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Reviews for Demon's Dirty Dreams

By : MathiasBlue
  • From ANON - SorenMageofmareth. on January 10, 2015
    Hn. Got to say good porn. Terrible villain protagonist development. Your justification for them run hollow both in the poor set up for their allowance, and the poor use of criminalistic justifications that run counter to canon character development that you have going on in the background.

    He's also got this string of hypocrisy in here and your other story that's poor in how obvious it is and more importantly how easily it can be destroyed by people he respects by relating things to his nindo, knowledge of psychology and basic equivalency.

    I mean here it's more than obvious that way too much of how village veiws was solidly earned and justified. I mean his victims start out with a nice girl who was never mean to him. Friend whose scorn was earned and justified. And someone utterly powerless to fight back even if he'd done it while she was awake. The last one is bad and it cracks you're saving throw but he turns in traitors to show his loyalty in half.


    Building a good villain protagonist out of a hero requires a gentle escalation crimes, good justification, and utter lack of sympathy to the victims until investment is developed and a fall from grace moment won't rip you from his side.

    I don't think you managed that here. In the other story it is somewhat more forgivable and less. More in that that naruto was manipulated in his youth by an authority figure (who probably shouldn't have gotten the chance but porn) And less because he ran into other authority figures at times to raise red flags and who had ways to easily break his argument with things like "I guess your nindo is meaningless and loyalty worthless." I mean a keep your word nindo is worthless when you regularly betray the trust of comrades and help them break their marriage vows and take potshots at people who like and acknowledge you. Ya know?

    But here he start with a Hinata who was being nice to him and fainted. Continues to an ino who calls him out on bullshit from pure knowledge and not bias that he admits and move on to someone who does have bias but who has it more than supported and in this specific case is more than kinda in the right when it comes to appearances. What happened to naruto did not just appear to be favoritism it kinda actually was a text book definition of it even taking in the extenuating circumstances that basically boil down to him being too gullible without sasuke's serial mindfucks.


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  • From ANON - sasaki on December 31, 2014
    hey! I'M loving the series a LOT! would you mind adding Konan as well at some point? And a bit more anal action?

    Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - UnknownPerv on October 31, 2014
    Nice! I look forward to the next chapter. Have you thought of doing a story that features mainly on Anko using Naruto and the other genin as her playthings?
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  • From ANON - Gui on June 16, 2014
    Don't you think that Hana will brag about Naruto's talent which would allow him to sample several curious and high Level Kunoichi? Heck, some of them might even do him simply to have a breeding stud and get pregnant. What? Same couple relationship exist too.
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  • From ANON - Jack on June 05, 2014
    Non-smut parts were just as good as smut ones. Have you thought of making a separate fic that would be a bit more consistent on the matter of sneaking, stealing, pranking Naru-thief?

    I am a bit disturbed by your latest victim decision, not only because canon Haku was cross-dressing male, though, well, you couldn't help but think that something wrong with her even before reveal. While male Haku could be forcibly saved and befriend of Naruto(-ko, if straight smut is necessary), female Haku would be crushing on Zabuza, the only being that matters in her world, straight to the point of dying with him. FemHaku with Naruto would be like Hinata with Sasuke(there are such fics, though). And I couldn't guess how this Naruto could get a drop on sleeping Haku beforehand, as no matter how good he is, Haku is still better by this point.
    Tsunami would be all right, though.
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  • From ANON - BBWulf on June 03, 2014
    I love this so far. I can honestly say that your Naruto's personality is one of the better, if not best, I've seen as of yet. I also quite enjoy that this has an interesting story behind the smut scenes. Please keep up the great work.
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  • From ANON - LL on June 02, 2014
    I'm just holding out for the loli. An OC would be pretty cool- I'd love to see the background that would lead to him taking one.
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  • From porphyra on June 02, 2014
    This error created some disturbing images that really destroyed my boner
    preventing his cock from entering his throat - preventing his cock from entering her throat
    (and something that might be an error, since it's something that was applied so to speak, a verb form would make more sense)
    spit-slick flesh - spit-slicked flesh

    On another note, I'm not the biggest fan of Naruto/Fem!Haku, in most of the stories I've read Haku is a guy, which creates a bit of dissonance.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 01, 2014
    Pretty writing to go with some pretty good smut.
    Can't wait to see more
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  • From ANON - naruhinalover20 on June 01, 2014
    Well that was a awesome chapter glad how he got hana boy I wonder what would happen if kiba found out LOL looking forward to wave cause hey tazuna's daughter could help "pay" for the mission even though naruto would be killing gato in wave thus getting his money train back
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  • From ANON - shiro on June 01, 2014
    wish the naruto x hana would be long way parring...
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  • From ANON - Wyrtha on June 01, 2014
    Good chapter. Love the way you set up this chapter and even set up the next chapter bringing up Wave and giving Naruto something extra to do while he's there. Looking forward to seeing what you do with Wave and how many women he hooks up, knocks up, and just plain screws while he's there.

    Back to this chapter love that this technically has an alibi since this was his 'first' time. I hope they hook up again the future ... maybe even Hana brags about his 'healing' powers to a few friends or something. Lots of possibilities.

    Although now that he's a ninja I am interested in his other skills and how they progress maybe how his thievery and indulging in his new habit helps his ninja career, but I get that is a different story.
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  • From ANON - Dafox on June 01, 2014
    Lol i really like the stories behind the sex. Now I can't stop wondering who else will naruto bed. Great job as per usual!
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  • From ANON - Aiolos on June 01, 2014
    Dude, this story is great. Take as long as you want to update dude the Hana chapter was awesome and Fem!Haku sounds awesome
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  • From ANON - fox on June 01, 2014
    after reading ur story i loved the hinata and ino chapters not so much the 3rd one tho while i understand the need for revenge and all that... you would figure he would hit closer to home like sakura and other girls in his class... and i was kinda hopeing if u go to wave with this sotry u could do a fem haku lol i am also wondering if u will do repeates like hinata or ino... after say he finds out if they did or use the jutsu he could have more fun that way... u will run outa girls if u stick with just one at a time.... personaly im a fan of hinata haku fu.... and i am curious if he will do naruko and clone jutsu on some of his.... victims btw how often do u update this site dont let me have it were they send emails

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