Reviews for Bitter TruthBy : alexfrost5556 |
The idea and overall story is perfect. It's perfect for those that love NTR, especially when it comes to Kushina and Naruto.
However, the execution itself could use some work.
For one, the writing style is very rough draft-ish, if you get my drift. I didn't understand why you didn't use quotation marks, and used dashes instead. The writing itself seemed rather rushed, and I feel like you could've put more effort into cleaning it up. On top of that, it's rather strange that Naruto referred to his mother by her first name instead of just calling her "mom." (Also, you could've picked out a better stage name for Kushina than KU. That was kinda lazy, and not to mention that it doesn't even sound like a pornstar name or whatever.)
Overall, I would give it a 7/10, if only because how much I enjoyed the story despite it's visible flaws. I do hope that you can continue to write some quality NTR fics with Kushina.
Happy Writing!
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