Reviews for Naruto's Fetish (Remastered)By : BigE2955 |
Imagine thinking that an Uzumaki, the Yang hald of Six Paths has a smaller dick than the Yin half of six paths lmao. Although this guy also thinks Hinata would even touch SasGay with a 10 foot pole so his sanity is already questionable. Anyways, I feel sorry for your mom watching her pathetic cuck of a son writing a long ass self insert fantasy on the internet and I hope you relieve them by killing yourself. bye.
Pls make one with sasuke humiliates hiashi by fucking virgin hanabi or sumire sleeps with sasuke behind sarada's back that would be hot
This is a good start to the story. The pacing spot on and I like their reactions; it feels realistic.
However, despite the strong beginning of this remaster, it isn't really my cup of tea.
This is a good start to the story. A little slower than the original story, but very realistic, and it doesn't skip over those ten years to where Naruto doesn't sleep with Hinata anymore. Good development here. You're going to see a theme of that with the successive chapters. I also love long chapters, and as a writer myself, I know how difficult they can be to write. So good on you for that.
Great story
I liked this chapter a lot. It's funny to me how aggressive Hinata is being towards Sasuke, it almost makes me wish that she would try to get more physical with him and show him what she's about. :3
The second chapter is really good, I thought it was hilarious that you made it known that Sasuke wanted to continue on because he wanted Hinata to confess that he was better than Naruto, because in its own way that is a very Sasuke like thing to do. I like how Sakura is okay with everything that is happening and you didn't make it all happen behind her back and I love that Hinata is seemingly turning to the dark side. 😈
This is for the first chapter.
I love that you said the reason Naruto wanted this to happen so badly is because he was always in the sidelines watching others his entire life. That really made me interested in this story. I like how it shows that Hinata would be willing to do anything for Naruto, because honestly that would probably be very true even if it did happen in the actual narutoverse. Hinata sticking up for her husband when Sasuke gets a little cocky (hehe) and puts Sasuke in his place by telling him no one could do what Naruto does for her was great, and the fact that Sasuke says yeah, Hinata has a bangin body, but Sakura is just as beautiful was a nice touch.
I can't wait to read more of it and I'll be sure to review every chapter. You're awesome.
Pathetic.
You might as well bash Naruto, since that's clearly the one thing you left out.
I was still hoping that sasuke will fuck naruko and not just inside their home but also in the hokages desk and got her pregnant. I mean that will be also humiliating be his fuck toy.
" Naruto, Naruko, Hinata, Himawari… they were all his, to use and fuck as he pleased "
This implies future Sasuke/Naruko sex we don't get to see. FUCK.
Anyway, I enjoyed the remaster more than the original. The only thing I would have liked to see was a bit of muh breeding fetish and some Naruko sex.
That said, it strikes me as odd that Sasuke is so insistent on keeping everything a secret from Sakura. Why would he even care? It's not like she would.
This chapter is just, kek. When Sasuke went on about betas and alphas I laughed. It made the chapter such a meme. Don't get me wrong, it's technically correct and this chapter is pretty much the narrative climax. Even the next one only really cements what happened here. But just the dialogue is like something out of 4chan's cuck memes.
Now this was a good dom scene. Excellent dirty talk, and the circle is finally complete. It's good that you actually had a moment where Hinata's fall can be definitively stated as happening rather than just something that get assumed in the story. Helps really punctuate the whole cuck narrative.
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