Reviews for Ino's New Secret TechniqueBy : ShroudedShinobi92 |
... ... ... you’re a girl this time? I mean, I’ve learned to avoid authors with ‘92’ at the end like the plague! But sometimes, you catch me off guard, you lil rascal, and I don’t realize it’s you... until I see the Author’s Note plus Additional Warnings. About the story though, since I went through the painstaking effort to sign in and review (big fan of your ‘supreme authorial power’, by the way)...
A lot of spelling and grammatical slip-ups, but I always attribute that to the haste of a writer who needs to put ideas to paper just so that the thought won’t be forgotten. Take some time, reread (or at least skim through) what you post... even if it is half a chapter.
I don’t know if you intend to change her name to Yamaka Ino instead of Yamanako Ino, so that baffled me.
Descriptions are a good thing!... in moderation... but you post these halfsie chapters with basically the same descriptions as any of its predecessors. Simplicity works when we already know what the characters look like.
Um... well, if we’re being honest, I only read halfway through this chapter of descriptions before having more than my fill. But, considering you put up half the effort of a chapter, I’m only gonna put in half the effort of reading it. So with my significant reviewer might, let this review cease!
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