Reviews for Naruko Uzumaki: Konoha’s # 1 Slut!By : CuriousWriter |
Good writing of Naruko's clothes, I swear I could visualize it easily. Very good sex scenes as well, the condom tying was a good idea, the music was a good addition as well. Although hinted pregnancy is not really my drift, cum inflation fine but -13 pregnancy I dunno. İf you wonder why go read Naruko the Survivor, probably one the most fucked up Adult Naruto fanfic.
Well shit damn that last chapter was hot. And I was only half paying attention at the time to boot.
Yeah so, not much more to say, I read this already after all... still, I think the chapter served to show Naruto that her job might not be as easy as she expected it to be.
Although, for some reason, the guy (Taka) really reminded me of that one guy from Silence of the lamb (it puts the lotion in the basket). No idea why.
Anyways until the next chapter.
Nice job. I think it's going to get more depraved from now on.
Nice story, you are totally right, good Naruko stories are indeed rare, in fact, I can't recall a single good one at the moment... Whatever, seems like you are trying to fix that though, so good on you.
The only complaint I have, except for a few missing/wrong words/setences etc, is that the blowjob felt kind of 'rushed'. I know that there is a 'hate-sex' tag but still, it felt like one moment she was just getting him ready and the next he was skullfucking the shit out of her and then he came two paragraphs later. So I hope that future scenes will be a bit longer/more detailed.
Besides that though great start, can't wait to see what happens next.
Very nice story do please continue and update soon. Also I agree with Goshujin-Sama you should add a preg tag as in the kind of work Naruko is doing that is more then likely going to happen due to her not knowing a thing about safe sex.
1: you are awesome for writing this.
2: you should add a preg tag, you know, because that kind of work will most likely end up with her being pregnant. bonus points if done while still a loli.
Good stuff. Besides some missing words and minor spelling issues, it's pretty good.
I would like to have seen her struggling a little with sex since she is new and petite. But that's just some minor criticism on my part. Other than that, I did like it.
Either way, keep it up and update whenever you can. I'll be sure to add your name to my bio regarding the idea. It would also be a good idea to start your own thread in the general category as a way to respond to any reviews and edit a link to it back into your chapter.
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