Reviews for Uzumaki Naruko, the Goddess of LustBy : ShroudedShinobi92 |
Where did the story go, I want to read it
Ch. 6
'those creamy thighs intermixed with muscle and fat along with those wide baby bearing hips. and the blonde could tell that they were in all the right places.'
We witness evolution... With what we got, though, I'm unsure whether to feel disappointed or not. 'The blonde could tell that they were in all the right places.' I get that it's meant to be a sultry observation, but as I've pondered before: are you underage, or is English not your native tongue? And what is unternet (surely not a mispeling of 'Internet', for your speling and grammar is spot on)? Is that the reason for these awkward descriptions? The mysteries continue...
Anyway, now that we completely fixed the problem of 'powerful thighs intermixed with muscle and fat' with 'creamy thighs intermixed with muscle and fat' (Genius!) let's move onto... the 'sproing-oing-oing' sexiness. Try having the wangs make an erotic 'wuba-uba-uba' noise when they spring out! I believe in you! Believe it!
Ch. 5
Oh... my... graciousness. You finished a chapter before posting it?! I should be dazzled and amazed, but then I went 'wait, wait! No... He left his Hyuga story's chapter unfinished; doesn't count. Or is it... she left her Hyuga story unfinished?' And then that just led me to the usual 'what are you?! Ally to good, or nightmare to you?!'
I gotta say, the most uncomfortable thing about this latest chapter wasn't that I stumbled into yaoi in my quest for the infamous 'fat, powerful, muscular thighs that are clearly visibly', it was being called one of your 'lovelies', when I have this very sneaky suspicion that you have a wiener between your legs that makes an erotic 'sproing-oing-oing' noise... Don't call me your 'perverted little lovely.' It makes me feel... so very unclean. Also, you shouldn't say we're your fellow readers when 1) readers don't msiamtch words as much as you do (I was aemzad taht I can raed tshee wrods!!) 2) you obviously don't read our... or... my... reviews; well, maybe you do with that sneaky stunt you pulled with Haishi gazing at clearly fat, visibly thighs
And one more thing! 'Het' does not stand for 'Hentai'. You're posting in the 'HETERO' (Het) section. Your mix of sexuality should be categorized in the 'General' department. ... ... Now we wait and see what you do, 92-san
The latter; in the referred-to story, I guessed the paragraph would be 'written' verbatim in one of his/her other stories/accounts, and I am correct!
Now, seeing as I'm reviewing this story again... I like how short your chapters are. Less to skim through to find what I'm looking for
Did copier call the story concept before, or is this just the guy who keeps making new accounts and posting incomplete chapters?
‘Scratching an Itch’, ShroudedShinobi92, Sept. 12
Called it!!
(Generous, you are.)
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