Reviews for The Lone WandererBy : BigE2955 |
I think in the future I'd cut back on the orgasms. I noticed it when reading the Karin scene that she has them so often and with so little detail that they seem cheap. I know Sasuke is a sex god but I think readers would rather see two decently detailed orgasms from Karin than an offhand note she had five of them.
Slurping up dat precum was exactly the sort of filth I was looking for. We must go deeper.
As usual, a good read. I really didn't care for her but I've been slowly developing a taste for Karui through your smut.
The nostalgia is real. Something the I thought of reading this is that you can go 'deeper'. I'll keep it in mind myself when writing smut, to not only write what's happening but also paint what's happening. It's one thing to know Sasuke is eating out her snatch, it's another to know that her juice tastes like so and that Sasuke flicked her clit with his tongue in between tracing her labia.
As always, I find something new to think about upon re-reading. I thought that Sakura showing Sasuke the cum in her mouth was nice. It reminded me of the Rias orc dick story in that it touches on the filthier side of sex. Would like to see more of this angle in future work.
One thing I've always appreciated is that it isn't strictly formulaic. Some authors always just go oral > vaginal > anal like it's a cosmic order. Good to see we follow that here.
Hilarious with how Naruko was with Sasuke's cock, joking in her head with how the cock was mocking her. Even as a slut, Naruko can be humorous when she wants to be. But yeah, since you guys are just sex friends right now, best not to raise any red flags, even though Naruko and Sasuke being a couple is something that gets used even when Naruko is male.
In all honesty, in a straightforward sex case, I think if Naruko and Sasuke fucked, Naruko would likely have the edge, since the character is pretty much known for endurance. But I think the sex would end up being a draw anyways, as Sasuke can still pleasure her to her utmost limits.
Yeah, I can definitely understand Temari's curiosity. When the guy that was all about vengenace and Uchiha clan, awoke to his sex drive and was fucking the girl that almost anyone would think they'd fall for one another, it's just too much not to see. Well, she saw, and now she's gonna be Sasuke's bitch, whether she likes it or not.
Although... Gina as Female Gaara... sorry, but Gaara is the guy I have a hard time picturing as a girl. I dunno, just don't feel that.
Unlike me that focuses on one girl in the chapter per story, you work on fitting multiple girls in the chapter. Does actually help expand the chapter more, though. I should consider that.
Samui willing to become a missing-nin for the sake of riding Sasuke. Wow. XD
Then again, it shows that Sasuke is breaking the girls and they practically can't live without him.
Oh yeah, finally some payback to Anko for how she made him so frustrated. Too bad he didn't break her, but hey, she's definitely addicted now, though... yeah, Naruko finding out that way REALLY isn't good. But Sasuke does have a point. Can't exactly tell them that he's been sleeping with several different women and turning them into cum starved whores.
I think Naruko accepted having sex way too soon. Should have given her more time to think about it and the fact that she's gonna have sex with him right after she found him having sex with Anko. Really not the best mood to lose one's virginity.
Wow, 4 lemon scenes with 4 different girls? Damn. Though the title isn't fully accurate then, saying it's a blonde mayhem when one of the girls was a bluenette. But close enough since we get the rest of the girls be blonde. XD
It's still funny how the last of the Senju became a cock-hungry slut for Sasuke. In some way, it's divine retribution for how the Uchiha suffered at the hands of Senju. Though if she gets pregnant by Sasuke's kid, providing that she's even capable of carrying kids, we'd have a natural born Senju-Uchiha.
You said that Samui is crazy, but Sakura's gone even longer without Sasuke's cock. And really Sasuke? That's really slow even for you. You tell Ino about how Sakura is sex addicted to you. You honestly didn't figure that she'd try to come onto you after all the experiences you encountered? How lame.
Oh well, least you bagged another bitch, and she was already your bitch since childhood, since she was one of your fangirls. And Samui back means now she'll be riding that cock of yours as long as possible. It's a damn shame that Sasuke doesn't have the Flying Raijin technique. Then he could just teleport to them. Sadly his Rinnegan doesn't have the ability to warp like that.
You know, it sort of makes sense. No matter how things go in Amegakure, they lost their "god" and cannot believe that only the "angel" being there would be enough. They need that sense of security. So what better than to go with the concept that their god as returned in a new form. Now Sasuke is the new Pain.
Guess for Konan, she had her own sexual frustrations. Honestly, I found her to have some of the most sex appeal in the Naruto series, with Tsunade having the least, which is weird, considering that Tsunade has the biggest breasts. Might have to do with her presentation.
