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By : SasukeB
  • From ANON - katie on November 10, 2005
    i like your story but i think you couldadd more detail AND MAYBE SASUKE GETS HELP FROM NARUTO AS SASUKE HELPS NARUTO
    but please keep going u have to thank yah

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  • From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2005
    crap
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  • From ANON - Shez on February 24, 2005
    WTF. I never thought I could see OOC, completely illogical actions, lyrics that have no correlation to the story AND so many exclaimation marks in one freaking story. You proved me wrong. Wow. Or, should I saw "Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" like you would. Good Lord. Excuse me while I bang my head against a wall for a bit.
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  • From ANON - hogo-chan on February 24, 2005
    its was pretty good but alittle too fast paced! great job though! ^_^
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  • From ANON - ochiba on February 24, 2005
    I hate it x_x;; there is absolutely NO characterization, and this is probably one of the worst sex scenes I've ever read (considering that your prose indicates that you can't distinguish the physical from emotional, you come across as too young and immature to even be allowed on this site), also you chose a song fic with lyrics just as asinine as the fic itself on top of that it's a song about girls x_x WTF?! This was bad. Bad. Bad. And afterwards worse. Absolutely painful to read.

    This isn't a flame... I don't think. ^_^;; I'm just responded to your request. I'm actually surprised that you want negative feedback! I don't really like giving bad reviews as I think to each his own, but since you *asked* for it and this fic was so bad it turned my mood down a notch... well, this is just my two yen on the matter. I've got nothing against you, la, but you really do come across as under-age and under-read. My only constructive criticism for you is to suggest that you read more and write less.

    There is an art to prose. This is not it.
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  • From ANON - Er... on February 23, 2005
    It wasnt very smooth reading. Rather chunky. Not too much depth to the story either. Try to work on that. Description helps make something flow better.
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