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From ANON - Anon on June 17, 2008
Chapter 29: Wuh-oh. o.o
(*snicker*) “OF COURSE IT HURTS YOU FUCKING MORON!” XDDD Love that line.
Oh man, that’s creepy. X_X . . . . Wow. That was the easiest birth I’ve ever read about. ô_ô . . . . “Is she dead?” Lol. =)
That’s a sweet name.
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From ANON - Anon on June 17, 2008
Chapter 28: Lmao, Lee is so hilarious. XD . . . . Yeesh, Sasuke’s scary when he’s like this. This has got to be rough on Naruto. . . . I prefer Shikamaru/Temari, but Shikamaru/Ino’s okay too.
Oh! And there is the Sand trio! ^_^ . . . . Somebody kill Orochimaru and Kakashi for me. And Tsunade as well. Oh yeah, and throw Jiraiya in there, too. None of them know how to mind their own business. . . . (*snicker*) “So you two still act like this? Even though you’re together?” “It’s kind of hard to get over.” X3 . . . . And there are the cravings.

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From ANON - Anon on June 17, 2008
Chapter 27: “Now the Uchiha was even more feared by those who were against him.” I would probably say that sucks, but if it keeps them away and quiet, then that’s good news to me. . . . One would’ve thought the people would’ve learned not to get too close to Sasuke when he’s like this. . . . Too bad, Kiba. Hey, Ino, where’ve you been? . . . . That’s sick, that joke Jiraiya made about wanting both of them. I prefer to think that he’s turned off by the idea of two guys. . . . Oh god, this is getting sick. (*throws up*)
Naruto likes it rough, doesn’t he? . . . . Man, why are the sex scenes so short as of late? The incest scenes went on longer than these! õ_õ
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From ANON - Anon on June 17, 2008
Chapter 26: (*sigh*) I kind of imagine Deidara saying/thinking that (“I wish I could blow this place up”) but maybe not so much Orochimaru. Although, since it’s Konoha we’re talking about here, I guess it can be overlooked. . . . (*snicker*) Love Orochimaru’s dry greeting to Tsunade. . . . Heh. And Sasuke’s all ornery. ^^ . . . . Man, Orochimaru’s making me sick with this little act. (*green*) . . . . (*sigh*) I guess I don’t care for Kakashi too much in this story. -_-;

Sorry for the crit, but THIS is more of what I consider a filler. Sorry.
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From ANON - Anon on June 13, 2008
Chapter 25: Oh boy, Sasuke is not pleased. . . . Doesn’t surprise me that he can’t go on missions. Figured he’d be pissed as hell about it. . . . Heh. Sasuke’s all “RAWR!!” ^^;;;
I don’t hear about many fics where Sasuke’s the one who gets pregnant. Interesting. . . . Naruto, if I were you, I’d save the jokes for a safer time. For the moment, try to imagine walking on eggshells without using chakra or weapons for help. . . . (*snicker*) Kakashi’s being absolutely no help. Sasuke, why don’t you just throw up on him? ^^ . . . . Now I disapprove of Kakashi. This is what merits the label of “pervert.” . . . . Oh boy. Dad knows. (*sweat*)

