summons Naruto he then goes and rescues her and grateful sex is had all around." Just a thought.
    Also what about Kurotsuchi(SP?)? It would be interesting to see how Naruto dominates an Iwa kunoichi. Especially if she possibly has some "forbidden" fantasies regarding the Fourth Hokage. Would be an interesting twist at least.
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  • From ANON - Elazul on June 12, 2013
    Well, Damn. This was fantastic, and Naruto's character is awesome because it's all natural to him and not some bloodline or outside influence. Looking forward to the rest.
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  • From ANON - sh8ad8ow on June 12, 2013
    Good chapter, please continue soon as for the list why not include Inuzuka Hana Kiba´s sister her been the Heiress of the clan would give him political power within Konoha too.
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  • From ANON - Decker on June 12, 2013
    This story is definitely just as good as eroninja's and c0pycat's stories, if not better. Seriously, keep it up
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  • From ANON - Sunglassesatnight on June 12, 2013
    I was definitely reminded of Eroninja while reading this, though this Naruto is using his own techniques and skills to "get it on" for Jiraiya's "peace". I liked these two chapters though. Starting with Samui is random yet not implausible. I would like to see Naruto get Karin next. Having a new goal in his life, Naruto could run into Sasuke and decide it might be better to just have someone keep an eye on the traitor for him instead of Naruto always wondering about what Sasuke is doing.
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  • From ANON - sh8ad8ow on June 11, 2013
    Excellent start and good basic plot.
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