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Reviews for Kuroyashi

By : MindGames5150
  • From ANON - Jadetiger on March 24, 2005
    Well a summery isn't much to go on. you can have the best summery in the world, but if you got shit for tallent, then your out of luck anyway. I'll save my jugment till i see what you can do.
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  • From ANON - huh on March 24, 2005
    Why don't you delete this and come back when you have a real story?
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  • From ANON - Bad Luck on March 24, 2005
    I know you're probably new to this whole thing and such, but if you're going to post a story, it would be nice if you saved the summary for the proper place, and used this space the way it should be used, for an actual chapter. No body likes summaries, and if you want our attention, that's not going to cut it. People want to see results, not just what you say you're going to do.

    As well... I think you should try a story without original characters. See how you work with the characters that already exist before you try and change it with your own people... A lot of the more mature readers have a habit of staying away from authors that create their own people. It's not that I doubt you can do it effectively, it's just that more often than not, authors have a tendancy to make their characters the main focus of their story, and no one comes to the Naruto section to see some original characters, they come to read about the characters that Kishimoto-sempai has already written about.

    I do hope you'll take this as the constructive criticism that it is and not be struck down thinking this is a flame. I'm just trying to help you see what it is that we as readers want. When you learn that, you end up learning how to properly write a story so that it serves the people as well as being what you want. Please e-mail me if you have any concerns or even if it's just to yell at me and defend your point. I will applaud your efforts.

    Please keep my concerns in mind when you post the REAL chapter.

    Bad Luck
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  • From ANON - B on March 24, 2005
    er. no.
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  • From Kusachu on March 24, 2005
    sounds interesting enough...i'd check it out if there was anything to check.....o_O
    we'll have to see when you start posting it! *wink*
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  • From ANON - Heather on March 24, 2005
    i think that sounds like a pretty cool story. i say go for it! besides, with a little sasunaru action, how could you go wrong?!
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