Reviews for Konohagakure's Sexual Healing Unit (Revised)By : ShroudedShinobi92 |
"You're great at sucking cock Tsunade it feels like I'm on cloud nine, now I'm going to... I'm going to..." - Minato in Ch. 1
"Fuck this is too good I'm going to... I'm going to..." - Sasuke in Ch. 2
"Sakura I love your mouth and tits wrapped around my cock, now I'm going to... I'm going to..." - Naruto in Ch. 3
"Your pussy is going to drain me dry Hinata; now I'm going to... I'm going to..." - Naruto in Ch. 4
"I love your pussy Ino-chan its squeezing me too tight, and I'm going to... I'm going to..." - Neji in Ch. 5
This is pretty weak, 92-chan; even for you...
You see what you're doing, 92-chan?! You see?! You hurt this guy's eyes and soul! How long before you go after our families?! How long?!
Your "stories" hurt my eyes and soul.
Tell me... Was there, 92-chan, at any point at all where you actually believed I wouldn't review?
See? I don't just quote 'DBZ'; sometimes it's Ultron...
LET'S DO THIS!!!
Genuine question: can you yourself point out how this story is in any way different from your other masterpiece (relatively speaking) 'A Kunoichi's True Nature'? What can we expect to be different? Will there be new paragraphs for you to misspell? Will you eventually learn that 'farewell' is one word? Will you acknowledge that no one takes your stories as seriously as you do, despite the fact that you just kinda fart the same paragraphs together and shit? Will ANY female have a different body type, or do they all have curves that appear to be in all the right places? Will your Naruto have a dick that two hands can't fit around? Will creamy thighs be visibly apparent with muscle intermixed with fatty tissue? Will Naruto hear sounds from noise with his sun kissed ears instead of his chemically bleached butthole? Will springing dicks be 'sproing-oing-oing'ing in women's faces?
Speed reading round!!! GO!!! copycat is super reading #1!!!
(Ch. 3 only)
'I present my latest masterpiece to you.' - We wish you wouldn't...
'With that being siad' - C'mon, you just got started...
'Extending out oneof her well moisturized hands Sakura turned the knob opening this office door wide enough for her to step inside...' - What a mouthful of redundancy!
'Tsunade shook her head in agreement to Sakura's burninginquiry' - Shook her head in agreement? Strange... Nodding is more commonplace.
'Creamy thighs were clearly apparent, and they were complimented by curvaceous hips that Naruto noticed were in all the right places...' - One question answered...
"Move your faster and squeeze those tits around my fat cock harder Sakrua I'm getting closer to cumming, now remember take it all in when I do." - I find it incredible that I wrote fat Anko being forked by old Akamaru, yet your sex scenes are way more awkward.
'Author's Closing Thoughts' - There was thought involved?
'Thus the curtain falls on the Third Chapter everyone, cut there's no need to worry more is on the way; now I'm hoping you're enjoying the material that I'm producing for your enjoyment.' - ... Oh my Kami...
A new story from 92-chan!!!
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