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By : Askerian
  • From sakuraharunospussylover on March 14, 2022

    Second chapter was great. I loved how Naruto fucked that tight ass. I cummed with them cumming. Saki should have been eating Sakura's pussy. 


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  • From ANON - Anon on March 03, 2009
    “NCS”? What’s that?

    In The Rain: Lol, “The Boots”. Gotta love The Boots. ^^ ____ I can’t picture those overalls not being girly. And SAKI WEARS OVERALLS??! O.O ____ Kinda interesting. A halfway point. Somewhere between Saki and Sasuke. ____ Wonder why he’s/she’s out in the rain. ____ Even Sasuke’s not sure who the hell he’s supposed to be at this moment. =) ____ Lol, “laundry accident”. XD ♥ ____ I wonder why Sasuke’s sort of reabsorbing Saki a little. Not totally, because he’s going in and out of the character and then there’s the clothes . . . ____ I like this part: “Sasuke tenses. Saki doesn’t pull back.” He’s confused, all right. ____ Heh—can’t work around the clothes issue when it comes to getting naked. They really are some kind of physical barrier between Saki and Sasuke. It’d really hurt if someone told him “he’s hiding behind skirts”. He’s got that issue about relationships making someone weak . . . but I’ve seen some stories where Sasuke and Naruto come off as extremely strong after they’ve started a relationship. ____ Yay, she’s/he’s saying Naruto’s full name now. =) ____ Lol, “She yelps, and glares—oh hooo.” XD ____ Cute. Very cute. And I love how it alternates between “she” and “he” when giving the details. “She’s” getting more feisty, and “he’s” relaxed some. ____ Cool. I like how there’s a rough balance being discovered.

    Great story. The third part was much better than I remembered. I’ve missed Saki, all right. I should read those spin-offs other people wrote.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 03, 2009
    Chapter 2: I can understand why Sasuke’s so bitchy. Saki adds a lot to the denial. She’s offset whatever balance there was in Sasuke. So now he’s like black-and-white. ____ I wonder if the people outside can tell that Saki’s not 100% female. This also makes me wonder what would’ve happened if Saki met Haku. ____ “The General’s niece”. Where are they? How’d they get in? ____ Love how the scene sneaks in all the erotic aspects. ____ ROFL! “though he can bet her expression still screams ‘I am deathly serious/bored’ to the world.” XDDD ____ (*wince*) Why not “Naruto-kun?” ;__; ____ I wonder if Sasuke ever feels like he’s being used when he’s Saki, and if that makes him depressed at all. ____ Yeah, Saki’s absorbing a lot that was Sasuke. Turning him black-and-white. Making a sharp yin to the yang. ____ Hmm . . . I’m not sure about the “Sasuke is fucked up” bit. I know the idea, but it’s vague. It doesn’t say how he’s fucked up. It’s more like it’s . . . just assumed. ____ I doubt she’d use that lip gloss on her lips again. >_>; Naruto might hang onto it, though. ____ The things he says to her . . . they make for a good kinky scene, but they’re also a little creepy. And there’s an undertone of . . . something that can bring out the angst. ____ It’d be creepy, too, if she keeps a straight face through all of that. ____ Hmm . . . A bit anticlimactic, I think. But the scene is still good. ____ Cute ending. Got a little angsty there, but the ending line was cute. =) It’s kind of a signature to this whole universe: “You’re so pretty. My Saki.” I like it. ♥
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 03, 2009
    (I review as I read.)

    I read this story back before I started reviewing fanfics. And recently I just realized how much I’ve missed dear Saki-chan. So I’ll give a shot at reviewing this story. Then afterwards I’ll check out those other side-stories on your website. (By the way, I noticed Tangled Up In Lace by Toffee wasn’t on there. And I thought that was a pretty darn good story, too.)

    Warning: Also, I got a little rude in a couple of places. Sorry about that. And a little more critical than usual.

