still waiting on for the following

Chōchō Akimichi

Hanabi Hyūga

Sarada Uchiha

Tenten

Temari

Moegi Kazamatsuri

Samui

Ayame

Tsume Inuzuka

Hana Inuzuka

Mabui

Mebuki Haruno

  okay so i would like to see the following girls in a showdo clone gangbag or something 

@Link29

There's a difference though. BigE makes it clear that Sasuke is not a nice guy. In fact, he never makes Sasuke be depicted as a nice guy. He's either a jerk, an asshole, a mix of both, or worse. But he isn't someone that's so nice that his behavior is unjustified.

But here, Naruto IS depicted as being a nice guy, or rather is trying ot be, but he performs actions and traits that contradicts with how he's trying to be painted as. I would actually say that Naruto being depicted as this domineering and NTR'ing girls and being an asshole to be far worse than anything Sasuke would do. At least with Sasuke, I can believe he would do what he does. But with Naruto, I can't. 

@Sniper Joe:

So I have read your fic for a while now, and this is my first review. I acutally really enjoy the sex scenes as they are really hot, and I love hte dirty talk. I'm sort of okay with the NTR theme you have going for a lot of these girls, even Naruto cucking Sasuke. I would be okay with it, given that my own fic has me having my character do NTR as a central theme.

However, as BigE mentioned and as I said above, your depiction of Naruto to be this nice guy, but then he goes and does these terrible things is just... not flowing. It's contradictory. I would have been okay if Naruto was depicted as an asshole from the get-go. 

I mean, look what you did with the Hyuga clan, rendering several of them to be stripped of a name and being referred to as a cumsleeve and a number. Why would Naruto being depicted as the good guy would do such a terrible thing? If he was a grade A asshole from the getgo, sure, I'm cool with that. But you're having people insist that Naruto is some saint or something that people would fall in love with. 

Still love the sex scenes and dirty talk, and I'll keep reading, but maybe try to ease up on the contradictory ways you're going with.

Naruto isn't a nice person here. He's an asshole. Stick with that. 

to BIGE2955 HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA this coming from a guy that sissifies and cucks naruto on a daily basis in all his fanfictions i mean seriously get the fuck out of here with your shit i mean it's all good when your precious sasuke-sama does it heck you even write rewrites and new versions of it but now that it's not him you find it blasphemous get the fuck over yourself damn it almost everyday you post a sissified cuck naruto fic and when we get something that the rest of us like you cry big crocodile tears over it look if you want to prep up your boy sasuke that's fine no ones stopping you from writing what you write but you don't get to come over here and post a review like that when your just doing the same thing with sasuke only adding sissification and cuckoldry to the mix with naruto as a victim by the way awesome chapter sniper joe looking forward to hear from you more keep it up.

Great chapter m8, I guess I was wrong about Sai. He wants to please her but knows he can't, poor dude. Well at least he knows naruto can make her happy I guess 

Somebody’s butthurt

I'm flattered that you think I'm a good writer, and I think the same of you. I had my doubts before, but Kushina 1 and 2 proved that to me... which is why seeing you regress into these Onsen chapters is disappointing in a way.

Anyway, not much happened in this chapter aside from the Sai thing, so, I'll go on a tangent about what I feel is one of the biggest problems with this story.

It's that your Naruto is a giant asshole -- yet, you try to paint him as a good guy in the story.

He rapes women. He breaks women's minds without a second thought. I mean... seriously. His best friend, Sasuke, and he not only rapes his wife but he goes out of his way to antagonize his best friend over it. (That's not even getting into how absurd the whole 'betting his wife's body' thing was, but whatever.) And what about Sai? Not his best friend, but his good friend. Any normal person would have said 'I'm not doing that' to Sai's offer to 'Take care of his wife'.

And really, the whole raping parts? Tsume? Sakura? How can you see someone who would rape his other best friend as good? You can't. He's a cunt.

