Reviews for A Kunoichi's True NatureBy : ShroudedShinobi92 |
This quarantine business has me knackered... Anyway!
Ch. who cares anymore?
... the crickets were... 'churping'? See, now that's beyond mistyping or fumbling fingers; that's sounding-out and trying... and in your case, failing.
Skimming to the latest paragraph, I was confused... Did Naruto shove a kunai down a woman's gullet and kill her? Or was that referring to his wiener, a sharp deadly tool that only brings misery?
And lastly, more of a personal question, as you do not consider writing part of 'real life schedules'; on your bio page, you say delays in your story are due to 'real life schedules'. Being that you update or add more to your halfsies - and at an incredible pace! - can we infer that you, by your own admission, have no life?
...
This copycat awaits your answer. You have one hour... One hour!!
🥬
Ch. dear God 26
Kushi-chan? The fuck?! Everyone know Kush-chan is waaaaay more SUPER KAWAII~#1!!
Ch. 24 again... It's like an update, right? I kinda feel like a buzzard, circling this story... waiting for the next hunk of meat to drop.
'Recalling what Samui had instructed regarding giving men great pleasure Karui funneled some of her chakra into her fingertips, an electrical surge went down to her loins which acted like a vibrator driving the man insane as he picked up steam spurred on by her actions while whispering into her ear. "I didn't know you could do that Karuichan; if you keep it up I'm going to cum soon." Choji uttered these words admist heavy pants and animalistic grunts, and he was getting ready to dump his first load into her.
"If you must know Choji-san I call it my Electrical Stimulation technique, and I want you to cum inside me." Hearing this he couldn't resist her plea as his cock began to swell, this was one of the sighns (Jesus...) that he was about to unload while pumping his hips at a sparratic tempo after she begged him to stop holding back; so he thrusted with half of his full force making that gorgeous body quake as if an earthquake was erupting deep within her gaping pussy.'
Your run-on paragraphs, use of the word 'thrusted', mismatched letters, and strange dialogue... Choji-chan never pressed or even asked about the technique, but she tells him as if annoyed. 'Pfft, if you must know, fat ass, my pussy be poppin' with dem electurcity!' And Choji being shocked derp! by this technique after a good while of humping just to say he's gonna cum soon implies that he wasn't even close, meaning, 92-chan, that her cunny-cunny-cunt-drop ain't as tight as you'd have us believe. Pretty sneaky, 92-chan... but not nearly as sneaky as when you posed as SnapDragonChampion25 and broke my heart!!! 💔 A copycat can cry...
Sproing-oing-oing!
Ch. what's done so far of 24
I just realized that I rambled and didn't actually review! So excuse the crap outta me! On the last chapter of 'A Kunoichi's True Nature'! 92-chan picked on the only girl who couldn't be forked by Tayuya: Tayuya herself. Goodbye, little Kunoichi. Tsunade was next to be targeted. Surprisingly, Shikamaru steps in! Fueled by the idea of 'sporting-oing-oing'ing Tayuya's ass, he lunges into bed! His immense speed and power left Tayuya mewling, and like everyone else, just plain unsatisfied...
But we didn't need to know ANY of that, because it has nothing to do with Ch. 24. No mention, no reference, no conflict or resolution. The 'climax' of the story patters down with the grace of 'The knight fought and killed a dragon, the end.' The ending is hardly the fun of your 'writing' style; this is:
'Karui simply shook her head in a negative fashion...'
While a normal writer would put 'She shook her head' or 'shook her head no', you describe its meaning like we couldn't guess. I've mentioned it before, but I saw it while skimming, so... Well, I found a bunch while skimming. Rather than put everything down, I'll just put the start of these paragraphs and just put my initial reaction:
'Powerful thighs intermixed with muscle and fat were clearly visible'-never get tired of this paragraph...
'swirled his tounge around inside, making sure to strike all of the pleasurable locations within his lover's gullet'-how?!
'Karui puts up a valiant effort in the begining fighting against the man's aggressive advances, but it was a futile effort because Choji was ultimately found the victor'-RAPE WHISTLE!!! NEVER WORKS!!!
'Plaving her clothes on his broad shoulder the male gently cradled the woman'-Plaving?
'There was a proble with her paln'-uh-oh
'Resting both of her index fingers on this tricky guardian Karui applied a bit of force to this process, and when she did it finally relented with a loud "pop" as it flew around the entire room; lickily for Choji it landed near his feet'-... What?
'an erotic "sproing-oing-oing" sound'-didn't Shiky-chan 'sproing-oing-oing' Tayuya?! So it's the 'Sproing-oing-oing' no Jutsu-chan!
