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Reviews for Unexpected travels home

By : Belledora
  • From ANON - Sindy on November 19, 2005
    OMG. you gotta send me the story!! Gotta tell me what happens.
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  • From ANON - blisblop on September 20, 2005
    Good stuff.Solid story.Looking forward to more of this!
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  • From ANON - Suki on August 16, 2005
    MUCH BETTER! I like her a lot more! An Uchiha mayhaps? His mom even? Sister? Aunt? hmm... wonder what she looks like. The description is better too! Any pairings? *puts in vote for Sasuke x Naruto* I suppose it's still too early to rate your plot, but I'll check back in. Good so far though. Now you've got me (hook line and sinker) wondering about this lady. I KNEW YOU COULD DO IT! I'd say you should keep her (as a mystery) throughout the plot.
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  • From ANON - blisblop on August 11, 2005
    Much more to the like side.Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Suki on August 11, 2005
    Yes, interesting start, but better summary and longer chapters would do your story nicely. I'd say your three don't add up to one just yet. You should note the OC and tell us if it's an OC pairing. Particularly if she's MarySue-esque. I can't really rate the plot because there isn't one yet. This is why I would suggest longer chapters--you've broken off before I'm interested. I'm not saying what you've got is bad, I just don't feel anything for an OC character to keep me coming back for more. If I don't like her (yet) why should I care if he's supposed to kill her?
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  • From ANON - Saico on August 09, 2005
    Interesting, but you need a better summary.
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