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Reviews for Smex on the bed is so cliched.

By : SuperHyperCrazyPerson
  • From ANON - - on November 23, 2007
    I guess you have another chapter coming for this cause... this little scene is extremely short. It was almost like: Hey! Look! Sex! And before you could even get a good look at it, it's gone. Go a little slower and incorporate some feeling into your stories. A good romance always gives a look into the characters insights.

    Also, as a final note, be original. I can't tell you how many times I've read the same lines over and over. Sometimes I feel a sense of Deja-vu it is so familiar. Slow down and be more creative, is my advise.
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  • From on May 25, 2007
    This is good. Keep it up.
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  • From ANON - blisblop on October 13, 2005
    Well finally! some more than decent face,well described.Don't understand the he gets all the fun bit,however kudos for this and the description of Gaara(alive!)'s eyes.Those beautiful insane eyes.
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