'Leaning in the male whispered into her ear while sultry breath was escaping his masculine lips, even the tone in his voice was seductive in nature. "If you're stiill hungry Karui-chan you can feast on my meat all you want, besides its all for you anyway."'-wow
'she swirled her tounge around in a circular fashion lclenaing it'-yep
And that's what we got so far... Fare well... for now.
Best regards,
copiery-chin, the Snappy-chan Admirer
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Ch. 23 (Jeez... where do you find the time?)
Your 'pont' has not been made, sir or madam! And you know that you can call me c0p13r, copier, the infamous copycat, copy-chan, copy-woot-channy-wanny, little 'c', THICK 'c', c3, small-penised 'c'; any kind of 'c'. Saying 'trollish types', the imaginary people who read your story will think that you get any sort of reviews from anyone but moi. Let's face facts here, my reviews get more reviews than this sto... ahem, copy-and-pasted set of words with 'NARUTO' names thrown in.
I've noticed, since you were Legion and now are just one, you stopped birthing more and more redundant stories. You've given up on the medical ninja story, which was basically just the same premise as this one, only the kunoichi were usually in the hospital to fulfill their sexy duties. So I was just curious what goes on in your tasty, tasty brain... With all these chapters, really, nothing's coming to an end (which is a frightening thought). I mean, even the chapters don't end properly! They just jizz and roll over! No pillow talk or anything; just 'I'm cumming, and now sleepy.'
And going back to reviews, I just gotta. You reviewed I think two stories a month or two ago (not including my 'Samui's Service') and I just felt that... Well, I don't know how I felt! I was smiling, but my heart just went 'wow...'. It's hard to review and not put your actions into narrative, huh?
This copycat nods with his masculine head and places a sun-kissed hand on the orange book with your name on it. He speaks in a sexy, constructive voice that you can read with your sun-kissed eyeballs.
I forget what those stories were, but they fell off the face of the Earth when you gave some constructive criticism. Like they saw you giving them advice and asked themselves 'Do I really suck this much that he thinks he can advise me with this creepy review?! Ugh, I'm done.' Well done, 92-chan; cleaning up this site one crappy author at a time.
Now let's go to your internet (or unternet). What kind of internet shuts down your current page, that you can only copy-and-paste a few misspelled paragraphs at a time? I imagine a sonar of sorts, blipping through your area, flashing on your WiFi for just a moment. Then I imagine you with laptop or whatever in tow, chasing the blip to maintain your internet long enough to give us another halfsie chapter when it would just be easier to write on some kind of Word program (Microsoft Word, Notepad, etc.)
I would say that I'm trying to help you... but you've shunned my advice and spelling long ago. Hell, I don't even know if your unternet lasted long enough for you to read this review! I sucked when I started off, but by listening to my readers, I can now proudly say that each story I put out gets almost FIVE reviews, and I...! Five? Holy hell, what's happened to me?
This copycat takes a break from less-than-constructive to look with his butt-piercing eyes at recent stories that get ample reviews per chapter. Sun-kissed.
Aha! Based on Pharaoh Ramese and Fritz the Cat, stories that get a lot of reviews are often being just slammed. My 'Of Uzumaki & Jinchuriki' holds true to this hypothesis. And all these Kushina stories would have to follow 'Uzumaki Bath Time'... Now I look like one of those slut Kushina authors. Dammit, 92-chan... Farewell (which is one word, not that you'll care.)
Your copy-chan,
copiery-sama-sensei-chan
🍌
PS
You randomly spelled 'randomly' wrong in your message on 'Samui's Service'. Your English Teacher is displeased.
I only come here to read copier's amazin reviews.
Ch. 22
'melt the ice so it could be used as lubricant'
Ice/cold water as lubricant? Yeesh! Ever notice the friction of penetration when you have sex in the shower?
Ch. 22 (or what there is so far... I mean, don't the Dragons Who Run This Site have a rule explicitly saying that you can't post halfsie - or 'preview' - chapters? If it were me, those stories would be taken down without so much as an email notification! Ahem'ConsequencesofRain'Ahem...)
Anyway!
'Once the man had throughly explored Ino's mouth' - told ya. I even shared how to spell sufficiently! I guess the cost was too high.
The sad thing about your writing/copy and pasting ways is that you don't even follow your own stories story line. Ino's begging for some Sai sausage at one point - 'I want it; no i need it so badly' (I kept it as you wrote it) - but then a few copy-and-pasted paragraphs later, another copy-and-pasted paragraph says she trying valiantly to resist him! Does she want a dicking or not?! If it's a kunoichi's duty to be forked, why do they resist in each and every one of your chapters? And for no reason and to no effect.