The whole 'he just seeks love thing' is crazy, too. Because this has to be some kind of abusive love he wants to give other people. He's dominnaering, he insults and belittles them, he refuses to let them live normal lives, he constantly has to usurp his authority over them. Even his wife, Hinata, is reduced to little more than a cock slut -- she's painted as some 'tamed maiden', but every time Naruto gets his cock near her she seems to melt into a whore just like the others.

Come on, man. This story would be hell of a lot better if you had gone from the beginning to make Naruto the asshole, but you haven't. You constantly try to justify the actions of a guy who demands this from a woman: '“You keep saying that! But who’s this God you refer to?! Huh?! Who’s your God, slut?!”'

The funniest part is that your Naruto... acts kind of like canon Sasuke would. Just a canon Sasuke that's lost all positive traits and really has no reason to do any of the things he does.

Oh well. That's my two cents. Offer to join my discord is still wide open; no matter how much I might criticize your story, I still think you're a good writer, and would love to have you on there if only so you could listen to some more opinions. Link: https://discord.gg/4qdeJcx

Have a great day!

- BigE

Thanks for another update I was running out of stuff to read and congrats on making me feel bad for Sai, seeing how Sakura turned out he really should’ve known better oh well.

Great chapter once again. I am really enjoying these recent chapters mainly because they feel different and change up the formula. I am looking forward to chapters with more of a storyline to tie them together.

Talking about changing the formula, I was wondering about some of the plans you have for your future pairings. Obviously she would still a sub who was having the best sex of her life, but more in a fantastic hook up kinf of way instead "I want to build a shrine dedicated to you." The ladies who would be perfect to fulfill this role would probably be the female jinchuriki. You could use their increased stamina. At this point I don't think anyone would hold it agaisnt if you brought back Fuu and Yugito from the dead.

Another thing I was wondering is if you ever considered dabbling into genderbend stuff. MOstly because I feel like it would be th eultimate humiliation for someone like Sasuke if he got hit with a temporary cross between the Sexy Jutsu and Fuinjutsu. You could stretch it out over a few chapters if you wanted to show him slowly stop fighting it or whatever. Or you could have a softer route and go with someone like Sai who just really felt curious about how sex felt and since he can't get hard, then he should probably try it as the other gender.

On a more tame note, with the addition of Kushina, I am also looking forward tomore MILFs coming soon. Mei and Tsume need some loving. Ayame is also almost old enough to be considered one depending on when in the timelineyou decide to add her.

Best of Luck

LordSinnoh

Admittedly, the incest stuff with Kushina really isn’t my thing, which is why I didn’t review them. But they were still very well-written, so I hope you didn’t feel discouraged to write them. 

As for the new chapter, I liked mixing things up by giving the perspective of someone other than Ino in the situation. It helps make the situation feel fresh despite being the seventh of a series. I also really appreciate the extra details you had to show how much he loves Hinata. Obviously something like that can get lost in a story like this, but you seem to take special care to reaffirm his feelings for each girl, and that elevates the story above other “character fucks all the girls” harem fics. 

I’d actually be interested to see him use his...let’s call them talents, in some sort of interrogation factor, having to break one of the enemy shinobi. You hinted a little bit at it in the Alley chapter, and I’d be interested in seeing that explored in a chapter/series of chapters. If it’s more about breaking the woman than actually loving them, would Naruto be rougher/harder? Could he end up fucking a prisoner so hard she permanently breaks? Could someone like Tayuya, Kin, or Konan been broken so throughly that she’s nothing more than some panting sex pet kept back at Naruto’s home in the yard?  I’m rambling a bit, but hopefully I sparked some unrest in a chapter. 

Keep it up, you’re stuff is always engaging. 

