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By : Trollmia
  • From ANON - Celen on August 30, 2005
    This is so cute so cute so cute cute omg.

    KRHM. Yep, I liked it. Oh well, I loved it. ^^ ShikaTema is my favourite Naruto-pairing, soo... And your writing skills are unbeatable. I'd rate this 10 stars if I could.
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  • From ANON - blueinferno on August 16, 2005
    *hugs* thank you so much! i love shikamaru! and theres so little with him in!! again, good writing style i dont know how you do it! but ya got me!!
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  • From on July 15, 2005
    Damn! That's all I can say! That was awesome! Even though I'm against the Shika/Temari angle (SHIKAMARU IS MINE! lol), that was a great read! The descriptions were kick-ass. I like how he used his shadow bind no jutsu to get her to take her own shirt off in the end. That was cool. Everything was so detailed, I could almost feel everything Temari felt. (Which felt good. lol). Keep writing! You've got quite a talent for lemons. Let me know if you write more!!!!
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  • From ANON - Black-Draco on July 04, 2005
    Great work! Nice story you've made there :D
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 02, 2005
    Nice! I am impressed. This isn't my favorite pairing, but this story was often very beautiful. :)
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  • From ANON - The Gandhara on July 02, 2005
    Quite good. I just think Temari was a tad too hesitant, when she's the kind of woman that never beats around the bush.
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  • From ANON - nonengel on April 11, 2005
    very good
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  • From ANON - dark_Angel on April 10, 2005
    That was a pretty interesting read, could you try and see if you could write a fanfic for one of my challenges? =P keep it up
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  • From ANON - PiPiNsSong on April 10, 2005
    Okay, it was good. Not great, but a good read. Two things that made me twitch, though:

    "She tasted like the spring breeze that was blowing over the treetops outside the tent" HOW THE HELL DO YOU TASTE A BREEZE?! unless it blows on you with your mouth open and leaves and pollen and bugs fly into your mouth. then you close it, crunch crunch, and mmmm......spring breeze tastes gooooood. But I doubt Shikamaru would stand in an open field with his mouth open, letting things fly into his mouth so he could taste the spring breeze.
    Another thing "...her virgin membrane..." Just say hymen. Come on. I hate it when people try to get all descriptive with sex parts. Like "love tunnel" "honey jar" yadda yadda. Hymen, it's two syllables. It's a lot better on the tongue than virgin membrane, don't you think?

    Btw, the way Shikamaru talked to Temari....I guess I'll let that go. He was way OOC in my point of view, but then again, we've never seen Shikamaru in love/lust before, so....

    Anyway, keep up the writing.
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  • From KuroKen on April 10, 2005
    Very very well done. You managed to develop the characters and evolve them from their manga/anime childhood
    selves into the young adults they'd grow into. Great way to use their jutsus as part of the story, to say nothing of
    the nicely paced setup to the very tasteful erotic scene.

    Hope you feel compelled to write more, it is a wonderful piece as a one shot, but it has viable potential as an
    ongoing story (I mean if the first time was that good, they will probably get better with practice)

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  • From ANON - Monkey Lady on April 10, 2005
    Sorry, meant to say YOU did a good job! :D My bad.
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  • From ANON - Monkey Lady on April 10, 2005
    I enjoyed that. I did a good job. It's nice to see some new pairings about, as much as I love the more worn ones. Keep it up! :)
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  • From ANON - Isilme on April 10, 2005
    Kyaa I was dying to read a really hot Shikamaru/Temari, I love the pairing! This one is very skillfully written congrats! ^^
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  • From Kieshar on April 10, 2005
    Yes....that was very cool and...*cough* hot. I always like that pairing. Nicely done.
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