P.S I mean, think about it: Your story is crazily more popular than all his so exactly how could he offer any help? 

Even your Mario and Link stories have more credibility than all his. I think that says a lot.

And Dai? No idea what the hell that guy is talking about and at this point wouldn't be surprised if it's just another account of BigE trying to support himself and make himself look like less of an ass than he already has. Their words do seem awfully similar...

I'm guessing you've already figured it out but their words are just a thinly veiled attempt to drag your story to mediocrity...kind of pathetic on their behalf.

Please tell me that BigE isn't trying that whole reverse psychology bullshit where he critics your work but 'offers' you 'advice' on how to better your story? When your story is the single most popular story on the entire site? Hands down no argument.

I get it, his stories are somewhat popular to the pests this site has been collecting over the past few years where but I think we can all agree that your single story is more important than all his combined and honestly I think that pisses him off. I think honestly that he's threatened by your story and writing skills where his circulates the same generic bullshit he's trying to pass off onto your story. Actually not even just your story because I saw him do the same to another author on here and the dude hasn't posted since.

He's trying the oldest passive aggressive-manipulation assholes use to bolster themselves by systematically tearing down their competition which in all honesty is stupid if he believes for one second that his writing skills are actually worth a damn. I've seen better sentence structure and better plot from my 7yr old nephew, ergo his writing and stories are absolute trash, something I'm guessing he subconsciously knows but radiates in his fanbase full of idiots who couldn't tell their ass from a hole in the ground! 

Sorry Sorry, but seeing that technique just pisses me when he knows damn well he's not close to your league in writing but swears up and down 'he's trying to help you' well if his intentions are so pure why is he only trying this with you where your story has bashed his favorite character, when if anything he should probably be the one kissing your ass. You've been gone for a while and came back without missing a step where he's never found the first.

Unbelievable. Now there's two of them.

Look don't let BigE and Dai get you down. It's like they haven't actually read the story, or else they are just projecting a whole lotta their own nonsense.

They both say that Naruto is cruel and that you've justified it.

Now if he's justified then he's not an asshole.

Like they just describe a three dimensional character as if it's some horrifying thing.

Saying Naruto is sometimes bad and sometimes good, just means he’s a mortal red blooded male.

But it's because I've skimmed their stuff and those characters are about as textured as a sheet of A4 printer paper.

I myself get the premise that all the kunoichi are submissive and Naruto’s a big ol’ alpha because he’s OP strong.  It's not even hard to buy. Like you said, all the girls are kunoichi and half of them share blood with aliens (Ototsuki clan) so I mean the premise isn’t even that hard to buy.

You make it clear enough, and repeat it in different ways so that it's not too repetitive. But I can tell how important it is to you that the premise is brought up now and then.

How are they saying that he's raping Ino, when she jumped his dick in the Onsen?

How can he be taking away Hyuuga Identity. I remember that they started calling themselves cocksleaves because they were jostling for that D.

Naruto never called himself a saint. He admits to his mother that he’s had a debauched life and he’s worried if it’s ok.

In other words everythng has a reason and a context. And it's not a bad thing. It's not going out of your way to justify actions. That's called plot.

They just wouldn't understand what plot looks like if it bit them in the ass.
 

The meanest your Naruto ever was, was during chapter 2. And it's super justified. Hell it's justified just by watching Cannon Shippuden. Sakura treats him like shit from day one. And Sasuke tried to kill Karin, Sakura, and Naruto, and all the Kage, and Konoha as a whole. Like holy shit if you want a saint then cannon Naruto is the real saint.

You can hate your best friend. And if Sasuke was my best friend, I would hate him too.

By this point you have received so many reviews that I don't know if you even get to reading this one. But I still wanted to say that I truly love it. I finished reading it practically in one sitting the first time I came across your story. It is a testament to your writing skills that you manage to keep the reader invested throughout the entire story. A true great writer can, with his words, create a visual image in the readers' mind that gets the readers to fully emphatise, and engulf themselves in the story and events. And you succeeded admirably in this. From start to the end, every chapter, every event, it's all so captivating. And above all else you manage to keep the same 'tone' with your story in regards to the tone set in the first chapters. It's also extremely erotic.Your descriptions and inner monologues durign sex... pure sex, pure smut and pure awesomeness.

I love the fact that you weave  several different story lines througout the story. The different stories with the Hyuuga's, Tsume, Sakura and Sarada for example, all the while juggling different time frames. All very interesting and refreshing to read. The pacing is also quite good. Normally the story is either too fast, with Naruto becoming akin to a sex god in the first chapter screwing the entire list of girls in one sitting, or too slow, with endless chapters droning on and on about filler subjects, misunderstandings and unresolved sexual tension.

