Well this is becomming more and more interesting. As you said there are allot of stories on this site that can be categorised in one or two very distinct camps. Either it makes Naruto a useless piece of shit that for some almost unexplained reason becomes the most cucked and wimpiest person alive. Or it makes Naruto some kind of sex god that can fuck endless hours, cumming gallons of spunk with a dick that can be used as a flagpole. Both are very predictable and very uninteresting to read.

Very few authors can write in such a way that makes the events somewhat logical or believable. Some manage to write cuck Naruto in a way that makes it somewhat beleivable. ie he gets some sexual pleasure out of it, or he participates himself in some fashion. Not exactly my cup of thee, but still somewhat more interesting to read than without some kind of reason for his disposition. Stories that make Naruto some kind of sex god are often just as predictable. But some manage to slowly build the story up, with a relaxing pace and sensible buildup. Slowly delving into the depravity that Naruto can get into.

As for your story. I know of the original. And I can't wait to see what you make of it. The groundwork is there. The cataslyst for Naruto's depravity if you will. Neglected by his parents, ridiculed by his peers, a chakra being of pure hatred (and whatever 'yami' Naruto is) in his head.That is sure to fuck someone up. I for one can't wai t to see how it all develops. I cant wait to see what drives him to the edge and what the world and it's people look like after Naruto's fall. I can't fucking wait! And thank you for writing it. As far as it looks now. You have a gift. A gift of writing. You manage to keep me capitvated and on the edge of my seat wanting for more. A testament to your writing skills.

with kind regards 

glad you picked up this story!! I was pretty bummed when it was gone!! I liked the way you are continuing it. will ypu flip between Naruto and Kushina POV?

I specifically made an account just to review this fic. This isy first review in this site. Honestly stop teasing us sensei was a retarded fic where Kushina chose 3 random OC over Naruto and Minato but whatever. Some of these fanfics in this site are so fucking dumb and the plotlines are ridiculous af. Cuck Naruto of fine for some guys not my cup of tea. But seriously Kushina cheating of Minato over Kiba of all fucking characters and Naruto is cuck or gets of from humiliation. No good Naruto lemons in this site at all and all of the good ones are either dead and the remaining ones are where he's gay. I'm ranting at this point now, as for the fanfic good start and how will Naruto deal with Kushina now???? What about her team will they be dead??? Who else will be in Naruto harem???? Will those 3 OC die???? Why does Kushina not take care of her children in any of the fanfic that I read. 

It's fine not liking my story, some people loved it and others hated it, I think that's how it is with most sotires, you can never really please everyone, sadly in the end the negativity won and i stopped the story. With that said I am a little bit confused as to why you would make an AU of my story rather than your own original story, though one chapter in may be too quickly to ask this. GL & HF writing on :)

Punish all of them. No mercy

Yeah, you are right about the original story, some things didn’t make sense but (to me at least) it was fun to read, with that said now unto your version.

Though it’s a little advanced in the story, you show us more of Naruto’s POV and his problems, (not able to use chakra in this case) and he is frustrated about it because his parents aren’t there for him basically, both of them are busy, Minato being Hokage and Kushina “training” her team.

Hopefully, he’ll get through it and will come back.

Good first chapter and hope you don’t abandon the story. See you in the next chapter.

Interesting story

Huh, well wow. This is much better than I thought it would be. Honestly speaking I never thought about adding any sort of time-travel elements to the story, but I can definintely see you MAKING up a reason and causing a time-ripple effect. Oops! I think that might be a spoiler. But good job... PhallicSymbol. Even your name is a wank festival.

Good luck though, cause I was really at my wits end when I finished chapter 1. Lord of Lust if you're reading this, really bro don't mind this, but compared to the amount of holes you were violating in Kushina in your story, you were leaving out more plot holes. Just honest criticism. From what I heard from this guy though, you should give this a read.

That said, the last bit was completely new and threw me way off track. Nice.