Reviews for The Lone Wanderer (Remaster)By : BigE2955 |
I loved your story. I love a good plot line and actual story that incorporates plenty of intimacy in it. I'm currently working on a story here as well. Best of luck, and hope to see more from you!
The master/slave dynamic always works for me
naruko was very aluring here and sakura was the cherry on top.
I’m glad you’re writing this piece. It’s a great story premise to begin with and it’s nice to see you revisit it with your writing skills at a higher level.
The way you portray the women of Kumo is delightful and Sasuke’s methods for dealing with them is wonderful smut.
Great chapter 👍
This story needs more Sakura.
All in all this was a good chapter. I like some good ol' anal and you paid great detail to it. You also rounded off the harem 'properly' for this arc in the sense that Mabui wasn't left out. I was a little worried about that but you did good lad.
Beyond that, I feel the real gem of this wasn't the smut itself but rather the ended. It demonstrated emotional development to varying degrees in all relevant characters which is something that's usually missing in smut. They didn't only do something that wasn't sex, but even articulated to some degree their emotional state. Was gud. 10/10.
I know that this character is not in the original story of yours but could you add in chino
Always happy to see updates from you! Keep it up!
Had a stiffy when I read through this one. Excellent all around and the characters feel a lot more rounded than they did in the original. Sasuke himself is also narrating a stronger internal sense of development right out of the gate. The only thing I felt cheesed out of in this chapter is that Samui didn't actually get pounded to completion either.
Update please! :D
Bring please make a harem of all the women!
I like the way you’ve re-written this. While the original is nice, this one shows much deeper characters. Especially Mabui. The description of her need to really live goes far in explaining her reckless behavior.
Looking forward to seeing what happens next;)
I’m really enjoying this fic.
While the original you wrote is nice, the quality here is much higher. The way you develop the characters is especially strong in this version.
I look forward to seeing what’s next 😊
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