Reviews for Stop teasing us Sensei!By : LordOfLust |
While I'm not a fan of adultery, or similar themes in general, this fic is still kinda hot.
Most of that has to do with Kushina knowing what she wants and taking it. That's hot. This can still easily go the way of 99% of the fics in these categories where the woman in question is a braindead cum bucket, a mindless slave in every way that matters.
That's not hot.
Example in this chapter being the scene with Anko. She could have taken up her offer to join her and her fuck buddy, in which it can go one of two ways; they go to Anko's apartment together, fuck this guy's brains out, and turf him when they're done (hot), or they go back and basically turn into wailing banshees, getting degraded and dominated while fucking (not hot).
That's just my personal preference though. I like a woman protag in my smut who's sexy in her power.
Make sense? I dunno. That's pretty high praise from me though, given, as I said, how annoying and how much of a turn off I find cuckoldry.
BitterNTR just proved my point imagine if the shoe was on the other foot if all you sasuke and kiba fanboys out there could only read nothing but whore tsume and mikoto stories every single day where your favourite characters were downgraded to stupidly absurd proportions just for a netorare excuse pretty sure you would rage just as hard as the very few it seems naruto fanboys out there trolling season lol where i haven't heard that one before (rolls eyes).
dude write an actual sex scene 7 chapters in and the most we see is a BJ
Grammar could really use work. Like, a lot of work. But if English isn't your first language, that's totally fine. Your idea isn't revolutionary either, but there's really nothing wrong with that too. You could work on toning the whole 'worshipping of the other male characters to bring Naruto and Minato down as characters' down a notch though.
But hey, it's a Kushina story and that's good enough for me really. But keep at it, and try to make more Kushina-centric stories. I'd love to see more, if possible, original ideas.
great chapter lust looking forward to chapter 8
Great chapter, when Takako gets a blowjob he can start his way towards dominating Kushina by holding her head so he cums in her mouth.
Ignore the flaming Anons, it's hig seson for flaming trolls now.
Only thing i don't understand is how Naruto can juse Kuramas chakra when he is seald in Kushina?
you had naruto lose to kiba??? the flying fuck is that garbage.
Wow. That is such a cheap way to make Kiba win. -_-
You know a story is shit when you'd rather read the comments. Hey author person upload an other chapter so I can read reviews of people shitting on your work
All I did was let tell you your assumptions have no meaning behind them, I have no valid arguments, amusing… is that your counter argument, well I never expected much from you. I never said the characters should act differently, in fact I was attacking you on your statements, so stop trying twist my words into to something else. “We don't know how it would be done in the real show” are you semi illiterate, we have seen the depths of Minato’s Character to base a proper description of his personality and how he would react in most situations. I never said it has to follow the manga I was only attacking your statement, in fact you have said nothing in defense of them, has your mind comprehended the reality of the situation, I have to write to say whatever I please and if you don’t like that you can stick your head in the ground like an ostrich
@Communist:
Thank you for your nice words, you must be well educated. -,-
Even though I know I am just feeding a troll I kindly ask you to read all of my previous comment.
What I made were merely assumptions why the author let Minato end the match.
It is entirely in his right to write Minatos character that way, as long as he stays constant with this decision.You have no valid arguments in your comment, all you do is shouting:
"The characters should act differently because I say so !"
We don't know how it would be done in the real show - we don't need to know.
This IS a fanfiction! It doesn't need to follow the manga, the author can do anytghing as long as it makes sense in the context of his story. If you can't handle it I would kindly suggest that you stop reading fiction and just stay with the manga.
Great chapter with good progress made, wish you would update this story more frequently but I understand youre busy. Love Kiba's fantasy of fucking Kushina in front of Naruto, hope it happens later on. Please update soon, your story is amazing.
"At last I wanted to ask what is so bad that Minato stopped the fight? He just didn't want Naruto to use his destructive power against a comrade. Or he sensed that his son was going overboard:
lol are you fucking stupid, Minato had no right to stop the match and knock Naruto unconscious, only to declare Kiba as the winner. If he was how did you put it " want Naruto to use his destructive power against a comrade", then he would have stoppd the chunin exams becaue go look up what the exams are all about then your whole agrument is invaild. On top of that how did Naruto go overboard, he used only a little, only his eyes went red and he stops and knocks out Naruto for that? Thats preposterous the Third Hokage was way softer than Minato yet he didn't knock out Naruto when he did the same thing against Neji only are a bigger scale, I find your defence of this laugable, Lord of lust is a sub-par writer just like how a lot of writers on this site, his fanfiction shows this, go check out his other works, if his fans tell him to write Naruto NTR Kiba he would do it, he has written stuff like this on Fanfiction.net. Also a jinchūriki is a weapon, even in cannon he wanted Naruto to use his power, he's the fourth hokage, he could Stop naruto if he went overboard in less than a nanosecond thus he has no reason to worry about the fight.
Well, it is true that there are a lot of Naruto yaoi and Slut Kushina stories around. I don't read yaoi and I can say that most Kushina stories are more or less like: "I'm horny and I know it is wrong but now I will fuck xyz". This will normally be done for all other woman for the next 2 to 3 chapters until the Fic is abandoned.
This fiction is different, we know what Kushina will become but the way until then is incredible interesting. One of the few fiction which take its necessary time to develope a fine anticipation for the next event. I think most will agree with me on this. :-)
Personally I find it extremly interesting to see the "bashing" in this story. Naruto isn't shown as an asshole or incompetent shinobi (Naruto had a good match). He and Kiba just dislike each other and the Inuzuka is taking a bit of advantage of the situation with Kushina. I want to see in the future more of it, well timed and paced of course. After all these chapters I am sure that LordofLust will do it just fine.^^
At last I wanted to ask what is so bad that Minato stopped the fight? He just didn't want Naruto to use his destructive power against a comrade. Or he sensed that his son was going overboard?
I think it should be OK even if it was just for the plot to get to the sex scene. In the end we are reading a smut story, we all know where the focus lies. All none sex scenes are for leading to the actual action (and till now it is really well done). I read other stories when I want deep charcter devolpment and story twists. It just so happen that this author has a better writting style than a lot "serious" writters. ;-)
Of course this is just my humble opinion.
That was a great chapter, I can't wait for her to get even more slutty.
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