The best part to me is when you showed the difference Naruto treats other women around him in contrast to his wife. While honorable, just and caring in one way he also holds his wife in greater standing. It was best shown in the third chapter. "

Naruto smiled. “You’re number one Hinata.” He said gently, kissing her neck.

She shuddered. She could still feel his hardness nestled comfortingly inside of her.

“I fought for everything in my life. I didn’t get any damn hand outs. I had to scrape my way to where I am. Except for you. You were free. You just came out of nowhere and loved me.” He explained, turning her head and kissing her languidly."

And his unceremonusly pulling out of Sakura to service Hinata propperly. Both a testament to how Naruto views his wife as something higher than the rest. I wonder, could we please get to see how events transpired before the first chapter? How Naruto and Hinata (and perhaps others) interacted before?

Nevertheless, I cant stress anought that I really like your work. You've succeded to such an extent that you sir, are among the greats in writing. I can spend an entire day talking about how awesome your writing is. But just let me summarize by saying: "You sir, you *ROCK!"

I am happy to welcome you to the Church of Ino, brother. After following this story for months I am pleased to see you have finally accepted your feelings. I knew you were a potential member the moment I saw that your were making Ino the girl we as the audience spend the most time with and get to see every single step of her descent into sex-fueled madness. It is my hope that our Goddess may remain a highly functioning sex slave.

The idea that you might bring in RTN Ino fills me with joy, since she is a perfect mix between the two best girls in the whole Narutoverse, Ino amd Hinata. And you kmow what they say, it's always the silent ones.

If you really want to adventure into Blackmail/Bashing you could stretch things a bit and go A (Fourth Raikage) as a victim of blackmail. He was actually the one behind Hinata's kidnapping. And some fics like to imaginr that he has a relationship with his secretary Mabui.

Another possible victim of blackmail would actually be Onoki. I know it is never explicitly stated but you could play with the timeline a bit and have him be either in charge or a key player during the genocide of the Uzumaki clan.

Iwa's possible issues with the Yellow Flash could be play a role too.

Great fic Man, love the smut.. Ignore that big Hypocrite bigE, he's just a sasgay fanboy want to make himself better.. oh, how about you curb stomp sasgay even more, make him watch Naruto Impregnate Sakura and Mikoto while they're ovulating.. ooh, that would be fantastic.. well, keep up the good work man..

And to bigE, get the fuck out of here! Go masturbate to your cocksucking sasgay!

went and read some of the reviews for this story. masterkru makes a good point that some of the reader's seam to forget how the world works in this story.  I think that you even showed naruto's struggle with it a bit. a  Tsunade chapter mainly were she is training naruto with Shizune would probably be a good way of showing naruto coming to terms with struggling with the way he thinks it should be and what this world would even like for real. even though it doesn't really fit with your story theme a hinata only chapter would also be a good way were his girlfriend or fiancee at that point convince naruto she truly wants such extream treatment. showing naruto's main girls and naruto suffering because he was coming to terms with the nature of the world would work. Hinata wouldn't want her man to suffer and naruto I figure would open up to her if he did anyone. arranging something with some of naruto's girls would work for her.

Great work on the onsen series i love how you are depicting the level of dependance the women have on thier master and your work fills the sexual dominance/superiority fetish perfectly i find your work to be extremely arousing. personally i would like to see the follow up to the breeding maybe a chapter about naruto's pets/slaves being pregnant

Good little bit of story-building in this recent chapter. Kinda interesting to have the main sex scene just kind of good no one n in the background and not exactly be the main focus. Still pretty enjoyable to read though, it’s really good to see this story continue so much after its long hiatus.

I feel for Sai in this one. Knowing how the world in your fic works(which I think is a thing certain  people in the reviews tend to forget) it was probably the best thing to do, but you can still tell how hard it was for him to do so. Sai’s definitely a good guy, just suck with being dealt the short end of the stick. 

As an aside, ff.net can be a bit tricky with lemon fics, especially one this explicit. You might want to try AO3 or Hentai Foundry instead, as the ff one might get taken down for sexual content.

Still enjoying the fic, hope you keep writing!

still waiting on for the following

Chōchō Akimichi

Hanabi Hyūga

Sarada Uchiha

Tenten

Temari

Moegi Kazamatsuri

Samui

Ayame

Tsume Inuzuka

Hana Inuzuka

Mabui

Mebuki Haruno

  okay so i would like to see the following girls in a showdo clone gangbag or something 

@Link29

There's a difference though. BigE makes it clear that Sasuke is not a nice guy. In fact, he never makes Sasuke be depicted as a nice guy. He's either a jerk, an asshole, a mix of both, or worse. But he isn't someone that's so nice that his behavior is unjustified.

