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By : TheLemonSage

From DiabloSlayer on December 03, 2012
So is this going to be the main site for updates now or is this still the backup and you're going to start posting somewhere else? Either way please update this soon. I loved chapters 30 and 33 but now I have nowhere to read them. Plus I can't wait to see what happens with Pakura.
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From ANON - Anon on December 02, 2012
Are ever gonna update this?
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From sempur on December 02, 2012
well since yourfanficiton is down he needs continue here, the story is very good
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From ANON - DrGn36 on November 29, 2012
What I meant about "I wrote this in fanfiction.net". I meant that I wrote the message at fanfiction.net also not the story. Sorry about this. I'm a little paranoid.
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From ANON - DrGn36 on November 29, 2012
I also wrote this in fanfiction.net. I really love your story so it would break my heart to see it stop. I have a backup of this story which contains the first chapter until to Chapter 33: Mabui. If you are interested in it please pm me in fanfiction.net or email me at hotcold_36@yahoo.com
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From ANON - jordan lopez on November 29, 2012
i really love your story man listen i don't know if you know this or not but i think yourfanfiction.com has been taken down the last chapter of your fantastic story was chapter 30 and you had 4 more chapters up on yourfanfiction for use fans to read could you please upload the nessary chapters on to this site (adult fanfiction.net so that me and your other fans may be abe to further enjoy your story man thanks i really love your story and i honestly question why no one has thought of it before and why fanfiction.net is being such asssholes to use writers nad readers. please update thissite with your story soon man thanks if you can't update it on this site could you just email me the chapters of the story that i have not read yet thanks man peace and love shadespace(fanfiction account name)/jordan lopez
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From ANON - alicel on November 28, 2012
i hope you continue writing this story now that yourfanfiction has shut down. please continue your good work(and that is saying it lightly) because many of your fans are waiting for you.

are you going to build up drama the way you did sakura's on kushina's inclusion to the harem?? i think you should, i mean this is basically incest and i really want to see your take on it
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
# She wasn�t trying to defend Sasuke but she did prefer people knew all the facts before forming their opinions on a subject. It was something her background in science had brought about #

Objectivity... curiously selective in when she chooses to apply it. Maybe using it and feeling the need to comment with Naruto (and the rest of the Konoha 12 -some of which, like Neji and Tenten, had never met Sasuke before the exams, and therefore knew him more or less like the Sand Trio... possibly having spoken even less words to him -none, I believe, in Tenten's case, possibly Neji's, even).

I mean, compare the situation with Iruka-Mizuki, and tell me if Naruto wouldn't have been shocked and outraged, not to mention protested wehemently, had the former put up the same show he did (they were colleagues, possibly friends, one would say that exeriencing the Kyubi was rather shocking for one's mental stability, and revenge, even misplaced, was not an uncommon point between the two, as lust for power and the choice to get it at the expense of loyalty to friend/village/duty/morals/bonds.

For that matter, I am pretty sure Aoi Rokusho had friends too (Mizuki certainly a lover).

Two points 1) in those cases, no one who know them, and certainly those that didn't (Neji, Tenten, ...) had anything but the standard, natural, smart, non masochistic and survival oriented reaction one tends to have towards nukenins; 2) in Mizuki's case, the betrayal happened before the man attempted to destroy the village and carry out a genocide in the streets -I think that that would actually grant him moral superiority despite the otherwise rather similar situation, namely the feeling that the village was holding him back for whatever reason, and the perceived need to get power for watever reason... not like revenge makes those acts more noble, while an understandable motif, I wouldn't exactly call it an admirable one, or one that would entail moral superiority on his part- Aoi is nothing to consider -stealing a sword towards joining the recent destroyer of the village and killer of its kage are really uncomparable actions.

Maybe being a scientist is not "actually" needed (let's also add that Naruto, despite his claim about how Sasuke was/was not, consistenty misjudged his character in canon far more than a rational outside observer would have by judging his actions and listenig to him actually stating his plan... empirical evidence, him insisting that he had been "kidnapped" and held against his will by Orochimaru -untrue, as he outright stated and physically demonstrated by going there on his own two legs-... Naruto actually being surprised Sasuke wasn't shocked by his "revelations" that everybody knew after timeskip... Naruto not understandin why he didn't come home after killing Orochimaru -was he sleeping when he explained that he wanted to end Itachi?-, and one could go on).

Well, maybe the only thing that's needed is someone with common sense. No need to understand Calaby-Yau manifolds. Look at how everyone else acts in similar circumstances, listen to people that actually know what they are talking about because they lived through it (Jiraya, with words and actions, even Iruka with Mizuki, by example, only to name a few). Sasuke was certainly not "special" or "unique" in his path and motives -which is why bad experiences can only explain, certainly not justify, actions beyond a certain moral event orizon... apart from the fact that he is neither repenting nor doing something to remedy (forgiveness on a silver platter, without having to work for it? Don't see how that would be satisfying from the point of the reader, nor getting something without putting the work into it wouldn't make it meaningless)-.
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
�He�s exactly what I think of him, a piece of trash that abandoned his home and friends to go worship at the feet of another piece of trash that killed my grandpa. He even turned on his master once he felt he had nothing to learn to boot.�

�Well it was a little more complicated than that,�

Quite less complicated than what she actually said afterwards demonstrated. I mean, he was not exactly the first nukenin to ever live, backstabbing is not exactly something I 'wouldn't' associate with criminal, particularly if they are the kind of person that was willing to betray his country and friends to go join the very same man that almost destroyed said country and killed his leader -and he was a member of the military that was sworn to protect it-. If he was willing to do that for power -and he put on the balance the two things deciding that he valued that more than his friends or honor/morals (but not, apparently, more than his desire to stick it to his brother by proving it wrong and doing things his own way. "He�s exactly what I think of him, a piece of trash that abandoned his home and friends to go worship at the feet of another piece of trash that killed my grandpa." is objectively impossible to reject, apart from the "worshipping" part -with his arrogance, fat chance of that- (for those who think that a recent development, think about Sasuke vs Lee, particularly about being a fool for going up against those eyes, etc. -not that Itachi wasn't guilty of the same boasting with Kakashi.
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
$ He even turned on his master once he felt he had nothing to learn to boot.�

�Well it was a little more complicated than that,� Karin said. She wasn�t trying to defend Sasuke but she did prefer people knew all the facts before forming their opinions on a subject. It was something her background in science had brought about as well as having her own illusions about Sasuke stripped away. �Orochimaru was planning to use his body as his own. I guess you could say Sasuke simply struck first.� $

Selective recollection. As he said to Naruto, he entered in the agreement fully knowing what it entailed. He did leave when he felt he had nothing more to learn and the deal became useless to him. His experience with Konoha taught us that he 'was' more than willing to betray and leave/kill/attempt to kill if he felt he didn't have anything to gain by staying loyal any longer. Saying "he isn't a traitor, he betrayed... (him for this or that reason)" is obviously a contradiction in terms (though I think it could be agreed that him doing that to Orochimaru was good for him and society in general, it does not exactly make him 'not a traitor'... James Lannister in Martin's book, killing a genocidal king and being scorned for betrayal -maybe it was a good thing, but a traitor is a word with a specific definition, that doesn't include it not working for bad guys-.
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From RiZ25 on November 28, 2012
when will you update cause it looks like Yourfanfiction.com bite the dust? you could try FF.net since they have yet to take down your limelight story. Eeither place, I Look forward to more from you.
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
Actually, looking at Hawk and Akatsuki, one could very well say that he would have backstabbed him in any case -either abandoning him to his fate, or actually attempting to strike him down, as he would do with Karin, and attempting to finish him (her) when he/she was no longer needed (and it was no longer necessary). Not something that appened here, but something all the evidence pointed towards him being likely to do (the premise was him caring about power/revenge more than about his friends/allies).
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
Actually, "villain" or "scumbag" might a more apt description than "criminal", as killing Orochimaru was the only mentioned act that was not a crime (though indicative of Sasuke's character as a backstabber -we are essentially talking about two criminals/lowlives entering in an agreement the former didn't still consider worth paying, having sensed a weakness in the latter, and thinking he could get away with a double-crossing... no "he was betrayed and only defended himself", he knew about it from the get go, as he told Naruto-).
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From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2012
Well, if we want to be objective, the possession was something that he was actually quite aware of, as he told Naruto. Maybe Karin should note that, while understandable, saying that he betrayed Orochimaru because he meant to possess him does not exactly constitute an argument "against" him beying an unrelyable traitor, quite the contrary (you cannot disprove that someone is a traitor by pointing out that they... betrayed (for a good reason), as while it might make his actions understandable, it doesn't exacty change the nature of said actions -likewise, stealing because you need food to survive, while making your actions understandable, also does not make you magically "not a thief"). If we want to be picky about it, then, Sasuke "did" know about the possession (the Cursed Seal thing was mentioned to him by the Sound group that went to get him). Had he not been for Orochimaru's illness, he might have very well thought it acceptable, or maybe not. Nonetheless, it's doubtless that he did leave him when he cheased to be useful to him (when he didn't have other power to give), and actually postulating that he wouldn't have done that if it had suited his goals slightly better, if there had not been such a threat (in other words, it's not as if he simply acted strictly in self defence -not to mention that it was a situation he agreed to, not a backstabbing on Orochimaru's part-)... well, given what he did with Konoha and his friends, 'that' seems such a quite unobjective and risky assumption. Looking at the empirical evidence and draving the objective conclusion would be that be it people, summon or stuffed animal, he is going to betray it.
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From ANON - Anon on November 27, 2012
Funny thing, the "objective scientist" pretese.

She effectively said something to the effect of:

"Let's look at the evidence: betraying one's country, joining the terrorist that wants to, and almost had, destroyed it, leaving it leaderless and defenceless, use of violence, attempted murder... and he even farted in the elevator... he might have had his cool moments at the age of twelve... I am sure the same could be said Mizuki or most criminals, for they mostly don't think of themselves as evil or deserving punishment, and in any case don't walk around with 'villain' stamped on their heads, otherwise Iruka wouldn't have befriended them in the first place, had he been unpleasant or morally questionable from the get go... yet you don't see the man remembering the good times and thinking that that could justify his later actions, or have an impact on what he is now/has become -one's day's clean clothes are the next's dirty ones-"

"It's untrue, you are not being objective, he is not a criminal as you say, him farting in the elevator was the heavy dinner's fault, he who invited him cannot blame him".

Kinda missing the point, there, gal.
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