    Chapter 1: Man, I love the visual description of the outfit Sasuke’s wearing. It’s so much fun to imagine all those details in my mind. ____ Well, Sasuke could probably pass off as “shy”. He’s pretty quiet around people usually. I take it that the target doesn’t care too much about height? Cuz I know Sasuke’s taller than Naruto (without The Boots). ____ I like this line: “he thinks he hates being unarmed almost more than he hates wearing a stupid, frilly dress that makes him look like a porcelain doll.” At least he’s got his priorities straight. ____ “Bitch boots,” lol. ^^ ____ “Well, maybe he’ll like it,” LOL! XDD ____ “A good thing girls his age are not supposed to be well-endowed, because this would be a dead giveaway.” So they’re still, what, pre-teens? Early teens? Something around there. ____ Cool detail: “he can stay up to six minutes without oxygen.” =) ____ Another good line: “His back is ramrod straight—well no, it’s in fact a bit more arched than he’d make it usually—and it’s going to stay that way.” Sounds like a small Doom. ____ Lol, what? “Yeah, you look like you’ve got an ass now.” He didn’t before? =') ____ Heh—love how awkward Naruto is when he tries to convey that Sasuke flashed him. ^^; ____ I like the exact detail of where on Sasuke’s thighs Naruto is staring. ____ Heh—“I’m saying it now.” That’s so Kakashi. ^_^ ____ I like the description of how careful Kakashi gets when he’s applying the makeup. ____ Love how Naruto keep suggesting stuff. Like what would appeal to him. ;-) ____ Hah! XD “Now be a good girl and pucker up for Naruto.” XD ____ So much discomfort. Poor guy. =) ____ Oh come on, Sasuke. You need them to help you out here; you don’t need to be harassed during it. If you sense harassment, fight them off, and screw them if they don’t like it. (He should’ve bitten Naruto’s thumb if he didn’t like what Naruto was doing. It’s not like he doesn’t have a choice for this mission here. I could go on about it, but I’m not going to here.) ____ (*snicker*) “Apparently he’s trying to flatten the locks that stick out in the back. Well, good luck.” ^^ ____ Heh—Naruto’s unnerved at how good Sasuke looks. ^_^ ____ Nice. Like the bit about needing to hide Sasuke’s Adam’s apple. It’s funnier when the story mentions that “it’s not noticeable unless one would be expecting it.” I’m just trying to imagine him seducing somebody, and it’s only when the target looks for a very long time at Sasuke’s throat and thinks about it for a very long time, that he’ll think, “. . . Wait a second here . . .” And then it’d s~l~o~w~l~y dawn on him . . . that something’s . . . a little strange . . . and . . . is this girl’s thighs . . . a little . . . harder than I’d expect. . . ? XD ____ (*snort*) “It’s got to be ninjutsu of some sort.” I don’t know whether to be amused or annoyed whenever they assume something’s a technique. = ____ All that fabric of the outfit . . . Sasuke’s going to get overheated pretty quickly, despite how much skin it might reveal. ____ Love how Naruto is still a little weirded out. And I found this sentence confusing: “Naruto gives him a nervous glance, that gets lost on the way to his face and ends up staying on his legs a bit too long before scampering off.” The glance stays on his legs too long . . . what? (*sweat*) ____ Love the details of Sasuke’s discomfort of the furniture on his bare skin. So drafty. He’s probably going to be confused between too hot and cold; baring the wrong parts of his skin to the air and all that. ^^ ____ And not only is the outfit uncomfortable, the shoes’ll be hurting in no time. Heh—“his expression as blank and empty as he can make it.” Now that’ll be easy. ^^ ____ (*snicker*) “And then he’ll probably kill his teammate and his teacher. Just a little.” XD Love that last part. ____ Cute last line of the scene: “Today he just has to look pretty.” ^_^ ♥
    Love the dry humor in the beginning of this scene. The use of “one” for example is really humorous. =) ____ Nice description of the chaos scene. ____ Heh—love the good and bad sides to the boots. =) ____ That’s kind of a cool mental image I’m getting of Sasuke snarling while in that outfit. It’s not totally comical, for some reason—it’s creepy. =) ____ Cute, their cover among the people. ^^ ____ And there’s Sasuke’s code-name. ♥ ____ (*groan*) Not the shortened “Naru-kun”. I want the rest of his naaaaaame. T.T ____ Love how Sasuke’s trying to communicate through facial expressions underneath the facial expressions. Not the easiest thing to do, but he’s not doing too bad a job. ____ Lol, “and really, really hates his shoes.” >D ____ Hmm, dark alleyway. . . . I see. . . . (*nudge*nudge*) ____ Man, the discomfort of the outfit and the position fighting each other must be maddening. ____ “but at least things can’t get much more uncomfortable, right?” That line is DANGEROUS. ____ Say, how come you don’t italicize some of the words and instead put them in between slashes? ____ “No biggie.” Hmm . . . apparently Sasuke forgot how Naruto was looking at him earlier. ____ (!) Wasn’t expecting the sudden . . . alert that Naruto was turned on. (*blush*) Love it when it sneaks up on someone in the story. ____ “Yeah, well. Sorry. You make a really pretty girl.” No means no, Naruto. (And don’t give me crap about he didn’t say “no” exactly.) Sasuke, if you don’t like it, say no; and if you do like it, enough protesting. ____ Come on, guys, you can deliver cooler threats than that. And I would’ve expected Sasuke to have some sharper comebacks for Naruto. The indignity is not worth it. ____ Jeez, they’re thirteen? õ.