Reviews for An AwakeningBy : BigE2955 |
Please continue this!
I don't know why but I really enjoy this story please continue
Do not use the word 'fat' when describing a penis, it just sounds wrong, maybe try words like thick, long, girth, etc. Just not 'fat' .
You kind of built up hype to this chap then it fizziled
AND here’s where your true fetish pops up in this story by having Sasuke being the dominant one against Kushina when you could’ve done something new by having Kushina being the dominant one and Sasuke left on the bed panting and not being able to keep up with Kushina.
Shows how much you want Sasuke to dominate you in real life! LOL
Sasgay ? but in the anime sasuke was always after power and revenge and after he kicked naruto to the curb naruto followed him everywhere like a sissyboy moaning out sasukes name like a female in heat . or did watch the Wrong anime lol ?
You again? You're still alive? Tch, I thought you got run over by a truck, I was happy when you didn't show your sasgay cock sucking face.. thought you kick the bucket..
I know I have no real right to ask, but can you please re-write this chapter? There as been such a build up to this moment between Sasuke and Kushina. The little bit written here while interesting, the conclusion of these two seems half-hearted. If you need more time please take it. I just really wish to see a proper teasing, take them both to the edge, desperate conclusion for the culmination of Sasuke and Kushina.
dirty talk would be great during intercourse ,not plain scream fucking. Just my meaningless opinion.
Well that was kind of obvious ,I mean he is The Uchiha.
Yay your alive !!! narutos fetish nxt plz
Not bad ,not the best either ,prefer it when you write in a more 'realistic pov' . Cause it feels like brain mush when its all fuck fuck fuck rushed porno. Small idea for a story ...Minato n Kushi r alive and Naruto was born with an older beautiful sister Naruko. They are a pretty straight laced family except for a secret reserved to the siblings ... sweaty sticky lust filled love. Naruto growing up into a young man always admired and noticed how perfect she was in every way. Naruko noticed his attentions as well ...and sometimes used it to her advantage till they both give into unquenchible desire. Naruto is a handsome wildchild who never gives much attention to any female ,except the sister he loves more than life itself. Naruko in the same boat ,she has a hold on naruto that not even there parenparents can figure out.
I still get a good laugh at that anal waterfall thing. The logistics would make it pretty dirty. Anyway, this is a really hateful place to stop writing this fic. It's very obvious that things will be coming to a head in the next chapter with Kushina and it's a cliffhanger that leaves us at the edge of our seats. Will Sasuke win and break Kushina? Will she put the fear of the strap on in him? Will they tie and push the conflict further down the road?
We're coming on the end which makes me really sad. Now that you've actually throw Naruko down as this shy girl when it comes to actual intimacy it makes me really want to see emotional interactions between them. Sakura is so up front about her feelings and Satsuki had developed feelings over time, but I feel like Naruko is the best of both worlds. She's got all that devotion Sakura does but it's hidden and has to be revealed over time. Like I would suspect she was in love with Sasuke all along and just didn't want to admit it, and forcing her to confront it is very cute.
Mei was utterly top tier. He aggressiveness, her banter, her fantasies. I generally enjoy the smut but I'd have to say that out of the entire story that was probably the second best lemon. It got my fetishes burning, and it makes me wonder if at some point we really will see a Kage Summit arc where Sasuke puts the Raikage in his place.
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