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Reviews for Sasuke the Conqueror

By : Ronin

From JordoZ on February 14, 2015
Interesting. A few bits I felt were a bit lacking though. For instance - the entire chapter, the word 'breasts' came up 5 times and 'tits' even less than that. Alot of people like me enjoy the description of things like large breasts bouncing, being squashed into something like 'over-ripe melons' etc. Just something I think would improve your lemon writing.

Also, things like Kushina getting whored up. You only gave them a brief mention. Like the lipstick. At the end, you had 'Kushina wrapped her lips whorishly around his cock head' - you should have mention in their about her slutty, smokey blue lipstick smearing over it or mentions of he her full, slutty blue lips. Stuff like that would make reading this fic all the better.

Idea time. I noticed you only really mentioned Sasuke's age in this fic besides Kushina's that is. That leaves us with a lot of room. For instance, you're making a 'Naruko' for this story, so why not make her Naruto's older sister at age 21 or so and boost Sakura's age to that aswell. It would really show Sasuke's prowess more that his first girlfriend and lay was a 'cool older girl'. And for the coup de grace you could add a 'Sasuki' into the fic. An older sister of Sasuke's the same age as Naruko.
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From ANON - Lea on February 14, 2015
Female reader here. Forgive me if I'm not sold on the story. I will explain why.

I wasn't really fond of the SasuSaku scene. It lacked...conflict. Felt like you were filling up pages with just...sex. Sex that doesn't move the plot forward. I found myself skipping to the KushinaxSasuke scene because therein it contained tension, conflict.

But overall, I'm not sure how I feel about the story. It's indubitably "hot", yes. But as for stimulating anything deeper than this, stimulating wonder or curiosity...I'm drawing a blank. The characters are all one-dimensional. Every character here is more cartoony than the original cartoon itself, very flat. Every character is a toy to just have sex with, with no repercussions or internal conflict. I'm not sure if you leaned back in your chair and said "ah, fuck it! Let everyone screw!". Ultimately my biggest qualm is that Sasuke feels no remorse, none whatsoever, and he's way too off the plane to resemble the original, and I feel I have to suspend my disbelief more than I ought to.

Fine I'll suspend.

I am left to assume that this story belongs in the CRACK genre. A material used strictly for some readers to masturbate to, even though it could have a little more depth. And with that said, I take it with a grain of salt, and give you five stars for the 'porno' scene, but only between Kushina x Sasuke, since that was enticing in the 'forbiddeness'. What I'm saying, is if Sasuke felt the stakes too, not just Kushina, I would have been more happy to rate this the five stars. I want to feel internal conflict on both sides. This could be worked on. Maybe we will see the internal conflict on Sasuke's part when he realizes how much of an asshole 'best friend' he's being.

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From ANON - TheWarlockofChaos on February 14, 2015
Whoa, this is first class Ronin. No other story has done what you have done at this point. I really look forward to seeing him do the women you have named like Mei, Kurenai, Hinata and Naruko and others. Ones like Anko, Shizune, Yoshino (husband is a lazy Nara), Yuugao, Samui, Karui, Mabui, Yugito, Ayame, Konan, Temari, Ino, Tayuya (I hope she is still alive she is really similar to Kushina), Kurotsuchi, Tsunade, Sara, and Matsuri? (Cuckolding Gaara?) and a whole variety of others. Whether or not you include all of them I intend to read this awesome story as far as you will take it.
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From ANON - Anon on February 14, 2015
At the end you said Naruko there..how in the hell are you gonna do that when from what I've read there is only Naruto since unless I missed something Kushina only had a son...wait..you're gonna do the 'lock Naruto in the sexy jutsu form and have her fall for Sasuke and stay female' schtick ain't ya? I've seen it done before, but you are a good writer I'll give you that. Considering the fact that I outright dislike to nearly despise NTR in fics and other works that says alot when your writing can make it at least tolerable for me. Let's see if I'm wrong on how you get Naruko into this fic, and if you do go with the cliche' I mentioned let's see how well you write it.
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From jj on February 14, 2015
plz write more post about hinata cheating on Naruto that be hot
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From ANON - Anon on February 14, 2015
You updated much faster than I expected. I'm really liking how you're portraying Sasuke,the way he just demands authority from Kushina is very hot. I'm guessing that the other girls mentioned in this chapter (Konan, Ino and Tsunade) will appear later, right? Going by the way Sakura described her, I think you should do a flashback chapter to go more in depth on how Sasuke seduced Konan.
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From Juneblue on February 13, 2015
This was incredibly hot! I learned so much reading this haha.

