Reviews for Kage SexbombBy : SniperJoe |
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Damn, Naruto just keeps on breaking Ino's mind over and over again to the point where she's just speaking random nonsense. And hinata, sakura, and that stranger lady are just watching it all go down lol. Nice chapter my dude
Are you seriously anxious about including more Ino? Helllllll no! It’s hot as hell! I want more! Maybe even a pregnancy involved. I’m assuming he’s already impregnated tsunade, which by the way you need to include in the present chapters and not just the past ones, so what’s stopping him from spawning a few (read many, many, many) kids with his girls?
although I will point out that at the beginning there were quite a few typos and missing words, so I’m the essence of giving criticism please take more time. As much as I want these chapters every day (which I know is impossible to ask of you) I don’t want the disconnect when i’m in the middle of reading and have to re-read a line 3 times to see what it really meant. Other than that, keep em coming!
I like the fact that you like Ino so much in this story. By all means, please don't stop including her in future chapters after you're done with the 'Onsen' chapters.
For the love of god do a Tenten
Good chapter bro
Okay that one was weird. Hot but weird. Oh well, keep up the good work. :)
Hey man I am really loving the new chapters, glad to see you back as you're one of the few people around that still writes Naru-harem stuff. Recently I've had little reason to check the site as it's all either yaoi or Sasu-harem or Naruto getting cucked... come on.
I'm sure you already get tons of suggestions as for what girls to include. I'd be happy to read whatever it is you do next, but one thing I'd really like to see more of is some more scenes of interactions between the girls, maybe when Naruto's not in the room since when he is they (and the scene) naturally gravitate around him. An example would be a snippet of some of the "lessons with Shizune" that Hinata refers to here, or something with Tsunade and Shizune as they seem to have an interesting relationship!
Anyway thanks again for making this site worth checking again.
Another awesome chapter dude. The lemon was awesome as always. I loved how hinata was during the chapter and the smut. You made her so shy and cute but at the same time managed to make her so damn kinky and hot as the smut went on. How you handled anko was also nice. She was so confident in her abilities as a "slut" and thought mabe she could handle naruto. Boy was she wrong lol. Making her loyal to naruto and to naruto alone despite her past adventures was a nice touch. Keep up the good work and can't wait for the next update
This was a great chapter. I'm not that much of a fan of Anko; she's all right, but not that exciting in my opinion. However, I did enjoy your portrayal of her.
Hardcore slut. And the tongue—kinky.
The dialogue had me laughing a lot. And Hinata as well. I shook my head when I read "Wan"; you had her barking in Japanese onomatopoeia. That was just adorable which made the situation weird as well, cause you know...
A wild slut was being tamed.
Looking forward to more chapters; until your next update.
fantastic update love to see more of this line. seeing the way early Hinata is with Naruto is great. given what happened with pain ark you referenced gives Hinata a great digestion above most of the girls being a naruto manic and then Anko the unconquerable owned completely. its great.
That is one hell of an update, man. I think I’ve only ever seen one other doc that had a NaruHinaAnko scene, and this one blew the other way out of the water. Really enjoyed the hints to future chapter scenes, seeing how Naruto and Hinata interacted before getting married(seeing how he treats her really helps shows the love within the context of the world and story) and seeing where Anko started out compared to the first chapter.
Also glad to here this will be a multi-chapter scene. Seems you got a great bout of inspiration and I hope it stays with you. Keep at it!
It really shows that with this chapter you were greatly inspired. Great job as always and the proper introduction to Anko was the best I could have hoped her. I love Hinata in this chapter and the contrast to Anko played off super well and there were so many things that clicked together. Loved all of it so far and there's still more potential with "Alley" so I'm hoping for a quick update. The only "negative" thing I'll say is that it is a shame that Temari doesn't do it for you. I think she would be perfect for this story but of course if you're not interested in her don't force yourself to include her .
Awesome man can't wait to see more
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