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Reviews for Konoha Wrestling

By : Croup
  • From ANON - Sue on August 02, 2008
    You are the spank master. The king of spank - all hail the King of spank. I love all your stories, I even read the DragonBall Z one, and I don't even know squat about that show, but I LOVED that story. I'm loving this one even more, though. I love the plot direction, and what you've done with Naruto and Sasuke's characters, minor though they are. Your sense of humor within the story is spot on. You've turned Kiba into a really interesting major character, and I can't wait to see where you're heading with this one, but I hope it involves some more damage to Kank's butt...
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  • From charmpit on July 14, 2008
    UM...

    1. Why was it necessary for Kankurou to be felt up by a heavily medicated Gaara? Hadn't he already suffered enough?

    2. Are you planning to toss a moresome into this fic, and if so, will Asuma be involved?

    3. LOL there is something wrong with you.
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  • From tawanawelch on July 13, 2008
    WOW!!! As soon as I read the title, I thought of the movie Vision Quest. This is so great for Naruto and the guys. You've got a great sense of humor in this and you've got everyone in it even Sai and Suigetu whom I both love. Keep on it please I'd love to see a possible Threesome with Kiba, Shino and Naruto. OOOOOH! HOT and SMEXY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From Croup on July 02, 2008
    To Zero Falcon: Oh, man! I wish all my reviews were like yours. Long, well thought out, and full of con-crit. I just wish this site allowed me to reply to you personally, instead of making a seperate review to do it.

    Anyway, you raised some excellent points. I guess one of my major excuses would be that I, myself, have never been on a wrestling team. So hearing from a real wrestler is much appreciated. The closest I've come to any wrestling meet is watching one from outside the gymnasium a few times while hanging out after school (more like ogling the hot bodies of the players).

    Which leads me to my next excuse. That is, that this story is 100% fantasy, and I decided to take certain liberties for the sake of hotness. Yeah, wrestlers don't wear their singlets just for practices, but I think singlets are superhot, so there they are. And I doubt many schools would shell out to give every player a special design/color-scheme of their own, either. Or still paddle their players (in my state, that went out of fashion sometime in the seventies) Hopefully no one is reading my story for the realism. >.>

    Your remark about jockstraps came as a surprise to me, however. I'd always thought that they were pretty standard athletic support for a variety of sports, such as wrestling and football. Or, at least, they used to be. How exactly do they hinder movement? *taking down notes!*

    About the weightclasses, I probably only made the briefest mention of them because the whole idea has always made me vaguely uncomfortable. Athletes starving themselves for the sport = not good. I might go more into that in further chapters, though, when I talk about how the players practice when not at school . . .

    Kiba's hygiene is duly noted. He's a dirty boy, and deserves a spanking. Also, endurance! I should make a note of that somewhere.

    Your review was very much appreciated. If you notice anymore technical goofs as you read further (and I'm sure there will be LOTS), please don't hesitate to point them out. I'll go back sometime, and try to correct the more obvious ones.
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  • From ZeroFalcon on July 02, 2008
    I've read one chapter of this, and I've got to say this. You have a great grasp on grammar and spelling. You're writing skills are great! And It was engrossing.

    It was good it really was, well except for some parts that irked me as a wrestler.

    First thing was the jockstraps. Jockstraps are evil in wrestling (They are uncomfortable to wear in a stance, actually hinder your movement, and plan uncomfortable). Most wrestlers would not wear one and no coach would force you to wear one. Well there is one more thing it does, create a nice big embarrassing bulge in your singlet. And Restricting of movement again.

    Which brings me to the next thing, singlet. I have seen Custom Singlets like you described, yes its possible to do that. But no wrestler would ever just wear that to practice. One of the toughest part about wrestling that isn't the match itself is the weight. Keeping it down means you have to eat less and sweat more. Which in turn means wearing heavy hot clothing. What you need to wear at least is a long sleeve shirt and sweatpants. But typical attire for practice? Boxers or Briefs, Tights, Gym Shorts, Sweat Pants, and depending on how much you need to lose, another pair on top of that. For Shirts, Under-armor T-Shirt, T-Shirt, Long Sleeve, Sweat Shirt. and depending on weight, another T-shirt or Long Sleeve. The shirts get soaked, another Reason for the not wearing of Jocks, and leaving them in your locker = chewing out by the coach because of disease. Which is another Reason why you have to wear at least sweatpants or tights and a long sleeve shirt. Ringworm is not fun norm is any other illness you could get.

    Hmm thats all I can think of for now on the technical aspect of...Oh right! Endurance and not strength is the key to wrestling, in all but the 3 heaviest weight classes. I can explain more later if you like.

    This is a good story so far though and it saddens me that the technical aspect like that may get in the way of it.
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  • From charmpit on May 27, 2008
    All right! Updates!

    I can't wait to see what develops between Kiba and Kankurou down the road. And will there be any other pairings, like SasuNaru or something? Personally I think Shino should be paired in this one.

    Next chapter please!
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  • From ANON - Yaoisweetsugarbaby on May 26, 2008
    I really like this story. (sorry for the other review. it went through before i could actually type what i wanted to say) I'm not a big fan of Kiba but i do like him. Though I wish you would be a little nicer to Naruto but I know that you are sticking to your plot and how they act. Least he has more lines than Sasuke. Great job!
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  • From ANON - Yaoisweetsugarbaby on May 26, 2008
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  • From charmpit on February 27, 2008
    Dude, you are INSANE.

    This latest chapter ROCKS!

    I am so adding this story to my recommended reading list. Believe it!

    ROFLMAOROFLMAOROFLMAOROFLMAOROFLMAOROFLMAOROFLMAO
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  • From ANON - Hello on February 26, 2008
    Oh my very humourous yet...hot as you can say. I'd love to read more.

    -Hello
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  • From Sugary on November 14, 2007
    I really hope you continue this. It has an interesting plot to it, and I really like Kiba, and it's funny. So please continue! :)
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