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Reviews for Rot, Another One Bites the Dust

By : LucklessMallory
  • From ANON - Bree on November 16, 2012
    I'm going to assume you're not a drinker...I've been reading this story since the first chapter and it's not bad so far, but this particularly jumped out as unrealistic....and pointless anyway? One sip of a light beer = instantly drunk? Beer is only 5% alcohol by volume...a single drink wouldn't be enough to get a child drunk, let alone a full grown man. I might narrow it down to mind over matter, if he had finished the beer and realized what he was drinking. And since the episode didn't go anywhere and was seemingly just some comic relief, why not let him drink a couple and get drunk to the same effect? I know it seems like a silly thing to nitpick, but sometimes it's the little things that make a story feel real, or not.

    I also feel like they could do with some struggle. I know that seems a funny suggestion for a group of people in the middle of a zombie apocalypse who seem to have lost everything, but that given, things have gone pretty smoothly; no real leadership issues, despite three separate groups of people having come together, no injury, quite a lot of seemingly untouched resources. I know they've lost a couple people, but those were quick, heat of the moment losses. Death isn't the only hardship they should face. It is still early though, so maybe you've got something in mind coming up?

    That said, I really do like this story overall so far. I hope you continue it. I don't follow many stories on AFF anymore, because more and more of my favourite authors have left the site, and only the odd story here and there sticks out for being fairly well written and having a real plot and often the majority of those get abandoned a few chapters in. I look forward to the next chapter; it's clear that Lee is struggling to cope, and I look forward to seeing how Gaara deals with it, and how the idea of spreading out goes.
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  • From ANON - kit on November 15, 2012
    such a sad chapter!!
    I had this feeling that her death would be next. Will her death drive lee and gaara apart or closer to one another.
    Also curious to read how the group will be split into 2. Cant wait to read the next update!! :]
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  • From ANON - kit on November 12, 2012
    Really great story! I wish there were more good zombie fics like this out there. cant wait to read how the story progresses
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