Reviews for The Secret MissionBy : 1nuggetlol |
You are an excelent writer that has a flair for writing very steamy and erotic scenes. But the thing that seperates you from allot of other writers is that you also manage to write the normal scenes excelently as well. A powerfull combination of skills for any writer to have. And you posses both.
While I personally am not atracted to stories involving cheating, adultery, rape etc. Thus far the story has not fallen into that pitfall. Nor does it seem to go down that road. Since Naruto and Sakura arn't dating they really can't cheat on each other. But that latter point is only clear to me because you said it in a AN and a single sentence at the start. Perhaps something more excplicit, something akin to both aknowledging that they are mere 'friends with benefits' having other partners back home, can be helpful. Especially if it can come from Naruto. (Because at this point it seems that he thinks that they are mutual exclusive.) Perhaps that can cement this story as being something different from most other 'Sakura develops sexual appetites' stories out there that have her cheating on her own lover and degrading said lover at the same time. And it can even end up with some nice plot points including Naruto as a willing equal partner in things. Did somebody say foursome?
I don't want to presume to much so if you have a vision already that's good to and I eagerly await your writings no matter what. This site desperatly needs good and balanced writers that have found a good balance between pure smut and character in their stories. I'm happy to say that you are such a person.
With kind regards,
TheFlamingDictator
this is a fun story. so far no cheating yet but it seems like soon Sakura wint be in conrtol or wanna stop. also posted ib facebook page.
interesting so far. do you commissions possibly and if so how could i contact you?
You should have the Prince force Naruto to use SexyJutsu and transform into Naruko xD
Never said you didn't have any talent just that the whole cheating naruto theme is boring and over used lately that's all
Awesome story. you have a gem in your hands with so many possibilities. You have brought two men into Naruto's territory and it doesnt seem like its a battle Naruto can win. you might wanna tag this as cuckold as well since i suppose the prince and the guardian will be having lots of fun with "Naruto's girl". Also would love it if you have Sakura do anal and fingering in this story!!
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