Ô ____ Basically, Naruto’s holding both Sasuke and the mission hostage. If you ask me, it’d be more in character if those roles were reversed. I’m aware of Naruto doing reckless things that could endanger a mission or somebody else . . . but his heart would be in the right place when he does it. Sasuke on the other hand . . . might cheat for his own ends. The roles seem to be switched in this scene. Maybe if Sasuke gave more indication that he liked it, I wouldn’t be so bothered. ____ “. . . Really sorry, Sasuke. But . . . Well. Sorry.” PA-THE-TIC. ____ “And it’s far from the ideal moment to fight.” Not really. Scream rape. You’ll get away with it temporarily enough; and then you can make a get-away (maybe ditching the boots so you can run on your own). ____ There, Naruto. Sasuke just said “stop.” ____ Gotta admit, though. Naruto’s got a point when he calls Sasuke a cocktease. I’ll give him that. ____ Ahh, now it’s getting hot. ____ Now, while I love the direction the scene is going . . . and, yes, I’ll admit, I like the actions Naruto’s taking (they’re a turn-on) . . . that’s pretty coldhearted to say “you were gonna kill me already anyway” and use that as an excuse to molest someone against their will. As a suggestion, you might want to put in the summary “Dub-Con” or something to give us a heads-up. ____ “But it feels good, in a way—but he didn’t choose that—but he can’t do anything about it.” I’m guessing the intent is to say “he’s turned on against his will.” Might want to work on that a little more. As it is, the message I’m getting is that him being powerless is greater than the arousal. And that kind of takes away from the desire in the scene. Unless, he becomes addicted to this later (like I’ve read in some spin-offs of this story and maybe chapter 2 of this story) . . . but that doesn’t mean he likes it. It’s very confusing and unclear. There’s no real clear feeling about him liking this. It sounds like the case of he doesn’t have a choice when his body responds. Still, the visual description of every little movement is good. Just work a little more on how Sasuke’s feeling. (And preference-wise, I’d rather he not be used like this against his will . . . but that’s just my preference, and it has no ground here.) ____ Mm—if Naruto has such a hard time with genjutsu that they have to keep absolutely still, how is it that he can move enough to explore Sasuke’s body? ____ Despite my moral code raging, the progression of the lemony parts is a turn-on. ____ Heh—Naruto laid on the compliments all at once. ^^ ____ Heh—Sasuke made a discovery, it looks like. He likes being called “pretty”. ^^ ____ Clever about how they’re checking for genjutsu. Though I would’ve thought they’d just use that “Kai” technique to dispel it instead of going through all this. ____ Boy, the suspense is killing me. ____ Love the visual image I’m getting of those guys smoking while Naruto and Sasuke are hiding in the background . . . and doing what they’re doing. ____ Man, Naruto’s a tease! ____ I’m hoping that it’s just a case of Sasuke not trying very hard to pull away—not hard at all, actually—instead of Naruto holding him there strong enough that he can’t resist. ____ Man, that was so close. I’m surprised that Naruto didn’t, you know, go all the way with intercourse right there. Not that I’m complaining. ____ This is funny: “It’s time to go; he’s had enough of hiding. He’s not a doll; he’s a ninja.” I thought ninjas hid as well. =) (And that must be uncomfortable to walk in those panties now. More uncomfortable than before, I mean. He probably can’t wait to get home and change out of this outfit.) ____ This is interesting: “Saki-chan looks at her boyfriend shyly. Sasuke’s eyes tell him that this never happened.” I wonder if Naruto can see both or is getting just one of those messages.
    I can totally understand why Sasuke would be more aggressive in fighting. Aside from the insecurity, he could also be mad that Naruto molested him without his permission. That’s bound to make anyone angry. ____ This is an awesome line: “He’s crushing on the soft side of a guy who seems to be made entirely of hard edges.” ____ I wonder why Sasuke decided to continue the “Saki-chan” game. Does he figure it’s the only way?

