Reviews for The Lone WandererBy : BigE2955 |
I must say that this is an interesting story. Though, while I don't read every single chapter (I just have particular likes regarding lemons and what girls are in them), those that I did, really made an impression on me.
If I may be so bold and ask, will there be more Hinata in the future chapters? I don't mean that you make a Part 2 to this chapter (though I wouldn't mind), but even a short mention (or long) in another chapter would be cool. Especially if you made something kinkier with the shy Hyuuga, maybe her getting banged by several Sasukes at once (Kage Bunshin)? Or him doing some teasing/sexy torture on her, like tying her to a bed, nakend and blindfolded, and using various tools to make her climax several times, before finishing with an intense sex?
I really hope to see some more of Hinata here. She's my favorite character.
What about the kuro in earth village is she ever going to join?
I was about to point it out but you already know about double posting
Not bad of a chapter the lemons are great 🌚🌝
The messenger of god has been brought to her knees 🌚🌝🌚🌝
nice 👍 chapter thought I hope you implement more dirty talk
Wow 🌝🌝🌝🌝🌝 the ending made me crack up though I wonder how konan survived
Damn I should be going to sleep but the story is keep on getting better and better
i like how this story is in line not skipped or jump ahead just for lemons
🌚🌚🌚🌚 the legendary sucker loses a another bet
man that fem orochimaru nearly gave me a heart attack 😭😭😭😭
That triple action was amazing well written can't wait to read other chapters 🌚😎
Another great chapter 🌚
I hope you don't genderbend any characters or revive them back to life.
It just ruins the story imo
Chapter 2 I enjoyed it very much wasn't too fast paced or slow just the way I like.
The storyline seems very good so far
best point in this chapter drinking tea goes very well with the Sasuke in this story
I just made this account to review this story. First of all amazing chapter 🌚
Also you could try normal site fan fiction to catch more attention of the readers of harem stories
in the future will you do mikot or fem!itachi?
I've been failing in my duty as a reader to review your story despite its great content and one of my habits is that I usually don't review unless I have a new idea or feel that the writer needs help which is also teling of how great this story is if I am not nagging. There have not been any noticeable complaints and the sex is good quality with suitable word length. As I am typing this out the one bit of nagging I do have is that the timing feels really off where some things that are supposed to take an hour or more are done and dealt with in some very quick minutes while the short quickies feel like they are pretty much at the same amount of words. It creates a sense of lost proportionality that is noticed after I finish reading like an anachronism might bug someone who notices it but does not remember what was anachronistic. This is probably just me who has a skewed sense of time. I am very capable of easily wasting several hours of my life waiting so it might not actually be an issue at all.
You have some great content and you've been consistent so those are amazing points. Your gender bending of people also suddenly opens up a lot of options if you make the stretch.
I have to say, I'm a little upset we didn't get to see a more in-depth Naruko encounter this chapter. I'm waiting to see who will feature in the next chapter, especially if you think it may be a good one compared to the ones you've had so far.
I'm also thinking about how many female characters there are left. My money is on someone like Kushina pretty soon.
Good chapter as usual. Keep up the good work.
So, I came back to review this one since I didn't before.
Good chapter, and I like the way that you reinterpreted Gaara's personality. It's been interesting reading every chapter and waiting to see who will feature in the next one. I still haven't forgotten about the cloud girls, and the hint you dropped.
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