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Reviews for Rise Of The Fox Shinobi

By : Anubis7ven9
  • From darkxellos on May 14, 2009
    Not very well written, but entertaining. I was reminded of the fast paced fights when I played Mortal Kombat.
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  • From Johnyx734 on May 07, 2008
    I'm normally not a big fan of crossovers, but this one is incredible!!!
    The way you portrayed the characters was great; especially Gaara and Naruto. They had that "We dont care anymore. We just wanna kill someone" attitude. I thought that was awesome. It may sound weird, but my favorite part was with Gaara and the statue of liberty. That took this story to a completely different level of creativeness. 5 ouf of 5.

    I'd like to offer some friendly advice too. One thing that could use a tiny bit of work is the grammar. It's not bad, but there are a few spots where I got lost. Also, you might wanna try and break up the paragraphs and make them maybe half or even a third of the size they are now. Not that there's anything wrong with leaving them the way they are, but I just found myself losing my place a lot.

    Again, incredible work!!! Can't wait to start reading the sequal!
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  • From Drum13ga on October 14, 2007
    Ok, overall good storyline...ALTHOUGH it would be a LOT better if you paid a LITTLe more attention to grammer and Actually Split the Sentences.
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  • From serenagold on July 04, 2007
    Its definately an interesting set up. YOu've got some nicely well placed drama, action and what not, but you definately need a Beta to help your grammer and block the story into something that is more easily read. Break up the paragraphs into seperate ideas and seperate the dialogue into its own lines and what not. This will make the story flow better to the reader and better get your ideas across. Other than grammer and maybe some tightening up of descriptions, I think the story is pretty good. You've got some interesting ideas there and it will interesting to see where you develop them.

    Keep up the good work and happy 4th of July! :)
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