I definitely immersed into this one. Especially when Sasuke calls her dummy, in my head, that's an amazing parallel between mother-son: since Sasuke reserves the dummy nickname for Naruto. And I felt wow, this is definitely getting real!

If you do Naruko, woah, I guess that would be my personal interest. What kind of dynamic of a 'screw' would Sasuke share with Naruko? How would it differ from Kushina? I suspect we should see a different power dynamic and kind of 'conquering'.

Really, really excited for your update. Thanks for sharing!

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From Night_Being on February 13, 2015
Oh okay! I have to admit I've only skimmed through the story, mostly out of curiosity why would be the very first chapter rated so many times and so badly. Well. Yeah. Now I know... because you've made even people who dislike Sasuke crave for him. And they can't stand it. :D Okay, maybe he wasn't the best example of a friend in the manga/anime or whatever. But hell... this is not about that. No-one can deny that this arrogant Uchiha is HOT! Yes! And the fact that he's an ass only adds to it. So yeah. I'm definitely reading this story! :D Please don't be discouraged by people who go and read things they don't actually like. Foolish little kids. Your writing style is very nice, interesting, captivating and entertaining. So the quality of this story will only rise with every other chapter. :) I don't really care which women you'll put with him, because I'm here for Sasuke! And no, I'm not the typical 'Sasuke-lover fan girl'. I know and acknowledge all his flaws and shit. But this fic isn't about that. It's for fun and it's just an awesomely written fiction. :) (Where the hot Uchiha fucks some pretty ladies. O.o Gah! Sue me! I love this!) :D

Oh, okay. I think I've ranted enough. I just felt the need to babble about nothing in particular for a while. :D Now if you'll excuse me. I have a story to read. ;)
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From ANON - puro on February 13, 2015
This has some good potential.I really want to see other older women besides Kushina in here like Shizune, Kurenai, Anko and Yugao. I'd also like if you have Sasuke become a MILF chaser and have him seduce other mothers like Mebuki, Tsume or Yoshino.
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From ANON - Anon on February 13, 2015
why are these people clicking on a story with a concept they dont like.
i dont like yaoi so i dont review yaoi storys.
if youre not gonna give it a chance just go away.
stop being dicks where you arent wanted!!!
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From ANON - TheWarlockofChaos on February 12, 2015
As I have stated in SpartanAlchemist's request forum this is an awesome story. The concept is very rare no matter what anyone else says. The most common harem stories on the site are either yaoi (which quite frankly is NOT my thing since I do not swing that way though others can hold their own opinions as long as they don't try to push them onto me) or Naruto with a harem stories. No else with an exception of a few rare stories really has a harem.

Also I kind of like fictional netorare it is kind of intriguing though if it were reality my stance would do a 180 turn. Anyway awesome story Ronin, I really look forward to reading more chapters of it. Keep up the good work man, you rock.
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From ANON - Anon on February 12, 2015
ALL OF KONOHA WILL BE WILLING CUCKOLDS.
EVEN IF SASUKE HAS TO SARINGAN THEM INTO IT!
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From ANON - Anon on February 12, 2015
hope naruto minato and the rest of the cast become willing cuckolds to the mighty uchiha clan.
being forced to serve sasuke in whatever way he chooses.
love this story.
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From ANON - Darkvater on February 12, 2015
Is sasuke going to be a Milf wrecker ? And was that foreshadowing I saw, will the uchiha have an uzumaki brood mare ? Nice work I would have rather seen neji or kiba or even udon they get little attention or even better Lee but your writing kill is grate can't wait for more don't be disheartened by haters .
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From SpartanAlchemist on February 12, 2015
Nicely done, especially liked Sasukes attitude during the *ahem* activities...gigity. Also I'm pretty sure you'll have no problem getting 10 people to like it, in fact I'm fairly certain as I'm writing this you have about 60 who rated this. Good on ya.
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