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Reviews for He Walked Away

By : AmberDDawn
  • From arianauchiha23451 on April 07, 2011
    awesome story.... i was almost in tears as i read this.... i am just glad that naruto is going to be okay.... now i am off to read the sequel
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  • From AngelTalion on January 04, 2011
    I came to read this before getting to Rehabing and I'm SO glad I did. You made me cry more then once. But it was SO worth it. :) Lovely story.
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  • From ANON - Lil-lo on October 19, 2010
    I'm going to sum up what I have read-I think you're a good writer- the chapters are fairly good in terms of spelling and grammar- there are no mistakes that spell check would have but a strong beta could improve things even more. Ch 2-3 needed more punctuation/fleshing out at times because they were slightly rushed- the punctuation/more wording would have helped them flow better. I could understand them, and I was glad that they did pick up where Naruto mistook anger at him and showed where they were mad at their own mistakes. I felt like each pov added to the story. The chapters after are a lot more clearer, so I'm not sure if you purposely wrote ch 2-3 as a little rushed to mirror that the situation was stressful and each character was seeing Naruto in a traumatizing light.

    Thank you for sharing your fic. I think you have made a great story and I know writing isn't always easy-especially with real life. My only other suggestion is maybe going back and writing why a certain character may have come to the feelings that they had. I felt like each person came to feel their emotions too quickly or too extremely. There were explanations and I can see why there was a change of heart but maybe the briefness in each chapter made those changes seem too soon.
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  • From ANON - Lil-lo on October 19, 2010
    I just starting reading chapter 1 and Iruka's visit made me wonder if Naruto is assuming he knows everyone hates him when they don't. I know I'm hoping that's the case because Naruto's distress is overwhelming compared with his canon determination and Naruto assuming the worst would be a very interesting take on the hurt/comfort fic.

    I am also glad of your use the warnings before the chapter-it shows that when serious topics are addressed they will be handled in a thought provoking enhancement to the story and may even educate someone on abuse/rape/etc. I see those elements thrown into stories and handled in ways that often scare me because it hints that the general populous may not have a grasp on the true hurt and pain of such events.
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  • From smint45 on October 17, 2010
    That was a really good story!!! I hope that the sequal is not so angsty and depressing!!! And I want a happy end for naru and sasu!!!!! Please!!!!! So Anyway I really liked this story!!! So happy I stubled over it!!! I hope to see you soon with the sequal!!!!
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  • From setoswifey on October 09, 2010
    Wow you post chapters really fast! So far so good. Sasuke has a tendency to realize things a little too late but I do hope he can somehow repair the damage that he caused.
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  • From setoswifey on October 07, 2010
    Wow...everybody is suffering in this fic. Sasuke is a jerk. Sure he is hot (no one can deny that...but Itachi is hotter) but he is an asshole throughout the show and a selfish one at that. Great story so far! Keep up the good work.
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