Another great chapter man! And I gotta agree, the Kushina chapter was hot as shit! If you're still looking for ideas for more girls, maybe try the girls from the Road to Ninja movie? That could put a twist on the regular ones, a more assertive Hinata, mousy Ino, etc.? Anyway, can't wait to see the next chapter from ya!

still waiting on for the following

Chōchō Akimichi

Hanabi Hyūga

Sarada Uchiha

Tenten

Temari

Moegi Kazamatsuri

Samui

Ayame

Tsume Inuzuka

Hana Inuzuka

Mabui

Mebuki Haruno

  okay so i would like to see the following girls in a showdo clone gangbag or something 

nice chapter I actually feel bad for the attendant maybe you should give her a turn next lol

Great chapter. A bit disappointed that this isn't Kushina 3 but oh well. Like how it was from the perspective of the attendant. Loved hinata in this. She was hot. Can't wait to read more

For the longest time I couldn’t log in but I’ve been keeping up with the updates and I tell ya man I love each and every one though the alley chapter has to be my new favorite I hope another one comes soon also I’d like to see a chapter where Sasuke actually tries(and fails) to get Sakura back

Sorry for not reviewing chapter 19 earlier. I actually saw it a little after it was released, and I actually clicked on it to read it... but, well, stuff came up and I wasn't able to get around to it until now. And, since I've seen that you have updated the story again, I'm going to review chapter 20 in this one too, because why not.

Chapter 19:

This chapter was an excellent follow up to the previous one. If I had to be honest, this is by far the best chapter of your story yet. It's impressive to see how much you managed to top the previous one.

Kushina is...

You write her very well. I adore the way you've written her in this story. It's... great. That's all I can say: it's truly, truly great. My favorite part is when Kushina hesitates to fuck Naruto -- mostly because it's just great.

She's wanted a man for so long. She's seen what Naruto can do. She's fantasized herself in their position. She's begging, wanting, needing it... and then the moment comes. And she realizes how fucked up it is, and how much she doesn't want it despite the fact she needs it at the same time. Absolutely brilliant.

I've always been troubled by your characterization of Naruto in this story, but it's fine here. It doesn't detract from the chapter at least. It's the perfect contrast to the 'eager at first, relunctant in the moment' Kushina.

The ending is nice. The fact that Naruto still doesn't fuck her is probably my favorite part -- you're learning to pace yourself. To build up the reader's anticipation until the chapter when the good stuff finally happens. That's an important thing to do.

Again, good job. Can't wait to see Kushina 3.

Chapter 20:

Am disappointed this isn't Kushina 3. T___T

You got few reviews from that last chapter? What... the fuck?

I'm actually surprised by that. Because honestly, that was the best chapter of this work, and I don't have much faith in your readers if they refused to review that. Damn.

Ugh.

I fancy myself... not a fan of your onsen chapters.

They started off decent enough. But after that scene with Naruto blocking Susanoo with a finger -- a scene which had me laughing with hos absurd it was -- the quality... plummeted. The scene with Ino getting broken was pretty good, but it's clear you're just beating a dead horse by this point.

And I hate the fact that I feel like you're doing it just to bait some more reviews from your readers. I really do.

This one is... okay. I read it. It didn't really speak to me like the Kushina ones did.

Call it the lack of 'plot'. Yes, this is smut, but plot always improves it. The fact that the Kushina chapters had a coherent story to follow, the fact that they were well paced and that there was a degree of sin to it... well, it made it much better in my opinion.

This? This is just mindless smut. Which isn't a bad thing necessarily, but considering this is chapter seven of the Onsen series, I'm disappointed. You could have come up with something original; I know you could have.

But, you've impressed me before. Chapters 18 and 19 were great, and I'm confident chapter 12 will be too. Keep it up -- you're improving. You're doing far better than I originally thought you would, I'll admit that.

Also, that offer to join my discord from way back when is still on the table. I really do prefer delivering reviews in person... makes it a lot easier to get a reply from the person I've giving it to. Here's the link if you're interested: https://discord.gg/4qdeJcx

Ciao!