‘Rochi-kun is invited to Konoha? Now I’ve heard everything. o_o
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From ANON - Anon on June 13, 2008
Chapter 24: Awww, cute first sentence. ¢¾ It¡¯s all WAFFy. ¢¾ . . . . Uh-oh, he¡¯s preggers. . . . Man, I don¡¯t know how anyone can make it to the bathroom in time to throw up when they¡¯re already feeling it. (*green*) -_-; . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Sasuke¡¯s been very scary lately.¡± ^^ . . . . Ahahaha, Sasuke totally got Naruto off-guard! XDD ¢¾ . . . . (*snort*) ¡°Some dick head?¡± XDD
Hey, if Naruto and Sasuke know that the cycle hadn¡¯t happened for about 2 months, don¡¯t you think they would¡¯ve, you know, suspected? . . . . Oh boy, Sasuke¡¯s not going to like being dragged in without warning and away from his mission. (*sweat*) . . . . Yup. I was right.
Tsunade¡¯s making me . . . feel a little sick when she acts like that. (*sweat*) . . . . I¡¯m totally with you, Sasuke.
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From ANON - Anon on June 13, 2008
Chapter 23: LOLLLL! “Orochimaru didn’t seem to mind; at least he knew his son was having fun.” (*laughs uncontrollably*) . . . . (*sweat*) Seeing Kakashi and Iruka . . . I get this feeling of dread upon me. . . . Nooooo! Not that couple! ;_; (Sorry, but that couple scares me for some reason.) . . . . I would’ve thought Iruka would’ve approved. They’re more of “protection” than “sexual gifts.” When I hear “sexual gifts” I would imagine toys or videos or something like that. But the most Kakashi gave them was stuff like protection.
Heh. I get the feeling that Sasuke’s only grumbling halfheartedly. =) . . . . “Is Kyuubi getting frisky?” That’s a good way of putting it. ^_^ . . . . (!) Is it . . . could it be. . . ?! . . . . (*blush*)
Oh noooo, she’s gonna see! ;_; . . . . Man, that was mean. (*shakes head*) -_-
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From ANON - Anon on June 13, 2008
Chapter 22: Ahaha, Orochimaru¡¯s sudden appearance. . . . Was Sasuke startled, too? ^^ . . . . Is Orochimaru cool about his son going out with Naruto? . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Naruto it¡¯s not hard to figure out. (*sigh*)¡± ^^ ¢¾ . . . . XD And then, ¡°Shut up, I¡¯m hungry.¡± XD So real. . . . Heh, ¡®Rochi-kun finds it funny. I can totally see him laughing about it. XD . . . . I¡¯m having a hard time hearing him say ¡°Well, duh.¡± It was funny, though. . . . I like how Sasuke still calls him ¡°Orochimaru.¡± That makes sense. . . . Oh, that bastard. Trying to get Sasuke to call him ¡°dad¡±. Yeesh. What a pest.
Are they sleeping together, then? . . . . See, I told you, Sasuke! Well, okay, I didn¡¯t tell you, but you should¡¯ve told ¡®Rochi-kun to lay off the towns too! It¡¯s funny, though how ¡°Orochimaru got an earful.¡± ^^ . . . . (*snicker*) Nice suggestion, Naruto. ^^ I can picture him saying it kinda sleepily, too. ¢¾ . . . . Let¡¯s hope that Orochimaru won¡¯t walk in on anything or (heaven and hell forbid) spy on them. (*sweat*) . . . . Oh, well, what do you know? There¡¯s the answer to my question right there. Is that his birth canal? (He¡¯s gonna have it rough when he gives birth.) . . . . Jeez, Naruto¡¯s starting off pretty fast. Shouldn¡¯t he try it slow first? . . . . (*snicker*) ¡°Be quiet, dobe, and be happy that you got me.¡± ^^
That . . . was . . . uh, yeah. You said it. (*sweat*)
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From ANON - Anon on June 13, 2008
Chapter 21: It is not taking too long! ò_ó

2 months, eh? Wow. . . . I like how Kakashi said that they deserve their privacy. But, erm, (*ahem*) I’d prefer it if Kiba stayed straight and Neji had gone out with . . . someone else. >.>; . . . . Jeez, I’d rather Tsunade talk like that. (*sweat*) . . . . Love how disturbed Kakashi is.
(((Hey, this question just occurred to me: When Sasuke’s on his period, where does the blood come out? I mean, does he have a vagina or something? (God, I hate that word XP) And you keep mentioning the blood on his stomach, and that seems pretty high up. Okay, back to the story now.)))
(*snicker*) “It’s said out of love.” Strangely, I can hear Sasuke saying that in a dry voice. ^^ . . . . Lemme guess: Lube or condoms? . . . . BOTH! ^_^ . . . . Heh. Naruto’s so crude. And Kakashi’s not that big of a pervert, actually (so long as he doesn’t spy on them or make inappropriate suggestions). . . . (*snort*) This is funny: “It’s nobody’s business what we do!” “Well excuse me! You told him what we don’t do!” XDD . . . . 10 minutes seems a little too long to me. . . . You spelled “definitely” as “defiantly” again. (*sweat*) And, boys? He is not sick, he’s actually being very mature there.

