Reviews for The RestorationBy : BigE2955 |
As always I can't help but laugh at how hilariously under-endowed Fugaku is. I don't know if it's my preference for Sasuke or just the touches of humor but even though I like Fugaku it doesn't really feel like a bash fic. Beyond that it's a good little bit of smut but needs moar breeding.
Honestly it feels like this could be a two shot or three shot. As a reader I want more Sasuke/Mikoto, and I also want to see more about the world this occurs in and how their incestuous relationship changes things. Also incest pregnancy BROTHER. You're putting me in a self-defense situation here BROTHER.
Interesting story
" Mikoto leaned forward - and with her pinkie, tapped his tiny little erection. That was it for the fallen man, and he came, squirting a few pathetic little drops onto his chest. "
I always fucking laugh at this part. The imagery is just top kek. All in in, a nice little cuckshot. The contrast contrasting of size difference really helps bring out the netori feels of it. Just a couple of things you might want to consider:
1 - In general, if incest is involved, really play it up. I remember Corruption of Champions where one of the scenes talks about boiling fatherly lust and how the daughter is begging for incestuous seed or something like that. You just kind of handwave the incest issue as being 'different customs', which cuts back on the characters bemoaning their moral choices so we can get right to the smut. But it also takes all of the impact out of the act. If you just treat it as an everyday thing, that's what it becomes, and the fetish factor is gone. It's less 'He's fucking his own mother' and more 'Sasuke is just fucking Mikoto'. It's the moral depravity of an act that gives it the fetish thrill.
2 - In 'conquest' for lack of a better word there are certain milestones to hit. Every hole is important, and what you do with them matters too. A blowjob followed by swallowing and a blowjob followed by a facial are different acts that can convey different things. The first can be loving or dominant, where the second is almost always an act of ownership. You have different sex acts occur to convey different narratives.
When it comes to cuckoldry, one of the important things in to always at some point have the man cum inside her womb. Remember, cuckolding isn't just wife stealing. It's having your wife taken by another man and having her carry his child. When you skip that it's less cuckoldry and more just general NTR. And there's nothing wrong with general NTR, but cucking is the highest level of it, so if you want to get really filthy it should be a proper cucking. Sasuke here cums in her mouth and then on her face, which can be seen as two degrading acts but not really properly cuckolding.
Well, you certainly know how to write a humiliation scene, and I loved it. You got what you deserved Fugaku! That's what you get for allowing the coup to keep going and not stopping it, thus making Sasuke's life miserable in the end. XP
Now you'll forever be watching Sasuke bang your wife while she gives birth to your son's kids from now on over and over.
Fantastic Story
Hey.
Sorry, I fear you fell into the trap I mentioned earlier. It's still somewhat smut but now it's just highly repetitive stuff that crosses over to all your stories. There is more to sex and the literature of it then just a obscenely big cock ramming inside a woman. I get why people would enjoy it, but personally, at this point only the characters and change and the story molds into a cliche around them. The actual sex scenes could be very creative, and discriptive. I felt like you were experimenting with them a bit but then you just stopped. Anyway, good luck man.
This is pretty damn unique.
I think it's the first time I ever saw Sasuke cucking his own father, so, congrats on that!
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