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By : mannahpierce

From ANON - Slynx on August 18, 2012
Well, let me tell you. I definitely want to know how this story ends! I want to read the rest! It's something I look forward to reading and I catch getting all excited when it's one of your update days, checking my inbox to see if the next chapter is posted. I know I don't comment on every chapter, but really, I Always read it (and reread a chapter up to three times). So please continue writing? I know other people will feel the same, even when they don't comment or rate.

As for this chapter, I love how everything is coming together. They're slowly working on a plan and everyone is moving closer to each other. I love the interaction between Sai and Shikamaru, they really make a good team. And I have to say I'm glad Shika is with Naruto and Sasuke now, I think he needs them right now!

As I said. I hope you'll be able to pull through the struggle of writing this story and that you know you have my support!
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on August 18, 2012
So now it’s friends with benefits, huh? Ok… That was unexpected. I didn’t know Neji had in him!
FINALLY Shika is with them. It’s a great relief!!! Those chapter about Shika, Sasuke and Naruto are always the best. I only hope that there won’t be a situation where Itachi sacrifices his life to open the hole…. And Neji was incredibly bold at the end of this chapter…. I know that he became the victim of Madara’s doings but still…. It was bold.
Ps. When I asked if you have it planned how is it going to end I was merely curious. I didn’t mean anything!

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From ANON - cynaga on August 18, 2012
Ch 38 excellent pacing and evolution of relationships
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From daughterofvirgo on August 18, 2012
Chapter 38. I'm sorry that you're still having a difficult time writing, Mannah. But, please, finish this story. I enjoy it so much, and I really want to see how this series ends. Do not get discouraged.

Now that Shikamaru and Sasuke and Naruto have reunited, I hope they will be able to figure out a way to stop Orochimaru and get the children back.

Anyway, keep up the amazing work, Mannah, and I look forward to the next update.
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on August 13, 2012
Ok, just a title was enough for me to know what comes next.... The thought of killing Oro is always so good that it's almost worth it to bring him back.... but just almost and not really.
But to see him Kisame's hands.... hmmm...
So now at least Yoshimi is not alone.... it's kind of good.... in a way.... I'm trying to find some good points...
I hope the next chapter is not about Madara and his plotting because it's going to kill me.
I hope Shika will save the day.
I wonder if you have it already planned - the plot I mean - if you already know how is it goin to end or is it still unknown....
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From ANON - Dawn on August 12, 2012
OMG NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo That demented Snake print!!!! I will take that stick and ..oh whew it is just a STORY!!! A good one at that..:) Keep them coming!! :)
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From ANON - sadie237 on August 11, 2012
OMG!! Did you hear me gasping over here:)? That mean son-of-a! Space Queen you have made the old snake man meaner than the anime:) I did get a good laugh in when Haru thought about what Kisama will do when he fines out about Haka-san:) Yea baby snake man has dug a very deep grave. Not only with Haku-san other half's but To-chan and Papa!! Oh and the hiding place in the bottom:) That was brilliant Queenie! And so Haku-san. The most beautiful and double deadly of them all:) I'm reviewing late because I'm still putting the house together after the move. Now it's me time:) Which translates to Space Queen time:) Let me just say I'm happy for every Saturday. I don't want you to lose your grove:) I love how you give my emotions and my heart it work out:) I'm NOT saying I didn't miss you on Wednesday. It just made me look harder to Saturday. You have 'capture' my heart and mind Oh Great Space Queen of the Naruto Space Universe ^_^
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From ANON - Aflyingmonkey on August 11, 2012
omg omg omg omg omg omg.... *sobs and curls up into a ball*... Can't wait for the next update.
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From ANON - v on August 11, 2012
I do not like this at all!! The children being tortured!! By sicko pervert!! Of course, the cliffhangers in this are nail biting and tear-rendering, but really..Sicko Pervert needs to die!! Horribly and slowly!! When is help coming!! and what will happen to them if it does?? How will they deal with all of this? How will it affect who they are?? I'm very worried.
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From daughterofvirgo on August 11, 2012
Chapter 37. Gah! That Orochimaru. He makes me so mad. I hope Sasuke and Naruto are able to rescue Haru and the others soon. Poor Haku. I hope Kisame rips Orochimaru apart.