Hell, no. That was NOT a filler. It had a point. (I think.)
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From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Chapter 20: (It wouldn’t surprise me too much if there was a coffee shop there.) . . . . (*giggle*) Cute about Sasuke suggesting no caffeine and why. X3 . . . . It’s almost likely they’re tentatively flirting. It’s cute. . . . Okaaaay, that was kind of embarrassing (how loudly Naruto squealed that). So the people in Konoha are pretty accepting when it comes to gays and stuff? . . . . Ahaha, Kiba’s entrance! XD . . . . I love how they just accepted the fact that they’re going out. And I love the line: “I’m not jumping in bed with you just because we’re going out, it takes time.” ^_^
Uh-oh, jealousy. . . . I’ve often wondered about the genetics mixing. It could produce strong offspring, but then again, it could endanger both. . . . Does this mean that Kiba’s not interested in Hinata? Darn. ó.ò . . . . Oh my god, that line “There’s always your uncle.” That was so wrong and so hilarious! (*dies laughing*) XDDD . . . . Oh mannn. (*groan*) I think I’d prefer it if Kiba was kidding about trying it out with a guy. . . . Oh man, that’s . . . O.O You’re kidding me. O.O
“Jumped into the bushes so they wouldn’t be seen.” Yeah, unless Neji starts scanning the surroundings. . . . Lol, “Yes now shut up.” XD . . . . Whoa, that was unexpected (~~and a total turn-on~~)! O.O But (*ahem*) as hot as Naruto’s horniness is, morally he shouldn’t just do that to Sasuke without asking and receiving permission first (considering what Itachi did). I mean, for all we know, Sasuke could freak out or something. . . . Short, but hot. *_* . . . . Love how embarrassed Sasuke is. . . . (*snicker*) I freakin’ love this line: “Sasuke, we’ve known each other for basically all of our lives, and nearly killed each other, so I think we both deserved that.” So well-stated. ^_^ . . . . Scram, Kakashi. And mind your own business. 9_9

Ah well, “the best-laid plans sometimes go awry,” you know. ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Chapter 19: I like Sasuke¡¯s confusion.
(*snicker*) Love Sasuke¡¯s first words after waking up. ^^ He¡¯s not a morning person, is he? ¢¾ . . . . Love the touchiness. =) . . . . The clothing: does that mean that his usual clothes are a little tight on him around that time? (Cuz that happens to me.) . . . . By the way, which day is it for Sasuke? . . . . Awww, hands brushing. Sweet. ¢¾ . . . . This is so cute! (*squees*)

(And what the hell. I¡¯m in the middle of posting some reviews, and the formatting is going all wacky with the hearts and arrows.)
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From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Chapter 18: I really like this dialogue between them. . . . ¡°[. . .] That should lighten up your mood.¡± Sasuke¡¯s being cynical there, right? . . . . This is probably one of my favorite scenes. =D . . . . Kyuubi¡¯s very perceptive. . . . ¡°Shit. I did fall the bastard, didn¡¯t I?¡± I think you mean ¡°fall for the bastard¡±. . . . 15 minutes seems like a little too much to me. . . . Hah! Sasuke knew! ^^ ¢¾ . . . . Heheh, I like this line: ¡°I hate to admit it, but he is cute.¡± Yup. ^^ . . . . Love Naruto¡¯s innocent questions and how touchy Sasuke gets when they¡¯re asked. ^^ . . . . This is funny. I mean, talk about the awkward position of ¡°go-between,¡± you know? ^^ . . . . It¡¯s funny how a touchy situation turned into a funny one. I wondered how Sasuke figured that Naruto was bi.

