Hardcore smut no plot next chapter? Hoping for Tenten she keeps trying to add plot but Naruto just uses her and she realizes she is as useful a woman as she is a kunoichi and breaks down crying as she licks his cum off the ground.

I see that I probably came across the wrong way, and I apologize for that. Yes -- I've written SasuHarem before; but I've also written NaruHarem, multiple Naruto stories, a Hinata story, an OG story, not to mention a multitude of other things. I love SasuHarems and NaruHarems, Sasuke-anything and Naruto-anything.

Again, that offer to talk is still wide open. I'm not going to try and shove Sasuke or whatever down your throat -- Naruto is fine. Hell, I've written a few Naruto harem stories of my own.

This chapter was an improvement, by the way, if a little short.; as I said before, you really do have a lot of talent. I'll keep this short, so I'm just going to wish that you've had a wonderful day. Cheers! Don't forget about my offer, :)

talk about a fking tease  but love it.  i still want my Chocho / Hyuuga Hanabi / Sarada in a 3some

Short, but it was still a fun and good read. I really enjoyed the glimpse of Tsunade's mentality; a self-confident woman with an unmatched drive to pursue what she wants, and get it how she likes it.

Only to be denied! You should continue exploring this element to her. It will be so satisfying when they do become intimate—or more like he conquers her.

Naruto's little speech is so true. A subtle nod to canon if there ever was one.

Great chapter.

Also I just want to let you know now don't listen BigE, dude doesn't know shit about originality, majority of his stuff is recycled "sasuke cucks Naruto" bullshit dude has no place to be talking about originality.

Hell I know he's written the same plot like 3 times.

You're doing great and frankly he's claiming he doesn't care about the sauce getting cucked but he has a clear preference here, and honestly looks like he's trying save face by saying that.

Here's a suggestion: why don't you try something... original?

Look, I could honestly care less about what you do to Sasuke or Sai or Shikamaru or whatever. I cuck Naruto and other people in my own stories, so it's only fair that you can do the same; but really man, you're just... what?

Here's the plot of your story. Naruto is the Hokage; girls like Naruto because... he's... uh... what? He's nothing. He's some generic carbon copy protagonist that jumps back and forth from being the 'nicest guy in the world' to demanding women call him master and calling everyone bitches. You claim that you have problems cucking the other guys 'because of problems with their scenario', but your inital scenarios are... awful anyway.

Take Sakura for example. Sasuke bets her body for... some reason. Naruto is just randomly stronger than Sasuke for... some reason. Then Naruto rapes her and suddenly she's broken and loving his cock. Then he indorcrinates and fucking her underage daughter. I- I don't even know what you were trying to go for, man. It's downright silly. You try to paint Naruto as 'in the right' and as some 'good guy', but he does nothing but be a rapist pig who goes out of his way to enslave women and imasculate everyone around him. Why do you even have any pretences of him being good?

The cream of your story would probably be the 'Onsen' chapters, considering there are five of them. Let's see - wanking off Hinata again and again, constantly repeating how 'amazing her body is' and stuff like that. More pointless Sasuke and Sai bashing that doesn't even contribute to the smut or the plot. Naruto manages to block a Susanoo arm with one finger? Seriously dude, and people call me a wanker. Ino detoriates from loving wife to cum slut in the span of like.. ten minutes.

The Inuzuka and Hyuga chapters. So... jesus man. Did you even try with these? The plot of these is literally 'Naruto rapes the clan head and all the others fall in line like bitches becuz inuzukas' and 'Naruto destroys and puts most of the clan in the hospital so six women jump him becuz hyuga submission'.

Not to mention the blatant misoginy just plastered across your fiction. Constantly talking about how women 'deserved' to be chained to a strong man, calling them bitches and whores with no hint of self awareness...

Out of all these chapters, the wedding one is probaly the strongest. There's no needless bashing, and whatever bashing there is (the plug thing for insance) actually contributes to the chapter and adds a level of sin and hotness. Good stuff there.

... even then it isn't that good. It's suffering from the aftereffects of your previous chapters, and is so poorly paced and cobbled together I can't believe you didn't rewrite it over. Seriously.

What's my point?

Come up with something original. With something good. With something that actually has a degree of thought and characterization put into things. Don't just write stuff for the sake of writing stuff.

I can't emphasis this enough. Spend literally an hour plotting out how your fic is going to go - how things work, how things act and what your characters do and don't like. The plot. Do this, and your fics will be ten times better. Avoid needless bashing. There's a difference being cuckolding a character and going out of your way at every opportunity to bash them.

And for the love of god... edit your fucking work before you post it. That last chapter has so many grammar mistakes I wanted to tear my eyes out.

