Reviews for Genjutsu Gone RightBy : sandman-nobody |
wOOt. Update.
I love it.
It's a hell of a slow burn, but it looks like we're really getting into it.
I hope to see more soon.
I'm impressed at your writing skills, you do so well at capturing the personalities of the characters. I hope the next chapter doesn't take *too* long but you can't rush perfection.
I was hoping we'd have arcs for each girl. For Ino to get as deep into a relationship with Naruto as Sakura did, it's still possible but I fear this could devolve into trying to balance Naruto sleeping with 8 different girls with each barely reaching the level of intimacy Sakura got. Or just boring dime a dozen threesomes. I'm probably jumping the gun here but I've been burned too many times in the past.
Regardless I'll read it anyway because you're a fantastic writer, keep it up!
While I am relieved to see that Sakura did not crush Shikamaru balls.It would be most troublesome if he had to eplain to his mother why he can't give her grandchildren. I hope you send in Kurenai to help Naruto.Sure she was going to get back at Kakashi for siccing Naruto on her.I think she would rethink that if she found out that Naruto was able to cast the genjutsu over Kakashi.The blow to his ego jonin taken by genin using a simple genjutsu.Then for them to have a what the fuck did they do moment.After all Naruto would keep working at until he got it.He probably can not tell between his chakra and the Kyuubi chakra. If Jiraya or the Third might ask who supvirsed Naruto training.
Great writing! You nailed down the characters' vanilla personalities perfectly, and the story has a really interesting combination of both charm and wrongness.
Anyways, I was really disappointed to hear that some of your reviewers have such an egregious sense of entitlement, so I created an account to let you know that I really enjoy your writing and appreciate the time you put into posting them here.
awesome story
If fanfiction could actually be published and sold, you'd be one very rich author SSH
why won't you bastards review this??? Top five fics on the site imo
Well, it might be a bit late, but you have my trust.Your fic is among very few Naruto smuts I genuinely like.
Don't expect many reviews from me, through. I really don't like this site.
Great story. Love the inclusion of Ino and cannot wait to see where that goes.
Not much else to say.... I hope the update is coming along well, and i cant wait to read it
Another great chapter. Can't remember if I reviewed the last one but can't wait for the next one. I would recommend looking over past chapters for mistakes though
amazing work this is by far my favorite story on this site haha. And i am glad to hear you will be taking the story seriously its amazing and wish you all the best. also ugghh that ending >.< cant wait for next update! keep up the amazing work
Wow, I can't believe I haven't read this story before. This is worlds away from 99% of the stories posted on this website in terms of writing ability alone and I absoutely love the descriptive nature of your writing style.
The plot is also very interesting and while I agree with the other readers and would have preferred this to be a strictly Naruto/Sakura story, I can't help but wonder if you might actually be the first person that writes a harem fanfic that doesn't want to make me bash my screen into pieces.
I can only hope that you take your time to develope the emotions between the characters properly. The greatest challenge I can see in adding one or more addtional girls into Naruto's polyarmorous relationship, is doing so in a non-repetetive way that doesn't rely on cliches.
Nevertheless I trust you to do atleast your best, and from the way things are looking, that just might be enough.
Hope to see and update soon, this really turned out to be one of my favourite stories on this site, ever.
Your stories are generally very good. The only problem I could say I have with them is the time between updates.
Interesting chapter
Just as great as I remembered it being, can't wait for the next chapter! Glad to see you updating again.
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