Reviews for LovelessBy : BigE2955 |
That taste of tomato's thing was top kek. Hinata accidentally gets smacked up with Satsuki's dried pussy juice.
Also I wasn't sure what's up with Naruto's dick. 8.5 inches? Shouldn't it be like 16 at least?
The second time around this is actuallly... alright. Naruto is a cheating bastard of course, but he's a sympathetic one. You do pretty well in getting the reader on his side rather than Hinata's. The only thing you need is a bit of Satsuki's POV. Get inside her head a bit too.
Well this is a good chapter keep up the good work .
Nice chapter
Loving this fic. Kind of want Naruto and Satsuki to further humilate and debase Hinata.
Woot!! How about adding Hanabi here? That's gonna make this effing hotter!!! Fucking her sister in law!!
This is how the original Naruto should have went.
Well not so much the sex and cheating but with Sasuke being female and in a love/hate relationship with Naruto.
It would make Naruto's obsession with him more understandable and we'd get less straight up crazy emo Sasuke and more Sasuke who is fighting between her need for revenge and her need to get into Naruto's pants.
I like this one (like most of your storys).
Personally I hope you concentrate more on this story (along with 'dominos')
Nice chapter
Good chapter i can't wait to see more
Man this story is really good and very rare as well i really enjoyed it specially that moment when hinata sais "it tates like tomatos" i nearly fell out of my chair laughing. just keep up the good work man and update soon.
Goodbye.
Damn. One of the better Naruto/Satsuki fics that I've read on here. I can totally understand Naruto's frustration regarding the Hinata situation. At the same time, his reasoning for staying with her is pretty weak. Makes for good smut though haha.
All in all, a well written story. Kudos.
Damn man Loved it really enjoyed the whole chapter and i hope that you will update soon.
Thanks for posting this, can't tell you how long i waited for this particular story to be made. I feel you made the female Sasuke actually not hateable in this particular circumstance. While I'd like to have seen more of the fem Sasuke plotting and slowly pushing Naruto over the edge, it still worked out and was a satsifying payoff in the end. I do wonder though if you'll be continuing the story a bit (like it says in the forum post) and playing up the degredation to Hinata or not? If not that's cool, ending the story at this point might keep fem Sasuke and Naruto's betrayal of Hinata to a respectable point. Though I would like to see the continuation, if only to see the domineering fem Sasuke and the completely-in-love-with-fem-Sasuke Naruto as the former torments Hinata.
Nice, Hope to see much more. Great stuff
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