Ino or whoever encounters a lad, and she gets soooo horny-chan. Mmm! 'Let's sex!' his sun-kissed ears hear her pillow-soft lips say with her lusty voice box in her throat while perfectly manicured fingernails unleash his cock with an erotic 'sproing-oing-oing' sound that she hears with her pale ears. She does not undress, but he kisses her so hard with his masculine lips against her pillow soft lips while his tan-kissed fingers grab her pillow soft breasts with his hands that are sun-kissed and not pale but tan and bronzed. She resists him, and then leans back against a nearby wall. She doesn't wait; can't wait. 'Fill me,' she tells him so that he can hear her totally desperate need to be forked! Fatty thighs intermixed with muscular power were clearly apparently visibly visible when they powerfully separated their fatty muscle. Naruto jumps at her, and his erotic penis goes into her smelly vagina. She resists some more. 'I want this! No i need this! No i deserve this! No i planned this! No i!' But Naruto has already cum-chan, and they fall asleep on a sun-kissed mattress lying in the middle of the alley... where the homeless usually fornicate to forgot their woes... or constipation.
Not bad for my first honest attempt at your style of writing, yeah? Lot less spelling errors too... and about as long as your usual first chapters!
I expect full payment for this work on Craig's List
You know, I could be finishing the new chapter of 'Animal Handling' now, or wrapping up 'The Promised Title'. Instead... I signed in to review the man who I thought was a woman who I thought loved me... You see how I suffer for you, Snappy92-chan?
Ch. 20 (How?)
All the repeated 'thighs of intermixed muscle and power' and erotic sproing-oing-oings notwithstanding... Your obviousness has become too obvious now. What I'm saying is you've used your whole arsenal of paragraphs, so now you don't have new chapters; you just have new names and a new order to the paragraphs. Example:
"Once the man was finished exploring every location within her gullet"
We all know you wanted to say 'suffiently sastified'. I'm tossing you a bone here: sufficiently satisfied. That's how you spell 'suffient'. I expect payment on Craig's List for this precious information.
I try, Siklos, I try...
Ch. 19, I guess?
"Once the man was suffiently satisfied in throughly exploring the woman's mouth his tounge"
I am suffiently dumbfounded! I'm tounge-tied! I thought I gave enough suffient pointers, but you ignore this eagle-eyed copycat!
No respect... No respect at all.
Copier is such a nice guy, always going out of his way to help students with disabilities. Proud of ya
Ch. 17 Author's Final Thoughts:
"A certain eagle eyed reader picked up a spelling mistake that I made during Chapter Fifthteen that even passed by my careful attention to detail, and I wanted to thank that author for pointing it out and keeping me on my toes."
I wouldn't say 'eagle-eyed'; more the mistake reached from the page and slapped me in the face. Also... you spelled 'Fifteen' wrong. I'm trying to help you be a siffient speller.
With regards,
your English teacher
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Ch. 17
"Once the man was siffiently satified in exploring that warm and wet mouth that slippery appendage becomes entangled with hers as they engage in an intense struggle for supremacy[...]"
Could be wrong... but I think you bought a new paragraph on Craig's List... complete with 'siffiently' good spelling.
Sincerely,
your English teacher
🍆
"I take great care in checking my spelling and grammar throughout all the lines. I'm just getting those fine points otu there"
Ch. 15 "Once the male was siffiently(what the fuck?) satisfied"
I dunno. I think you lie every time you say you doublecheck your spelling and grammar.
There are times, honestly, when I think I should stop... ... but then I remember all the time I tried to avoid you and your stories, but kept getting tricked by another of your accounts! Having fallen in love with SnapDragonChampion25 still wounds my heart... Anyway! Chapter 15!
I won't lie; I honestly had a glimmer of genuine interest when I saw Choza was making a potion of horniness for Kurenai on her wedding day. I thought 'Wow, 92-chan. Let's see where this goes!' And then I saw the journey led to a brick wall where many have run headlong into it as penance for investing interest in this chapter. A drink that ensures someone will get laid... giving it to a bride and groom on their wedding night... Don't you know how redundant it is to have assurances for sex on your wedding day? It's like washing your hands before getting in a shower; you already know the clean is gonna happen! Why wash your hands?! I thought Choza was gonna be a deceptive little fatass, not the 'I'm gonna make sure bride and groom fuck on wedding night' fairy! Argh! I'm so frustrated at myself for my own misguided anticipation! Listen, I get it; the 'NARUTO' section is infested with an abundance of adultery fics, and damned if I ain't part of the problem! But you made such a focus of Choza that I actually was - mildly - interested. But husband and wife needing alcohol to fork one another on their wedding night?! It cheapens an already cheap experience!
#nevergetmarried
I still love you, SnapDragonChampion25!... for all the pain that makes a copycat a... copyhuman...💔
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