Reviews for Deal with a GoddessBy : Sloth |
you've got a good story going here and i do enjoy reading it but there's just a few things about it that i wouldn't say ruin it for me but that i definitely skip over (which means if there is any important plot points in those sections i'm going to miss them) the first is the Naruto sissy boy plot. that in itself isn't so much the problem, the problem is that what i've gathered from your an's and the story itself you are essentially making it a sort of gay pairing. which i just don't like reading, perhaps you can make it so that Naruto finds someway (either through medical jutsu or a combination of Henge and creative use of Fuinjutsu) to turn himself into a full fledged girl? the second is the Yoshino, Shikamaru incest thing. i personally don't have a problem with fanfics including incest (i tend to enjoy them actually especially the Naruto/Kushina ones) but i just think you could get much better use (and by extension "screen time") out of Kai corrupting Yoshino into cucking Shikaku with Kai (maybe as an "in road" to controlling the Nara clan). of course these are just suggestions, what you do with your fic is entirely up to you and don't let anyone tell you otherwise!
I like what you are doing with the story, especially the thing with Naruto. I also appreciate the speed you’re uploading chapters, it’s commendable! Please continue uploading frequently.
Interesting story and concept.
The only real complaint/nitpick/question I have is why you're having Naruto be a sissy boy, or why you would even need a sissy boy at all. I'm sorry, that's just not my thing.
Both Praetor and I are working on another "Deal with goddess Kaguya" type of story as well, only it's a high school AU where "lust goddess" Kaguya makes Naruko into a futa and screws girls into being their busty followers. In that instance, they're doing it because Kaguya has been imprisoned for a long time and lacks a physical form, and thus the lust energy from the sex Naruko has with the girls/women psychically feeds Kaguya to where she can gain a physical form.
I did have an idea for a one-shot of sorts if you're interested. Namely, an AU where Kaguya turns Tsunade into her personal whore.
Personally, I like the idea of Tsunade having a thing for anal, but that's your call.
I can't wait to see more.
You have got a very good idea with this story, and i hope you won't give it up like many story has been in this site.
Good work and continue like this please.
PS: sorry if i do many fault English is not my native language.
Continuation next chapter please friend
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