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Reviews for HOW THE UNIVERSE WORKS

By : sweetangel23
  • From ANON - joe on June 25, 2013
    He looked toward the sky and he prayed to the universe for help.
    Little did he know, the universe heard his prayer
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    great beginning and a great concept
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  • From ANON - abby on January 05, 2013
    This story isn't bad, but I think the chapters are too short. At least write one complete scene per chapter, and don't interrupt it in the middle. Chapters 2 and 3 were all one scene, so they should have been one chapter. We could have waited a little longer for you to have finished the whole scene before uploading it. Because of where the story stopped in chapter 2, I was confused at the start of chapter 3 since I didn't remember Kakashi & co. showing up. To catch up on the story again, I had to reread the previous chapter. Not a big deal since the chapters are short, but still sort of annoying. Writing the whole scene makes the stuff happening in the story more memorable. It's like, if you're reading a book for pleasure, do you try to finish a chapter before putting the book down, or do you just stop wherever? If you've got the time for it, you usually try to read until the end of the chapter, right? The reason people do that is because it's easier to follow the story that way. So help us readers out by writing more complete scenes for your chapters.
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  • From smint45 on January 05, 2013
    I really like this^^ I wonder how Sasuke will react to Naruto^^ Hope to see you again soon!!!!
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  • From smint45 on December 28, 2012
    so this is like a timetravel alterneate universe kind of story? Our normal guy from our time gets send to a medival alternate universe? Cool^^ Hope there will be ninjas ore magic or something^^ See you again soon!!!
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  • From smint45 on December 27, 2012
    This is getting more and more interesting^^Wonder what will happen next^^ See you!!!
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  • From smint45 on December 26, 2012
    Interessting start^^ lets see where this is going
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