    It’s an interesting concept. It makes you want to look at the different psychological levels (which is one reason why there are so many spin-offs, I think).

    Sorry if this review came out a little bitchy in places. T.T
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  • From Anissa34 on April 01, 2008
    I really love these one-shot ficlets, so much so that in my own fic (Sasuke's Return) I plan on using Saki-chan in there. Well,... that is if I could have your permission to do so? If you want to review it I could send you the chapters and everything... it's just that she hasn't been announced yet within my fic, but will be in the sequel... it complicated! I just wanted to get your approval first, if you don't want me to use your character's name I can come up with another... Because in my fic Saki-chan isn't a crossdresser, she is Sasuke using a forbidden jutsu to make him into her. that's a spoiler BTW... hehehe

    I hope your okay with this, because if you don't contact me; then I'm going to do it and presume you are okay with it. But I really don't want to upset you in anyway; I love your fic's! My email is Leokitty34@yahoo.com

    BTW: I love the scene where Naruto is molesting Saki-chan in the alleyway in the second ficlet!
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  • From MichiTheThird on March 30, 2008
    Wow...I read this fic AGES ago and I can't believe I never left a review. How embarrassing. This fic marred me for life when I was younger- LMAO...I'm kidding! It both intrigued me and depressed me and filled me with fluffy warmth inside. XD
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  • From MikoKriszty on November 18, 2007
    This fic is amazing. I have never read anything (not just fanfic, ANYTHING) like this before - a freak who crossdresses and fuck his best friend so he can relax from the stress of his real life. And his best friend, who is in love with him, and plays along the whole weird freaky act.
    Please write more chapters! I think in 1-2-3 chapters Sasuke should kinda lose his Saki side, and melt with it. What I mean is that with time, he should get used to the situation, and cope with it: let Naruto touch him when he's Sasuke, but still be an asshole and don't allow him to protect him. However, in bed, he should be the submissive one, with shared feelings and stuff - something like he was in the third chapter.
    This was a very VERY enjoyable read - and not just because of the smut. It was interesting to see a glimpse of a frajile, unsure, protection and reassurance hungry Sasuke. The whole weird situation was so unlike any other I have read before that it totally fascinates me.
    Please keep writing - all your fics amaze me.
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  • From oohshiny on October 21, 2007
    uwaaaa!!! crossdressing!sasuke isnt nearly common as i wish it was.... *sigh* could you email me when you update this fanfic? my email address is deannathx@comcast.net
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  • From PlueOfDoom on August 24, 2007
    Awsome!!! I'm reading pick up the phone and that's fun also. I see why these people would be inspired though! Your story is great! Great job! ^_^
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  • From DeadlyTeardrops on July 23, 2007
    This fanfiction is one of my fave all the time! Saki-chan really rules! very original plot and all makes it enjoyable to read. By the way. I have drawn fan art to your fic. I'm not that good at drawing so forgive me if it's not that good, but hopefully you will like it;

    Saki-chan & Naruto http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/60432434/

    ja ne!

    Ame Nishi aka Deadly Teardrops
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  • From Vague on April 28, 2007
    Hello Author,
    I am a huge fan of yaoi and have started a site archiving all the good yaoi fiction. I am glad to say that your story has made it into the archive. Congratulations on telling a truly moving tale.

    About the Archive:
    The archive is nothing more than a site which links directly to good stories. I do not claim your story as my own but rather I encourage others to read and review it as it deserves that recognition.

    Your story is linked at http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php?showtopic=31. If you would like it to be removed from the archive or are concerned about anything then please send me an email. I will be glad to answer or remove it. Thank you.

    Vague
    Administrator of the Yaoi Fanfiction Archive (YFA)
    http://z4.invisionfree.com/YFA/index.php
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  • From ANON - conquerors star on January 11, 2007
    awww i love this, you should definitely make a plot for it.,. pleaaaaasee? ^_^
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  • From ANON - TenshiXXX on September 02, 2006
    I thought I was going to faint when I read this. Naruto's right. Sasuke would make a prettier girl than Sakura any day. Funnily enough, that knowledge doesn't freak me out at all. I got chills when Naruto started to rub his cock between Sasuke's ass cheeks through his silk panties. My expression was basically: o_O *drools*
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  • From ANON - kaesaku on August 28, 2006
    haha~
    cute story..
    ..loves this line -> He's always known Sasuke was fucked up.
    f'course, he is!
    with the way he's working that disguise.. tsk, tsk~ ;p
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  • From ANON - Jyari on August 02, 2006
    I find this little fic very good.
    I'm not sure why.
    Maybe it's the porn.
    Maybe it's the story.
    I don't know, but the idea of Sasuke being so fragile is... I don't know. It seems awfully original to me, and makes me wonder why I haven't read it bofore. But- thank you. ^-^
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