Reviews for Naruko Uzumaki: Konoha’s # 1 Slut!By : CuriousWriter |
Have you thought about making this follow canon and for example let Team 7 happen?
Other ideas:
just a few ideas for you, as I do love this story.
I know it's not typical to write condolences in a review for this kind of story, but I wanted to let you know that I'm sorry you lost your grandfather. I know this story you've created is smut, but you're still a human with feelings and I wanted to let you know you have my sympathies for your loss.
I don't think it will be easy, but I do hope that you find some way to deal with it.
Nice chapter. Bit short but enjoyable nontheless. I'd love to see more of Kushina's times with the Uchihas though. Can't wait for more. I hope in time your chapters become longer and more detailed. Keep it up.
Kushina too? I'd like to think Minato would realize... bah. This is basically a Hentai! Not a lot of logic in those.
Good chapter though.
Damn Uchiha. xD
I did like the Mikoto/Kushina bit tho.
I like the dominant yet slutty Naruko... I kinda hope she'll dom Tsunade a t some point...
Pretty fucking hot. AFF needs more well written slutty Naruko.
Great chapter!
Loved the toy auction and hope to see more action with the other girls in the future. The Mizuki scene was hot as well. Can't wait until Naruko finishes the academy and is let loose on the world outside of Konoha.
good chapter, good story, want more
Very good writing did not have a problem visualizing how Naruko looked like altough it would be good if you write Ino and Sakura more easier to visualize. And about the pregnancy thing when is that happening if it will happen at all?
So is Hinata going to make an appearance? Like in a Hyuuga gang bang?
Super hot, I loved it! Can't wait to see what comes next.
I'm glad that you're going with my idea of turning her classmates into whores as well. I'm enjoying it so far, keep up the good work.
So much to say...
1) Chapter 4 definitely had a weird cut in there. Probably should have been two separate chapters.
2) That whole police station scene was hot as fuck. Especially because Naruko was basically mindcontrolled, but it was greatly written, very subtle. I do hope the tape will be used later on.
More in general, seeing Naruko finally being submissive to a strong authoritative figure was great (and is great if you want to write it again in the future). Normally she is way too 'experienced' and seductive to be the passive part of any scene, so this was definitely great.
3) Will this story skip to later days and show Ninja-Naruko whoring around the canon plot? I would love the first chapters of the anime being retold with Naruko being the whore she currently is, and Sasuke and Sakura still being annoyed with her as they were with Naruto in the beginning. Sakura probably because Naruko had sex with Sasuke and Sasuke being annoyed with Naruko as he considers her a lowly whore and not ninja potential.
I think you are going for a much different route, but just wanted to say this.
Loved it, let's see where Naruko goes from here.
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