I liked this chapter! This was probably one of my favorites! ^_^ . . . . I like how it¡¯s taking a while.
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From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Chapter 17: Four months? Wow. . . . Boy, jounin too. A lot has happened. ô_o . . . . Yeah, I knew Naruto had no business telling anyone about Sasuke’s hermaphroditism. . . . What the hell. What is with Orochimaru and attacking villages? And what is it with Sasuke and not including small towns as well? ò.ó . . . . (*snicker*) I like the way Shikamaru describes cloud-watching as “therapeutic”. ^^ . . . . Hah! And Shikamaru has no shame about being lazy! I love it! ^^ . . . . Okaaaay, that was way over-the-top, Naruto. Punching him like that.
I always love it when Kiba shows startling perception. ^^ . . . . Interesting, Neji likes Sasuke too. ô_o I love how Naruto didn’t flare up immediately; he was just like, “Whoa, that’s crazy.” ♥ . . . . I would’ve thought that Shikamaru would’ve figured out what the blood meant . . . or maybe not. I dunno. (*shrug*) No biggie. . . . It’s funny how Kiba figured it out, though. (Then again, he could probably smell it. XD) . . . . Um, you spelled “pregnant” as “pregnate”. . . . Oh jeez, men are such wimps when it comes to female problems (beg pardon, Sasuke). . . . Okay, I can see Kiba smelling period-blood early, but I’m a little surprised that he’s not grossed out by it. . . . (*snicker*) “Don’t finish your question, because it’s rather obvious.” And (XD) Naruto’s sneaking hand! (*giggles*) . . . . Heh. Kiba deserved that one. ^^ I feel bad for Sasuke. I mean, “is nothing sacred?!” as my parents would joke. ^^

It was funny. ^^
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From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Chapter 16: Interesting chaos. The village is going crazy. . . . And Itachi¡¯s at large once again.
I like how protective Naruto is. And how the Kyuubi¡¯s pointing it out to him.
(*sigh*) Really, Tsunade. If you¡¯re going to blame yourself, do it for picking such weak-assed ANBU. They should¡¯ve known better than that. (MEAN CRITICISM HERE, YOU DON¡¯T HAVE TO READ ¡æ I mean, I¡¯ve seen movies where innocent 10-year-olds have played tricks like that and got away with them. And Itachi¡¯s, like, 19? 20? And a prodigy? He could¡¯ve done way better, and the ANBU could¡¯ve been waaay sharper.) . . . . Question: Where are all the girls in this?
I like Itachi¡¯s line: ¡°Don¡¯t be like that.¡± (*shiver*) . . . . You do a really good job when you make Itachi creepy in these scenes. . . . Come on, Sasuke, you can do this, come onnnn. . . . HELL YEAH, that was cool! =D The snake genes have also kicked in, eh? I like that part with the spitting venom. =D ¢¾
That was a cool image, of Sasuke going all snakey like that. I liked it. ¢¾ . . . . So Naruto and Sakura left, too? That surprises me. Oh yeah, and I wonder what it means that Sasuke went directly to Orochimaru like that. Sounds ominous to me.
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From ANON - Anon on June 10, 2008
Chapter 15: I love how drained Sasuke seems in this situation. I like how he says “let me be, I can handle this.” . . . . “Hmmm, I see this village still likes to drug people.” Like you’re one to talk, ‘Rochi-kun. You do/give out drugs all the time. 9_9 . . . . I wouldn’t imagine Neji being the one to protest at this point. Kiba maybe. . . . I guess Sasuke inherited his jerky attitude from his dad, huh. . . . LOL, Naruto heard me! XDD
Oh please. I thought both Itachi and the ANBU were cleverer than that. . . . Too bad, so sad, ANBU. (How you got that rank, I have no idea. That’s just embarrassing, falling for something like that. -_-) . . . . Pssh. Call me a coldhearted bitch of a bastard, but this rape scene seems cheap to me. I can’t imagine he’d really rape this girl just because she’s like Sasuke, especially when Sasuke’s somewhere in town. I mean, if I were Itachi, I’d consider the girl to be a total waste, and possibly even get angry at the fact that she looks so much like Sasuke. In short, I think this rape scene was pretty unnecessary. . . . Wow, that is pretty sick. But like I said, there wasn’t much drama behind it; not enough suspense to make it really vivid. It seems more like Itachi’s just wasting his time.

The story seems to be going somewhere to me.
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