Reviews for Naruto's Fetish (Remastered)By : BigE2955 |
You know, something that has slowly been growing on me to the point that I feel I have to bring it up is the whole crust factor. You like to talk about how the cum went and dried, or there was crusted pussy juice on Sasuke's dick, or even the other chapter where it was going on about the mush Sasuke's cum turned into. Don't you feel like that's a little... gross?
- He was sure that Sakura was glad Sarada had only been curious about who her mother was, instead of the circumstances surrounding her conception. -
That conversation would have been lulzy as fuck.
Anyway, I really liked this chapter. It has quite a bit of Sasuke/Hima, laying out the change in her personality and how they interact on a daily basis. Sex slave, personal maid, and eventual breeding cow. Noice.
Also liked the turn in Sasuke. He's not just dark, he's actually showing himself to be pretty fucking clever and methodological about the whole thing.
- Eventually, she would have deluded herself, into thinking that she was his wife or something of that sort. It would grow dangerous, to have that sort of obsession. -
God, you just love giving me the feels don't you? Now I feel bad for Himawari. I kind of want to see that. There's something nice about earnest young girls loving a guy that gives me the warm and fuzzies.
_ where if Himawari were to have her way, his children would grow. “I lohve you…!” she blurted, her voice hoarse and slurred. “I lohvee you sooo muchhh…!” -
Hohoho. *smirks breederishly*
This is what I wanna see more of breh.
It's good to see Naruto punch Sasuke in the face. Not because I dislike Sasuke or anything, but it helps restablish those degrading boundaries. When people 'fall' I guess it's not always a one way road. They turn back, or try to turn back, and that's what we get here. Naruto has his fetish, but he still tries to keep it within his bedroom rather than letting it seep into the rest of his life.
I really emjoyed this scene the first few times I read the fic, but on this pass around I actually feel a bit unsatisfied. Maybe it's because of how things went with Hinata, but instantly fucking her into unconsciousness and having her pass out with a slutty grin feels like a quick shot. The descent should be quicker considering she's been obsessed with Sasuke since forever, but perhaps not an instant flip into cumslut, you know? Every girl would have a different road down considering their circumstances, but the story would be greatly improved if we saw those. I don't remember if Sarada is in the Remaster, but it would be the same with her.
It's good to see how things are going off the rails now. Naruto pitched the arrangement with the idea that it would just be sex, or however those cuck-bull agreements usually go. They're intended to be pretty clean and dry and not extend outside of the bedroom. But of course, that's not how people actually work. So the way that the boundaries break and Hinata's turns to adultery really throws in the flavour of realism to these characters.
Aha, I almost pictured Himawari going 'Aaan~" once she basically molested Sasuke. The Sasuke/Himawari pairing is actually one of those crack pairings that I love. So their scenes always get me going, and this basically stalker yandere Himawari you have is great. It makes me wish there was a fic based around that premise.
Your aggressive Himawari is an interesting contrast to the one from the original version. It makes is much less dubious when she knows what she wants and she's the one pursuing it rather than the one being pursued.
Sasuke being disturbed by it rather than just going out to seduce her adds a bit of moral fibre to him that was absent before.
Seeing Hinata's slow downfall really drives home for me a few problems. I've had with your other fics. Or perhaps it's not you, but rather the harem genre in general. Cycling through so many girls so quickly really reduces their impact I guess. The development in Hinata over the chapters fleshes her out as a character, and really gives life to the fetish you're invoking.
Professor Sasuke giving sex lessons just tickles me to death. I can't contain the keks.
Coming back to this, I realize that it's an absolute improvement over the original Naruto's Fetish. Yes, there are a few changes to the smut I'd like, but the characterization is much better. Hinata actually doesn't instantly break here, despite enjoying the sex. Drawing the process out makes for better writing, since we get plot with the porn.
Will this have a sequal?
Hey ANON you know how you said you wish there was a filter for fic that you don't like. There is. It's called READ THE DAMN SUMMARY AND IGNORE THE FIC!
I bet Mikoto would be so happy that her youngest son basically destroyed family of her best friend's son. Notice the sarcasm... She must be ashamed of such devil spawn. Oh well, Sasuke is trash no need to even think about it. I mean he did it just because his pathetic superiority/inferiority complex had to be sated. What a petty little man. If you believe even for a second that Naruto would let that happen you're clearly delusional. I guess you have a lot in common with Sasuke. Bitter losers with petty minds.Go ahead a write 10 more Sasuke wanking stories. It's funny how you made him in your stories when he is in fact asexual moody emo with a small dick. You are either his fangirl or a fanboy who never got any pussy in real life. If only there was a filter to ignore stories like this one.
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