Reviews for Naruto's FetishBy : BigE2955 |
I think you rushed this chapter out. one of the weaker chapters this is. so as penance you have to give us another one.
Good smut
Hmm, I wonder if Sakura will accidentally stumble upon that journal. That would be pretty...intense.
Are you hinting at Sasuke finally knocking up Sarada too? I hope Sasuke can afford all those kids lol.
Not a whole lot to say about this that I haven't already covered in DM. It feels a bit out of place, but it is an intermission so that's kind of what you'd expect. The smut was alright but not groundbreaking. Could have been worse but it's a good little update to throw in a time skip after.
Please update.
Please update.
Hey, to "Michael Jerkson". The only reason you can say I'm a hater it's because I said I hate ShitsuHina. And, fresh news, I keep it and I will always hate that "pairing". I started saying that I loved the story. And I still love it. But I think I can be critic if I found something wrong about the story. I tried to defend my opinion with arguments.
I think that you say I'm a hater because you don't think the same way I do. Fine. You're being stupid for that.
Haters just Beat It ! Waiting for more ,the story has taken an interesting direction.
Oh, god... Loved the history... Until this chapter. Hinata loving Sasuke? Since when feelings are involved in this threeway relationship of them? This was supposed to be only sex. A fantasy of Naruto that Hinata started enjoying little by little. This was only physical attraction, not an history of how Hinata dumps Naruto for that Uchiha douchebag.
Naruto IS losing Hinata. And HE WILL lose her. And, sorry, but I don't buy that "I love you, Sasuke, but I love more Naruto" thing that Hinata says. Cuckolding is one thing, getting pregnant of the bull is going way too far. Having a child is some too serious business, and THERE is where Naruto should have put a limit. Now is too late for that. And sooner or later, Hinata will dump Naruto craving more of Sasuke. It's unavoidable. And saying the "L" word to Sasuke means that Hinata is definitely NOT just having sex, it means that she's making love to him.
And what's the point of involving Naruko? It would be more humiliating to make Naruto a bisex cuck. Not for getting fucked by Sasuke, but for getting Sasuke ready to fuck Hinata. Some participation of Naruto in the history.
As I said, this is turning more of a "How Sasuke stole Hinata from Naruto" story than a cuckolding story. And I don't like that. As a NaruHina fan, I would love to see a similar story, but from thr point of view of how both of them would carry this thing, but with Hinata having clear that Naruto is the only one she loves, and the thing with Sasuke is only physical and that no emotional thing is involved between Sasuke and Hinata. This is a SasuHina fic. And, sorry, that is the ship I hate the most.
This story definitely took a serious wrong turn at gay street. Its lost its focus, I think.
This story has become less about Sasuke stealing Hinata away from Naruto, and more into a story about Naruto realizing he wants to transition into a woman to marry Sasuke. That's the vibe I got from the "hints" in the last chapter.
I thought the story would slowly phase out Naruto from the relationship, as by his own idiotic choice, Hinata at first fucks Sasuke for Naruto's sake, then slowly gets into it, then eventually enjoys it, then prefers it, then actually falls in love with Sasuke (You are here), then falls out of love with Naruto, then finally Sasuke falls in love with Hinata too (Sasuke truly replacing Naruto in her life in every way, not just as a lover, but as a husband too.)
This is one of your story's failings, Hinata instantly goes from loving sleeping with Sasuke to actually loving Sasuke himself with no development of her feelings for him, or serious alarm from Naruto, who should be really worried the relationship has grown beyond being just physical attraction.
I also don't get the other characters. Sarada is completely irrelevant to Naruto, so Sasuke is wasting his time with her, at least in this story, you should make another story for her alone.
As for Himawari, while fucking somone's daughter is fucked up, it isn't really cucking. If you really want to "cuck" someone with their daughter, then you become a better father to them than they are. If Himawari or even Boruto saw Sasuke as more of a father than Naruto was, that's the real insult. So not only does his wife prefer this other guy as a husband, so does his children prefer him as a father. That really sells that this man really is superior in every way.
Finally this leads me to Naruko, who ruins the story for two reasons:
First: No matter what you may say, Naruto and Naruko are the same person. Sasuke is just literally fucking Naruto at this point. When Naruko vanishes, Naruto gets her memories and feelings. If people found out, they wouldn't just laugh at Naruto, they would laugh at Sasuke too. If a friend of yours turned into a woman and had sex with you while saying how much "she" loves you, then turns back into a man, you think anyone that hears about that won't think both of you are gay as shit? Because you wrote Naruto and Sasuke now literally having a kid together. You made Naruto pregnant with a SasuNaru baby.
Second: If a guy goes to a couple's house to cuck the husband, but then fucks not just the wife, but also fucks the husband, he's not cukcing anybody, that's just a threesome. Naruto hasn't fucked Sasuke any less than Hinata has. Sasuke can't "steal" Hinata from Naruto if he is also "stealing" Naruto from Hinata too.
That was pretty damn nice. I think the ending of the video was hot with Hinata making the 'O' ,they were practicaly making love. Maybe we could get some insight on Narutos thoughts on his wife starting to use the word 'LOVE' recently in this situation/relationship? Or how bout we see Naruto getting it on with Hinata and Sasuke watching . Sasuke could invite all the girls to watch together or he could even have Naruto sleep with each of them so they could experience Lord 7th. ...Fuck I forgot ! Sakura could join to ,remember he always wanted her but never got her ,he hasn't in this story if I recall correctly. 00X out.
There is not much focus on the intimate and personal relationship between Naruto and Hinata
Don't like Hinata telling Sasuke she loves him. Yes, she loves his dick but she loves Naruto more as her husband.
I agree with the other poster you should have Sarada becone pregnant too. It would be the perfect way to revive the Uchiha clan which Sasuke always wanted.
Feels like read it before. It was good though ,LL&F next !
Forgot to mention - wedding ring - wedding kimono and a whole lot of love
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