I sincerely hope that you read this and see what I'm trying to say, instead of going 'REEEEEE' and deleting it. Fuck, I'm legitimately trying to help you here man. I'll even give you an offer: contact me. Message me on fanfiction.net (you can find a link to my profile on my profile here), contact me via email (again, profile) or join this discord: https://discord.gg/2NVGKH4. Because you have a lot of talent that's just being wasted, and I don't think that's fair.

Hope everything went well in Jamiaca. A friend of mine enjoys your work and he was concerned - glad things are going well even if you're experiencing writer's block. It happens.

great to see you writing again your work is some of the best on this site.

As for ideas how about Naruto's and Hinata's honeymoon. Where did they go? Did Naruto or Hinata have any plans?  DId the other know about them? What (or who) were they? Where there any curdious hosts? How was Sakura holding up during that whole week?

You could also go into Naruto's and Hinata's 1st time. Where/When was it? Was it Naruto's 1st since Tsunade? Did Hinata practice to get as good as she is for their 1st time or is she just naturaly that gifted?

There is also how did Sakura get pregnant seeing as seeing as she is disgusted by Saskue.

Hmm. I can understand where you're coming from. As for suggestions, I'd be interested in Naruto's interaction with Tsunade to be expanded upon. She pretty much made him promise to conquer and impregnate her once he was strong enough. Did he ever live up to that promise?

I am really glad to see you are back. I wondered what happen to you. The new chapter was pretty good. It felt like more like a scene rather than a chapter since the action was them simply moving to the master room. I hope the next chapter is the threesome. I can't really help with Karui ideas but there are other females you can try. How about Moegi? She might not be a hot bombshell but she has the unique angle of having called Naruto "boss" for a while. You can try some sort of Office boss/Secretary scenario. Karin could also be a choice as well. I mean she is a full blood Uzumaki something that this Naruto should fine very important. 

Love the story, hands down one of the best smut stories around here, in my opinion.

There are quite some angles I'd like to see pursued, so I'll just note them down, maybe you'll do some of them:

- Natsu Hyuga (dunno why, I find her hot, could tie in with former Hyuga Chapters)

- Kurotsuchi 

- Mito Uzumaki ... first Hokages wife is miraculously still around (or around again?) and becomes the wife of the 7th

- Naruto has some admirers from the movies. He promised Shion a child, Koyuki could (still) have the hots for him, Sara could - again miraculously - end up in the same time as Naruto ... (or he gets together with Sara's daughter, but I'd like Sara better)

- Yugao Uzuki ... his personal ANBU guard that is dedicated to see her Hokage sexually satisfied

(could extend to Komachi (a game character))

- Ibara and Tsubaki (the two moms from episode 1 I think) who hated him ... you get the idea.

- Mabui, 'cause shes hot (or Yugito or both)

- Tamaki, cucking Kiba (not so far off, consinderung he already has the female Inuzukas unter control)

- Ameno, Matsuri & Yukata, the three Suna-Kunoichi

- Shizuka from Nadeshiko ... 'cause he already has the rights to her hand

- Hanare, the Kunoichi from Jōmae Village

- Honoka (Uzumaki) ... 'cause she is the best bet to get pure blooded Uzumaki

- Some of the MILFs? Mikoto Uchiha, Hinatas mother (Hitomi?), Mebuki, Yoshino, Inos mother ... some of them lost their husbands in the 4th Shinobi war, Mikoto just survived the massacre

- Satsuki Uchiha ... Sasukes not before mentioned twin to add to Sasukes humiliation (maybe together with Mikoto)

Ok, I'm running out of ideas

Anyway, looking forward to coming chapters.

Cheers

Great as always! It's always fun to read your portrayals of a mindbreak; Ino was just so broken in this chapter it had me chuckling. And Sakura, in the end, was funny as well.

If you want suggestions, how about a NaruHinaSaku threesome with a focus on oral sex. A double blowjob with Hinata educating Sakura on how to perform fellatio and forcing her to deepthroat.

You could always do Mei; either as a solo conquest or a threesome with Tsunade—or both.

Instead of Kurama, write about Kaguya. There is also Samui and Kurenai.

Anyways, it was great to see this update. Until your next release.

Chocho / Hyuuga Hanabi / Sarada in a 3some

This shit is hot as always.

It's nice to find a bastion of light among the murkiness that is the current Sasuke/Harem or Sasuke cucking Naruto fad that's happening here at the moment.

Thank you good sir and know that you are doing God's work.

Good chapter and your right about the site. You could always go with some of the movie or filler girls. Or the other female kages out side of tsunda. No doubt nearly all the other villages would lo e to get some uzumaki DNA even more since naruto strength. The peace means sudction would be on the raise since kidnapping would be a no. Or just plan stuiped.

This story is hot as hell. What are the ladies bust sizes and will you add characters from other anime that are Busty?