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Reviews for The Weakened Crutch

By : LolaVerona
  • From TigeressGV on October 02, 2008
    I have a correction for you if you'd like to fix it. When Tsunade is speaking she says : “Fine, whatever. Tell him when you see him I want him in the clinic. He’s falling behind in his workload. Tell him I can have him fired if he doesn’t start doing his job, ten-year or no.” Just so you know, ten-year should be tenure, meaning a kind of contract you have at a job site that insures you always have a spot there to work.
    I'm liking the story so far. Although it's hard for me to imagine Naruto as a doctor-in-training, it's still pretty entertaining.

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  • From ANON - shadowfox on February 17, 2008
    The idea and the story itself is very good. Very Original if you ask me! I hope you update soon... No complaints and no recomendations
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 30, 2008
    haha~ if this is like 'house', i want to watch house :3

    lovely fic :D
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  • From ANON - Angel of Mint on January 30, 2008
    lovely Garra~
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 30, 2008
    sabaku..thats Garra I think :)

    lovely fic~
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 30, 2008
    oh ho! sasuke's cheating. bad boy~
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  • From ANON - silver on April 15, 2007
    This is awesome. Please continue it soon! I'm curious about your Garra. He cracked me up.
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  • From flameofthenight on February 19, 2007
    Sorry, I forgot to review for chapters 2 and 3. But basically this review will cover all of them. I really like the idea of your story. And I like your story in general. There are just some things you need to work on. Grammar,tenses, spacing (it's really hard to read those huge paragraphs!), and some punctuation. Also, could you please inform us at some point in the story how old everybody is? I'm not quite clear on that. Oh, and something I thought might help you write lemon scenes (I'm not sure if you need this I just want to help you out). http://resource.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600090008 It tells you what's true and what's myth about m/m sex. Anyway, please update! I really would like to read more. And I hope this critique helps. :)
    ~The Flame Reviews~
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  • From flameofthenight on February 19, 2007
    First chapter: I really like the imagery. You're really good at painting a clear picture of the character's surroundings. I'm seeing some mixing of tenses so you might want to work on that.
    ~The Flame Reviews~
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  • From ANON - hamfoot on February 16, 2007
    woot
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  • From on January 24, 2007
    Ouchies my eyes...you will have to tweak some things and space out more. Anyways yes every time i see 'The Weakened Crutch' I see 'the weakened crouch'.Yes yer seme is very perverted.
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