Reviews for Foxy WomanBy : communist-fanfiction |
I really want more on this on the one hand (it's great to read and also very hot) but on the other I really dislike Kyubi here or more exactly the intended story.
This Naruto/Naruko is a great character (I cannot overstate this: I love this character here more than probably any other on this whole website) and I would really love seeing her interact (and yes, maybe including sex, or even least thoughts of it during daily interaction like with Sasuke in ch4) with other humans on the village. There are lots of great options: Sasuke, Sakura, Hinata (does Hinata still have a crush on him/her), Kiba (are they also rivals in this universe?), Shikamaru (are they also bests friends in this universe?), Kakashi, Tsunade, Jiraya, Iruka, Ebisu (oh man, underrated character), Ayame (always thought she was nice to Naruto in the show because he was a cute lonely boy), Konohamaru and his gang. Killer B, Aye, Kabuto if it ever came to that even.
Or even just moments from the Anime reimagined with this situation?
I also feel like the Kyubi pairing with her only functions narratively if him making her horny leads to her 'cheating' with someone and him punishing her for it out of jelousy. There is really not that much emotional investment on their parts without a subplot like that. But of course her actually cheating may be too much for him in the first place. So this is complicated. I'm hoping you'll show us your solution to this soon, because I really like reading those chapters :)
No sex, but a look into Naruko's mind is fun enough on its own. She's clearly perved on Sasuke before which is more than fitting considering how often in canon Naruto did to Sakura and reading about Sasuke's attractiveness objectively was a novel experience.
Otherwise things seem to be edging onwards towards a big explosion which I can already tell's going to be a great chapter.
Good points all around. I also couldn't help but lol at Kurama being so bored/horny that he'd flood Mito and Kushina with lust just as a way to pass the time and to get some free entertainment. Not blaming him, I think it's a matter of "when" for anybody sealed away in an extremely hot super-ninja's body, but the idea of it's definitely pretty entertaining.
Really liking the sexed up Naruko here, it's totally hot that she wants it that bad but isn't just becoming a dumb bimbo like most fanfics with a female POV do. Nice to see her wanting it because she just wants it, but still remains a person in there. And as far as blowjob scenes go, this was pretty choice.
Although I get the feeling that Kurama might come to regret cutting Naruko off right there. Sexy shenanigans ahoy!
So, what do you think of making Naruko Bisexual? That way we can have some girl-on-girl action, or even see Naruko in a threesome with one girl and one guy.
Also, what do you think of having Sasuke be female, while going by the name of Satsuki? As for her appearance, she will look like Mikoto, though her hair will have a bit of a spikiness to it, rather than being flat-out smooth, like her mother's.
Another thing that I was wondering, is if the Kyuubi is strictly male here, or if it can change its gender via shapshifting, depending on its mood? Since I wouldn't mind seeing a female Kyuubi schlicking to Naruko.
Finally, in regards to your hesitance to having Naruko fuck other men, because of potential jealousy from the Kyuubi. What do you think of Naruko and the Kyuubi having an open relationship, where they don't mind the other fucking other people?
That could work. As for the KuramaxKushinaxMito angle, was the fox actually attracted to them like he is Naruko? Because that could work for that particular angle, Kurama just not getting anything out of watching them fuck their husbands but losing it out of jealousy or a sense of entitlement through Naruko. Up to you though as I'm sure whatever choice you make will still be a hot one.
That's also a major relief to hear and has the future of your fic looking pretty good.
Another really good chapter. Naruko getting played with in public, unable to do much else than just hope it ends before she embarasses herself is great. Especially in front of a sensei. I really liked the bit at the end where she was so wound up that all she could do was fingerbang herself in the mirror, so desperate for a cock that imagining her juices as cum gets her cleaning them off in no time.
Naruko's thirsty as fuck, man.
Gotta say, I'm actually a lot more interested in the whole Naruko crossdressing all along part of the story than Kurama.
Especially because some of his 'friends' probably have found out during the previous events. Kiba with his nose, Sasuke, Neji (or Hinata) with his eyes. There are many great stories out there to tell about such events.
I'm with Penniless here. Naruko + Naruko being increasingly slutty + voyeur Kurama's fucking golden.
Would absolutely love to see more. :D
Not bad. Not bad at all. Nice, unique-ish premise that rarely if ever sees any use and pretty much all of my fucking attention since you're using Naruko who's criminally underused in general, even moreso in smut.
Really looking forward to seeins how Naruko teases Kurama next. It'd be great if in an attempt to get him all riled up she starts fucking random (but still attractive! Nothing worse than ugly rando's getting story time) shinobi, going from giving someone Kurama considers undeserving a real show as she rides them cowgirl to threesomes where all she can do is suck cock, talk dirty and make the shinobi feel like hot shit while inwardly Kurama's seething.
Anything to amp up the jealousy and lust for when Kurama finally gets the chance to fuck her.
In other words: long as you keep releasing chapters as good as this one, I'll definitely keep reading.
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