Do you have any ideas for an NGE story? Also, how many kids will Naruto spawn? How will they be raised?

I can't review each chapter individually right?

Uh. The most recent one was amazing.

I understand your concerns about going overboard on Ino.

But IMO it's hot AF and hotness is justice.

Goddamn it's hot.

Chapter 1: Amazing start. What the fuck how have I never seen this?

I came here from ffn. I just googled your story.

I made an account just to review.

I saw a review commenting on the fact they thought there was new stuff in chapter 2, so I went and gave it a re-read myself. You only really added to a couple parts, but what you did add definitely improved an already pretty damn good chapter. Expanding a bit on Naruto’s feelings at the time, putting more context as to why exactly it was happening, it’s all great stuff.  

Now to read the fic over again to see if there’s any other new stuff. 

Dude if you’re going RTN, I’d really like to see the following.

Minato cucked by Naruto fucking Kushina.

Menma cucked as Naruto 3somes both Hinatas.

Sasuke shamed as Naruto fucks RTN Mikoto.

either a chapter for each or all in one chapter - Ino and RTNIno, Sakura, Hanabi, etc.

More Kushina! 

ok I'm rereading this, and for a change reread the saruka chapter, i don't know if you changed it in response to bigE and his bull or just to improve your own story but if someone reads it now and doesnt have a clue how the world of this story works there complete morans or willfully stupid

 Nice story. Could you make a sasuke ntr fanfic?

To bigE

As I said get the fuck out of here!! Your Idea of the world ouside Naruto Harem is what Link29 said! So don't go here and critisize an author that actually LIKE a NarutoxHarem! It a Fanfic, sniper joe can make Naruto as strong as possible, even blocking a susanoo with just a finger and curbstomp your pwecious sasgay! Don't like it? Go jack off to your precious sasgay out of here you hypocrite!

This is going to my first review done for this site and it has come after looking at the argument going on. When it comes to my standards for smut, I only particularly care that spelling is decent, grammar is not distracting, and sentence structure is not too basic. Also, that the writing does not make me cringe when I read it. Example, I once read a story where a guy’s penis was called his spear of destiny. Terrible stuff. Now onto Kage Sexbomb. Structurally, the fic is fine. No glaring mechanical errors, especially in the post-Jamaica chapters. The sex scenes are hot and the descriptions are good.

Now onto the story itself, I’ll state what I have taken away for how the story works. This world is significantly different from the canon world, obviously or else the sex scenes wouldn’t happen. The world these shinobi seem to live in is one of debauchery where they are slaves to their own biology that forces them to act on their primal desires with no regard for decency or restraint. The men desire to dominate those around them and the females look to submit to the most dominant male in a twisted exaggeration of what people consider alpha. That’s how the story is framed, nothing too complex but it works. The story is told out of order and should probably best be looked at as vignettes framed around this world than one continuous story. Sniperjoe writes what he feels like writing so this works since it’s a fapfic. To me, if one were to extrapolate an overarching plot from story, I would consider it Naruto’s quest to dominate Tsunade and the consequences that came from pursuing and eventually achieving that goal. Tsunade is essentially the strongest woman in the world, so strong that no man could dominate her, and she essentially grooms Naruto in this story with the sole intention of claiming her. Most of this fic takes place after this point so after he’s claimed Tsunade, it’s obvious no woman would be able to resist him since the world works on a simple dynamic of strength and power. Other reviewers describe this version of Naruto as an asshole. He is, but you have to look contextually in the story. The women in the story adore him but that’s because he is an alpha sex god and they’re all broken by him. The only guys who show up are Sai, basically an emotionally stunted eunuch, and Sasuke, a guy who has at one point tried to kill every woman in his life that wasn’t his mother. Naruto expressing regret or lamenting his ability to bend women to his will isn’t him being portrayed as a nice guy, it’s him dealing with the fact that he can get away with anything through sheer force and also being scared that he likes doing it. In a way, he’s just as much a slave to his biology as the women are to him.

My recommendations for Sniperjoe. Don’t abandon the fic before you get to Tsunade’s claiming. My personal favorite chapters are Alley and Tsunade 1 since I like the way you write Tsunade and Hinata. Hinata is my favorite in the story because of the contrast of innocence and dirtiness so more of her is always great.

@BigE

Where in any of your stories does logic exist? And sweep you away and engross you? Mate, I don't know who told you your story delivers that but they lied. Horribly.

I tried to read 3 separate stories of yours. 2 here and another on HF but I couldn't even get passed the half-way point. And those were the ones where Naruto is the MC so I think I can criticize your terrible writing and if that doesn't qualify me then how about the fact I'm a year away from getting my English Major. Doesn't matter? Don't believe me? I don't care.

And my purpose of the question is how can you offer help when everything you criticize him over is something you have absolutely no experience in whatsoever? You've written a few stories and suddenly you're a 'good author'? Get over yourself mate! I hate that I've wasted my time discussing this with either you when everyone and their entire bloodline could see that your problem is that he's bashed your favorite character and nobody from the Sasuke-fandom will raise hell about it like the Naruto-fandom did your stories while I'm still on the fence on whether Dai is an alternate account of yours or whether he actually has a pretty baseless problem that has a simple solution that involves not reading the story. Though he also could have just commented for the hell of it and is laughing at my reaction. Oh well.

Regardless what either of you say, I'm done discussing this with either of you as I think it's disrespectful to argue in the comment section of any author's story. SniperJoe if you are reading these, I apologize. For all of us.

