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Reviews for Trapped Dolphin

By : somnambulistdreams
  • From ANON - Berylia on November 26, 2005
    I love your story. It is very rare to find a depressed Iruka and you are writing it with a lot of accuracy I think. Kakashi is just cute in his kindergarden way of loving: I love you so I shall harass you because I'm to shy... Really a very good KakaIru.
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  • From Dvana on November 25, 2005
    oh, and one more thing (I'm only commenting this much because I like your story, believe it or not.... ^^ please don't take this to mean I don't!) You might want to be more vauge in Iruka's reasons for cutting. Most people who do aren't nearly so clear about the reasons, especially when they're drunk out of their minds ^^
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  • From Dvana on November 25, 2005
    I think that, despite your assertions that this latest chapter should be confusing, it was too confusing to follow easily. You're likely to lose your reader... a little confusion is all right, but too much and you have them trying to figure out what you're trying to say, not following along with the characters. it almost feels like you took the story in a way you weren't expecting, and couldn't quite bring yourself to totally discard it. ^^ Not that I blame you, it was quite sweet, but the whole "dream sequence," when coupled with the very brief explanation of what really happened, had me quite thrown off the trail of the story. If you really want to keep the dream, you might make the explanation of what really happened a little more distinct, so it overshadows the dream.

    Other than that and quite a lot of tense confusion in eariler chapters, you've got a wonderful story developing here. I'm curious to see where you take it.
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  • From ANON - snow887 on November 25, 2005
    Kakashi’s eyes shot wide open, confusion and uncertainty flooding his senses. He sat up and looked around his familiar surroundings. Wasn’t he--- hadn’t he---? He shook his head and looked around the room just to be sure. He sighed in disappointment. He was back in his own apartment, in his own bed, with no sign of Iruka anywhere. He sighed in disappointment. So, it was just another dream.

    ~~when i read this i screamed "WHAT?!!" everyone in the room was staring at me XD i so glad you updated, damn you for tricking me, but i hope everything ends happily in the end ^__^ please update soon
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  • From ANON - Ruka on November 25, 2005
    aww this was such a sweet chapter! It gives a real insight in Kakashi's feelings.
    Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - Berylia on November 02, 2005
    I really liked your story, it was well written and full of feelings dark and deep. I am longing to read next chapter.
    Thank you for writing this story.
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  • From ANON - Vox on October 31, 2005
    Ah! Why must you torture us like this! You can't just leave it hanging like that! Update! Update!
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  • From ANON - Lady Riana on October 30, 2005
    I swear to fucking god!!!! If you quit this story I will hunt you down!!! I luv this story and how dare you leave at that kiss!!!!!!! Ahhhhhhh!!!!! Im losing my mind!!!!!! I want to know whats going to happen!!!!!! T_T! Pleaze Pleaze!!!!!! Update soon!!!!!!!!

    P.s: I hope that didn't sound like an indirect threat. ^.^;
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  • From ANON - lunariol on October 30, 2005
    It was really great , as the other chapters. The characters are really well done but the ending was really frustrating... What happen next ??? Please, keep going !
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  • From ANON - Billy on October 29, 2005
    I love it!!!!!!
    This is such an awesome story!!!!!
    You have to write more!!!!
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  • From XHidaka on October 29, 2005
    Great story!!!!! KakaIru is my fav Naruto pairing by far, and you write it so well!! I've never thought of Iruka as a suicidal person, but now that I think about it, it's scarily possible. Keep writing so I can read more!!!

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  • From ANON - ramingo on October 29, 2005
    really nice fic! I love how Kakashi acts like a schoolboy with his first crush, and since Iruka's situation is rather delicate I hope you won't rush things between them!
    as for the recs you must absolutely read: "the kakashi mission", "blind", "outclassed" on ff.net, then "hunter's moon" and "the perfect trap" (you can only find them at the kakairu community -months of June and July); and last but not least read anything wrote by Isolde1 and Meleth78 (ff.net). hope you'll like all of them as much as I do
    I really like your style and story so I hope you'll write more soon!

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  • From ANON - Lady J on October 29, 2005
    MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    (please)
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  • From ANON - fyredevyl on October 29, 2005
    This story is great, and don't worry about not having a sex scene in every chapter. It took me about.....14 chapters before the boys (Sasu and Naru) got laid in my story. And those with just sex become boring after a while. You have a very nice writing style, with virtually no mistakes. I stay very entertained throughout all your chapters. Poor Iruka, he's so oblivious. Everybody knows that boys pick on the girls they like. :P
    Keep up the good work, and though you can definitely listen and incorporate reviewer suggestions, remember that it's your story and it should go the way you want it to go, whether we like it or not.
    My only complaint is that you make the chapters longer....just because I want to read more. ^_^
    And you're right; you never realize how much reviews mean to an author until you become one. They keep you going.
    I can't wait to read more!
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  • From ANON - harumi on October 28, 2005
    Oh my gosh!! This is soo good! At first I thought "Kakashi´s a jerk" but then, you started to change him an show different aspects of him. Very good! And Iruka, who would think of him this way? This inner pain and everything... I really enjoyed your story and I´m anxious to read more and more!
    Né, sorry for my English, It´s not my first language.
    mata ato de né!
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