Thank you for another awesome chapter, Mannah. Keep up the awesome work, and I look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Procrastination_is_key on August 10, 2012
:( Poor Shika! Didnt know what he had until it was too late. *sniffles* I will miss this pairing in your fic- they were my favourite. Please have some KakaIru to ease the pain? Pretty please with a cherry on top? Tho I must admit I'm morbidly curious to see where this will lead for Shika and Neji...
But yes! at last, Sasuke's eyes have been forced open!!!

In other news, I'm sorry to hear you're finding it difficult to write. I find it very easy to read, if that's any consolation. :)
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on August 07, 2012
Wow.. just WOW!

I had goose bumps Reading about Sasuke realizing and accepting Izuna’s intentions. It was such a relief. I love the chapters about the grown-ups the most (by that I don’t mean chapters about Madara. Those are mostly depressing)
Neji – I can’t help but feel relieved about that too. I know that Shika will hurt (even though he looked ok, I know he’s trying to act cool) but it gives so much hope for Shika’s happy future.

I can’t wait to see who is going to be Shikamaru’s new operatives. I mean, I hope there are new people who we don’t know yet. There is so many cool characters in the original series that still didn’t make appearance in your story (like all those tokubetsu jounins, like Raidō or Aoba… except Genma. I was crushed when he died in your story. And chuunins… and Yamato…)

Finally – no Wednesday updates? …. I won’t complain because I think it was incredible that you are able to give us such a regular updates anyway. Thank you very much for not stopping with your writing. I really love it. You do such a great job and your writing is amazing.

Thank you.

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From ANON - SidonieStarr on August 06, 2012
I've been meaning to comment on Chapter 33 - better late than never, I hope. Having Yoshimi taken captive by the Orochimaru print is brilliant storytelling. You've always been great at worldbuilding and character development, but lately the plot has been particularly riveting.
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From ANON - v on August 04, 2012
ummmm...I feel that since I haven't been able to review for so long its only right I should leave another comment...worry...upsetting thought that won't let me sleep... What about Shikamaru???!! Who's going to love him now??!! *sniffle..sniffle..SOB!* First..forbidden,secret crush on Sasuke or Naruto (can't quiet figure that one out) that even he won't acknowledge, possible love of a lifetime that can't happen because megawatt millionaire genius is too old and too evil (except with him and haru) then went and DIED!!!, and now Neji loves a GIRL!! Poor Shika... he needs someone, cause he drops off the edge of crazy when his brain acts up!! and we love him!! and...i'm so emotionally overwrought with this chapter...and he deserves it!! No one would have the life they've led up to this point without him *SOB* Did I forget to say that he's one of my fifteen favorite characters in your stories, he's like number 3!! *sigh, sniffle* ....and I love your writing.
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From ANON - v on August 04, 2012
Sorry on not reviewing for so long, finally caught up on all the chapters I missed. I find the details in this storyline just amazing, I was caught up in concern for someone with each chapter I read..its exhausting worrying about so many different people..umm..I mean characters (reminding myself once again that they're not real..lol) I'm worried for Haru..he's had so much thrown at him but also proud of how he handled everything. I'm worried for Itachi, and also for all those with sicko pervert O...I hate that he has one of the kits and is abusing him..Its just horrible. Although in the midst of all the bad thats happening, I also find with every chapter there is always hope and the strength of all the ones we adore is mindboggling. I don't understand about Neji and Shika...it seemed so quick..who is this woman..I hate her! (sorry, channeling Sumiko :) Hopefully I'll be able the read each chapter as it Posts and review accordingly because I appreciate that our reviews are welcome and enjoyed. Thank you for your wonderful writing. Always a huge fan, v
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