To BigE2955 Yes to you there is a world beyond narutoxharems power wanking and character bashing and that is sasukexharems cuckoldry and naruto sissyfying cause that is what i see nowadays in each and every one of your fanfics that you post here its either cuck him or huumiliate him and when people do it to your precious sasuke-sama as i've said earlier it's blasphemy oh sasuke-sama is a genuine arrogant asshole so he gets all girls to spread their legs and fall in love with him while naruto is a timid loving cuck bitch thats your logic, each and everyone of your current fanfics always come up with sasuke cucks naruto and naruto takes it like a bitch with a smile on his face and you think thats quality writing well then fine good for you be happy with that just leave the rest of us to enjoy our naruto harems in peace i've stopped reading and reviewing your fics cause i know how predictable you can get with them alright nobody is telling you to stop writing what your writing just stop being a bloody hypocrite over here please thats all were asking.

@DoesItLookLikeICare

Jesus christ, this pissing contest between you and Mr. Dai has gone on long enough.

Give it a rest, will you? No? Okay, then.

Firstly: of course it's porn. We're on a website called 'Adult Fanfiction'. 'Porn' doesn't necessarily mean that it has to suffer a complete lack of logic and good story telling. The best kind of porn is the kind that can sweep you away and engross you.

Secondly: I don't think you know what 'sentence structure' or 'plot' is. In fact, I doubt you've ever actually read any of my stories; and if you have, it's blatantly obvious that you're allowing your preconcieved notions to get in the way of actually making a critique.

Thirdly: as Dai said, popularity means nothing. This story is more popular than all of SniperJoe and my story's combined: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/3201446/1/Neo-Yondaime-Hokage. It doesn't mean it's better, or even slightly decent -- the first few paragraphs have a dozen grammar errors alone. But, oh wait, but your logic it's 'popular' so it's better, yes?

And regardless, I honestly think you must be joking. SniperJoe has written three other stories -- each one has about 10 reviews, and each one is one to three chapters. That doesn't seem as 'well recieved' as you claim considering one of my one shots has about as many reviews as those three stories do combined.

Lastly: are you daft? The real purpose behind our 'offer' is just as Dai said: It's definitely not cause we want Sniper Joe to actually improve the quality of his work. Apparently, wanting to help a geniunely talented author progress past this trap you guys have him locked into is a bad thing. There's a world beyond Naruto harems and endless power wanking and bashing of other characters -- apparently, you haven't reached that conclusion yet.

Have a nice day, :)

@Dai

Dude/Dudette, it's porn. SniperJoe even said he's not writing an actual story, he's writing for stroke purposes. Period.

If he wanted to write for plot, just the teasing chapters where he's setting stuff up for the future pretty much says he doesn't need either of your help. 

And about me insulting every other author, no I pointed out the pointlessness of either you or BigE talking about quality when BigE has the sentence structure and plot of a 3rd grader, and that's even including if his are just for stroke purposes as well, while you looking for a story inside of a stroke story really says a lot about your thinking. Psst, it doesn't say a lot.

And if an author came to a more erotic based site to write a story that doesn't involve sex and has that 'quality' you keep spouting off about instead of posting it on Ficwad or ArchiveOfourown or FF or literally hundreds of other sites that they can get the credibility they want then chances are they aren't all that bright either. Because tell me, what sense would it make to post a story on a site that people are looking to get off?

SniperJoe delivers that to the T. Whether it's because it's a NarutoxHarem story or not, it's popularity still outmatches everything either of you have written. And whether you like it or not, his popularity on this site is pretty telling and it's not even just this story as his other ones are well received as well because he knows why he's writing the story and its intended audience and delivers efficiently.

And honestly, as much as I hate this saying it pretty much fits here, nobody is holding a gun to your heads and forcing you to read this. So I guess the only question that remains is...

What is your real purpose for your 'offer'? Because sorry, your supposed reasoning has so much BS behind it Helen Keller would both see and smell it miles away.

@DoesItLookLikeICare

Pft! I'm sorry, but did you ACTUALLY use the logic about the story being more popular more in regards to how there's more reviews? That's the argument you're going with there, right? 

If you think that popularity = quality, then you, my friend, have likely written very little in your life. 

And you actually have insulted just about every other author on this and many other sites that are plagued with the case of having less reviews despite having more quality in their work by saying that. 

Why do you think Kage Sexbomb is so popular? Cause Sniper Joe is able to make high quality work? 

No, it's because he's actually writing a NarutoxHarem that he updates, when most of the fics that are around are either Sasuke fics or some yaoi fics. Very little has Naruto be a central figure in them, especially this one where we have Naruto be this huge stud of an alpha that is destined to bitchify every girl that would even gaze upon his perfect body and cock. 

The fic's quality can easily be better, and I enjoy several scenes it has, but it's still lacking. I don't care if Naruto cucks everyone and NTRs all the girls. I don't care if he is loved by every girl and envied by every man. But the story has become just overall cheap and tells very little, except wonder which random girl will spread her legs for Naruto next time. 

But apparently, because BigE and I seem to be the ONLY ones that seem to have any form of criticism for this fic, we MUST be the bad guys. It's definitely not cause we want Sniper Joe to actually improve the quality of his work. No, we simply MUST hate him because he's writing a NarutoxHarem and cucking our 'beloved' Sasuke.