Reviews for Shota CRABy : Mantis137 |
Great chapter
Great chapter
Interesting story
Fuck this has been amazing so far!
I really hope we can still see Kushina added in even if she hasnt been mentioned yet
It would be amazing to have maybe his mom and sister (maybe Erza Scarlet or Rias Gremory) come back from a mission and find out the 3rd decided to finally enact the CRA and they decide to join!
hot chapter, good job
Great chapter! Can’t wait for the next one. I love the Shota stories where the shota actually acts like a kid, and isn’t all alpha and is more innocent. Also love your choice of girls with Anko and Tsunade. Mikoto might also be a good addition, as if he’s six years old the massacre might not have happened yet. Update soon!
I like what I've read so far can't wait for more
Interesting chapter. I cant wait for the next one
great story
amazing stuff, i LOVE it!
i much prefer this "twisted romance" feel over the "callous stud" from Boy's Life
im fine with a bit of rough stuff, it's just a turn off when the guy treats the girl like total crap :(
and pregnancy is a big turn on too.
anko and tsunade are amazing first choices.
idk how you feel about her but sakura is a BIG personal favorite of mine. if you add her in it'll be MUCH appreciated. (and ino as well)
i hope you go all out with the variety in girls.
for constuctive criticism i would recommend breaking up the overly large paragraphs
The story would be a lot better if you didn't write brick walls of text. Really, a paragraph could and should be three to seven sentences.
Even one sentence is acceptable for the sake of emphasis.
Dialogue; never write two or more characters speaking within the same paragraph; start a new line.
will it only be Kohona women? or can we get other elemental women like Mei, Samui, Yugito etc?
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