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By : DevilnBlue
  • From ANON - Meme lord on August 12, 2014
    This sounds...very familiar. Did you upload this elsewhere? I remember it being finished though.
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  • From ANON - Silvry on July 18, 2011
    AS usual I get wrapped up in your stories and it is an emotional onslaught. You made Sasuke so dang cute with the kiss and his childhood memories but it was frustrating to see him with a closed off way of thinking sometimes. Like with the gay thing and the anti punk but I guess that is to be expected with this version of his rearing. And poor Itachi! My heart fell for him, you had to make it so helpless for the eldest bastard huh? hahah no hard feelings it makes for a great story and at least he has Sasuke.

    And even though you said the mom drama kicked in again, which it did, I feel like it was a compliment rather than a dominant theme this time. It was more like an explanation and sympathy fueler for the main problem of Naruto's health. So don't worry about it being to strong.

    But by far my favorite part was the stolen kisses. SO sweet and when he was discovered and when Naruto was actually awake my heart jumped in panic along with Sasuke. It was so cute and relatable and mortifying at the same time. Well done you deserve a cute scene award trophy. I shall find a black smith or molder to make one for you.

    as usual i cannot wait for more. But your time until september plan is fine with me as long as i know i get more haha :3 I'm greedy like that.
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  • From ANON - Talltree-san on July 11, 2011
    You know up until now I had passed this story up so many times. What was I thinking, this story is so awesome XD!
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  • From ANON - TheScouticus on July 10, 2011
    That you so much for posting this story, it's so good. The way you've presented Naruto's reaction to his mother and the way he's trained himself all seem very believable, and the way you've described the way he feels when his mother expects him to be Rini, instead of Naruto is very realistic, and it was incredible to read words that described almost the way I felt growing up, (though, it wasn't because of my mother's sorrow, it was because I'm FTM transgendered.) may I add, in a much better way than I could ever describe it.
    I hope you don't mind, but after I read this, and I was feeling really inspired with the combination of the amazing and realistic writing and the way you described the outfits and appearances and such, that I couldn't resist drawing some fanart, it can be found here of you take out the spaces. http://iluvneko mimi.deviantart .com/#/d3l mp2e
    I'm sorry it's sideways, but I uploaded it really quickly and didn't realize my scanner was set to "landscape". Please don't mind that it's on lined paper either. It was just a quick sketch I found good enough to put up on DA.
    Thank you for writing and posting such and amazing piece of work, Update soon please!
    -TheScouticus
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  • From ANON - Silvry on April 10, 2011
    I am seriously going to die. You left it at a cliff hanger like THAT, and now I am becoming homicidal. Seriously non reviewers watch your backs. Anyways it is really hard to find a talented writer let alone one with such an amazing story line, and I am not far from begging. Sigh... I just realized I may be showing signs of addiction and or madness....
    Please for the love of god update. I assure you I am one who would sooner bite off her tongue than to beg for a story. I more often than not abandon stories that do not update but I cant bring myself to abandon any of yours. Yeah now I am 100% sure im addicted to all of your stories.
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  • From ANON - Silvryfang on February 07, 2011
    I am absolutely hooked now. Even though this story puts poor little Naruto through hell and I want to off his mother, I can't look away. And the resent cliff hanger is a killer. As an amature writer I must admit that cliff hangers are one of a writers sadistic pleasures but as a reader I hate them. Argh! I can't wait for the next chapter and I will probably sulk for a long time if there isnt more. Review people!
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  • From ANON - Silvryfang on February 04, 2011
    I am absolutely hooked to this story. I am only on chapter five yet I have cried at least eight times already... I think I'm slowly dieing inside from how sad it is but I find I must read on. I'm hoping light will shine down on poor little Naruto. Sadness aside this story is beautifly described and has some scenes that have me on the edge of my seet. Like the last scene in chapter 4, even though it may not have been intended it was intense. I was practicly cursing the guys out and I destroyed an object that had the misfortune of being in my hand at them time when those guys showed up.

    I love this story and I do hope you write more. If not then I will at least save these chapters, with your name of course, on my flash drive. Thats where all my favs go, like YouTube fool.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 19, 2010
    Yay for Naruto finally getting friends, sort of.
    I just found this story and read through the whole thing and I really like it and poor Naruto!
    But now it looks like things will get better.
    Thank you for writing!
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  • From ANON - Lil_lo on June 10, 2010
    I skipped 4 because I would have bugged out about if Naruto was going to be raped-which thankfully he wasn't (scarily I almost typed she). The actions scene went pretty well- I could follow the fight pretty well for the most part and I am so happy that you sparred Naruto. I'm also happy to see Sasuke get to come in. Itachi was extremely cool, and got to be the brother he can't be in the anime.
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  • From ANON - Lil_lo on June 10, 2010
    I can't believe people are giving you grief over the twin thing! I figured that they had similar hair/etc to the point where they looked identical (you don't have to be identical twins to look alike as proved by the Olsen twins being fraternal)

    I still love everything. I'm a little thrown off on if Naruto was having a flashback in chapter 3 because I assumed he was bigger and had been forced to be his sister for a while. I feel bad for him because not even the real Rini was as girly as their mom is making him.
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  • From ANON - Lil_lo on June 10, 2010
    This is really sad but extremely interesting. I feel for Naruto losing half his family and having his mom crazily reject him in a sense.It pulled me in because I like female Naruto fics.
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  • From Dorkchic on January 19, 2010
    By the way... Did Sasuke and Itachi ever have it out about Naruto? Does Sasuke know that this is because of Naruto's mother?
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  • From Dorkchic on January 19, 2010
    I say keep it Sasu/Naru. When you wrote the bit with Gaara it was more 'kindred spirits' than sweaty palms and butterflies. I love Gaa/Naru stories but in this Gaara seems like he would be the family that Naruto really needs on top of his best friend/confidant/protector. I could see the Sabaku family taking Naruto in whenever he was in need and being there for him in their own unorthodox way. And of all the things Naruto really needs- a refuge where he can actually be himself without any judgement or pressure is right near the top of the list. Love the story so far by the way. Keep it up!
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  • From Mchina44 on January 18, 2010
    hello, um well just wanted to say that your story is something else. I can honestly say that i have never read anything like this before and that is saying something. I think i have read all of the stories for sasunaru here on this site (yea i know i have no life :) ) and i haven't met so far a story that has touched me in a intellectual level. The way your mind works is something else you can honestly take this story in so many levels. You can actually make naruto's mom so desperate to keep naruto away from sasuke she can threaten him into killing herself or she could go as far as to threaten naruto about hurting sasuke.
    Me and my friend meet once every week (again no lifes wat so ever.)just to talk because we both work hectic hours and your story came up and since both of us have taken criminal profiling classes in college we saw how this story was just so unique. (by the way she gives you big props on the story too.) well going back to the point i'm just saying that your story is really great your doing a great job and if you want my two cents just let me know.:) sorry if i ranted on you i tend to that sometimes.


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  • From ANON - Anon on January 16, 2010
    Will Itachi have a renewed interest in Naruto's well-being?
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