Reviews for The Legendary Sucker ChroniclesBy : MorbidFantasy |
Glad I found this! With a nicname like that I am suprised more stories like this arent out there.
This fic really grew the beard in the second half. The first half was awful, as porn, it was boring, the first sex scene was dubcon without dubcon's usual emotional intensity, and the second sex scene had too much math in it.
The second half is good as a dark erotic drama. Kunio's backstory might have featured a well worn trope, but it feels emotionally real, I can see how he is emotionally deranged.
Kunio has a really screwy view of rape as being a fate worser than death, since it sounds like he wanted his sister to be put out of her misery as early as the end of the gang rape (how about her walking away from that?). Rape is a worser crime to commit than murder, but in terms of fate, I rather be a rape survivor than dead (I might sometimes think otherwise if I were ever to suffer penetrative rape instead of the run of the mill gropings and verbal threats, but I will probably eventually pull out of it to find enjoyment in life again, most survivors do). He could have, should have, saved his sister. If she was working 40 hours shifts, even if all she was doing was paper-pushing, she would still be insane because people need sleep, if he had only took his nee-san out of there she would have been much better after a week of proper food and sleep.
The dark erotica part sizzles in the second half, I found Tsunade begging Kunio to let her come in the beginning to be kinda trite, but starting when someone reached around Tsunade to squeeze her nipples, it got hot.
The gang rape was well written, and the gang's suggested ending was fiendishly clever and cruel (and realistic, sadly, real life victims have been dismissed as whores before). ...and here, the Math Monster strikes again, but it wasn't as bad as last time.
...and..this "Technically, he was still raping her, and Tsunade wasn't so mind fucked as to believe that there was a genuine connection here. But, given the alternatives, this was the lesser evil." this line makes it real.
//forcing as much of it as possible up into her love canal // I highly advise you not to use the term 'love canal' here, as this paragraph is from Tsunade's perspective, I could see one of the gang calling it that, but this paragraph is from her right? It detracts from the rest of the paragraph.
//“The dirt munchers have been very consistent with restocking from Konoha// Konoha, which they hate, eeep!
I seem to recall that Iwa was extremely tight fist with money, so Tsunade would definitely have to be working groups and taking them three at a time to earn her owners money.
This fic has really gotten good, you can feel Tsunade's emotional intensity. That outfit she is in gives me the shivers.
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