So Konan finds stability in her nation at last, and she's got herself a new lover, or master. Or maybe god. A sex god. Or all of the above. XD
Wow, what a chapter. First had him try and help people out, but then realize it was getting nowhere and he needed a lot more people to help out. Then he gets interrogated for a bit, only to offer help.
The nice way of how he took down all those people without getting too much blood out was nice. Though fear is not the best way to control someone, but I guess since its Sasuke and he's essentially a god now, they should not push their luck.
Mei's tits are big, but not as big as Tsunade's. Funny thing though, despite how big Tsunade's tits are, I don't find her as attractive as others.
Damn, just seeing how Sasuke gets beaten by Mei's insane libido is impressive. It is interesting to see how Sasuke dominated everyone, but now lost this one. Maybe he'll get stronger so he can win next time.
THANK YOU. I really liked what you said to Glk. I saw a LOT of Naruto harems, or Naruto fics in general with lemons, and a LOT of them has Naruto being a complete asshole that makes Sasuke looks nice in comparison. Naruto harems are really common. In a way, that's kind of why I like your fics, cause you have SASUKE be the harem lead instead. Hell, doesn't even have to be lemons, somce just have Naruto act like he's some big deal and could kill Sasuke easily and makes Sasuke look like a pussy. It annoys me. I love Sasuke a lot, so your fic is a great refresher, and how you at least respect Sasuke a lot more than others.
Now to the chapter itself, I like the fact how Sasuke was uncomfortable in how he feels he doesn't deserve to be in the village because he was so cruel. One thing I wanna point out is that one sentence wasn't worded right:
"Naruko, Sakura and Kakashi had automatically accepted him back, as if he had drove his chidori through Naruko's lung, or as if he hadn't been a millisecond away from slitting Sakura's throat."
In the part with the chidori, you said, "as if he had", when it should be "as if he hadn't" instead.
Fuck yes! Sasuke with Shadow Clones. That jutsu is literally the ultimate sex technique, allowing for gangbang without relying on other guys. But the fantasy play is that with the Transformation Jutsu, you can easily make them be other guys. In Naruto's Fetish, imagine Sasuke actually transforming into Naruto and fucking Hinata. XD
Oh wow. Anko actually one upped THE Sasuke Uchiha now. Damn. Hell, the very fact that he got sexually frustrated that he went and fucked Karin just to relieve himself is hilarious and just amazing on Anko's part. Guess Sasuke should be careful, as some girls can get the drop on him. XD
I see what you mean about not all girls being the same way and just throwing themselves at his feet or him just winning automatically. Anko with her long tongue would be the best cocksucker of them all.
The very fact that Sasuke leaves and then you show an aftermath on how they are feeling now definitely leaves up to a lot of stuff of having more smut with Sasuke later. :3
Bet they will just jump him the next time they see him.
Poor Sakura. With her super strength, I bet she is destroying entire landscapes to cope with the frustrations. That might be why Tsunade is also worried. Too bad for her, she shouldn't have messed with Sasuke Motherfucking Uchiha!
The way that you had it that Tsunade was thinking similar to Mabui in a win-win situation is hilarious, but now the last Senju is just a cumslut for Sasuke. If Sasuke knocks her up, we'll have Senju Uchihas. Oh god, babies with Rinnegans!
Hot damn, foursome already? You just skipped the threesome and headed straight for the foursome instead. XD
Honestly, I didn't really find Karui all that sexy. But that makes sense since she wasn't sexy that much, but rather a total bitch. Of course, glad that Sasuke showed her who's in charge by putting her in her place. And yeah, she beat Narut-I mean, NaruKo up. Payback's a bitch, and a bitch like her deserves a bitch.
Sasuke getting a little fatigued here since he's not used to having so many girls throw themselves at him at once makes sense. Once he's used to it, he can handle them all.
It really is such a shame that Mabui dies in the story. Least you kept her alive here. And her desire to wanna live a little more, because of how close she came to dying is a good reason. It's like, she finally realized: life's too short. She wants to live a little, to find a lover, a husband maybe, maybe have kids, or something along the lines.
And then comes along Sasuke and she finds that Samui, a coolheaded kunoichi, ends up banging with Sasuke, and pretty well too, Mabui cannot help but want to see what this guy's got. Plus, if he isn't that great, she gets the satisfaction of humiliating the last Uchiha. Well, sadly she doesn't get her wish as he gets the last laugh on her.
In regards to how Samui jumps on him, felt like maybe some more showing of how she was losing herself to her lust, but then again, its okay since we shouldn't think too much on it as they are supposed to lose it. And no doubt that Mabui will lose it next.
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