But here, Naruto IS depicted as being a nice guy, or rather is trying ot be, but he performs actions and traits that contradicts with how he's trying to be painted as. I would actually say that Naruto being depicted as this domineering and NTR'ing girls and being an asshole to be far worse than anything Sasuke would do. At least with Sasuke, I can believe he would do what he does. But with Naruto, I can't. 

@Sniper Joe:

So I have read your fic for a while now, and this is my first review. I acutally really enjoy the sex scenes as they are really hot, and I love hte dirty talk. I'm sort of okay with the NTR theme you have going for a lot of these girls, even Naruto cucking Sasuke. I would be okay with it, given that my own fic has me having my character do NTR as a central theme.

However, as BigE mentioned and as I said above, your depiction of Naruto to be this nice guy, but then he goes and does these terrible things is just... not flowing. It's contradictory. I would have been okay if Naruto was depicted as an asshole from the get-go. 

I mean, look what you did with the Hyuga clan, rendering several of them to be stripped of a name and being referred to as a cumsleeve and a number. Why would Naruto being depicted as the good guy would do such a terrible thing? If he was a grade A asshole from the getgo, sure, I'm cool with that. But you're having people insist that Naruto is some saint or something that people would fall in love with. 

Still love the sex scenes and dirty talk, and I'll keep reading, but maybe try to ease up on the contradictory ways you're going with.

Naruto isn't a nice person here. He's an asshole. Stick with that. 

to BIGE2955 HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA this coming from a guy that sissifies and cucks naruto on a daily basis in all his fanfictions i mean seriously get the fuck out of here with your shit i mean it's all good when your precious sasuke-sama does it heck you even write rewrites and new versions of it but now that it's not him you find it blasphemous get the fuck over yourself damn it almost everyday you post a sissified cuck naruto fic and when we get something that the rest of us like you cry big crocodile tears over it look if you want to prep up your boy sasuke that's fine no ones stopping you from writing what you write but you don't get to come over here and post a review like that when your just doing the same thing with sasuke only adding sissification and cuckoldry to the mix with naruto as a victim by the way awesome chapter sniper joe looking forward to hear from you more keep it up.

Great chapter m8, I guess I was wrong about Sai. He wants to please her but knows he can't, poor dude. Well at least he knows naruto can make her happy I guess 

Somebody’s butthurt

I'm flattered that you think I'm a good writer, and I think the same of you. I had my doubts before, but Kushina 1 and 2 proved that to me... which is why seeing you regress into these Onsen chapters is disappointing in a way.

Anyway, not much happened in this chapter aside from the Sai thing, so, I'll go on a tangent about what I feel is one of the biggest problems with this story.

It's that your Naruto is a giant asshole -- yet, you try to paint him as a good guy in the story.

He rapes women. He breaks women's minds without a second thought. I mean... seriously. His best friend, Sasuke, and he not only rapes his wife but he goes out of his way to antagonize his best friend over it. (That's not even getting into how absurd the whole 'betting his wife's body' thing was, but whatever.) And what about Sai? Not his best friend, but his good friend. Any normal person would have said 'I'm not doing that' to Sai's offer to 'Take care of his wife'.

And really, the whole raping parts? Tsume? Sakura? How can you see someone who would rape his other best friend as good? You can't. He's a cunt.

The whole 'he just seeks love thing' is crazy, too. Because this has to be some kind of abusive love he wants to give other people. He's dominnaering, he insults and belittles them, he refuses to let them live normal lives, he constantly has to usurp his authority over them. Even his wife, Hinata, is reduced to little more than a cock slut -- she's painted as some 'tamed maiden', but every time Naruto gets his cock near her she seems to melt into a whore just like the others.

Come on, man. This story would be hell of a lot better if you had gone from the beginning to make Naruto the asshole, but you haven't. You constantly try to justify the actions of a guy who demands this from a woman: '“You keep saying that! But who’s this God you refer to?! Huh?! Who’s your God, slut?!”'

The funniest part is that your Naruto... acts kind of like canon Sasuke would. Just a canon Sasuke that's lost all positive traits and really has no reason to do any of the things he does.

Oh well. That's my two cents. Offer to join my discord is still wide open; no matter how much I might criticize your story, I still think you're a good writer, and would love to have you on there if only so you could listen to some more opinions. Link: https://discord.gg/4qdeJcx

Have a great day!

- BigE