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By : mannahpierce

From ANON - Procrastination_is_key on November 16, 2012
Sorry for not reviewing in an age!!!

So much has happened! Firstly, I'm glad Hinata has left-it was making things awkward on board. Trust Shika to be there for Neji in any way he needs it.

Klennethon Darrent�s inheritance test is an unexpected development as well, although it makes sense. It will be interesting to see if Haru will pass the test and if he will want the responsibility he is given. I'm glad that he has gotten over his guilt about Rin and the baby.

I'm very happy that there is a counter to Sasuke being taken out by Madara, though that would mean a dead Sasuke, let's hope the threat is enough to keep Izuna off Sasuke's back. I am still optimistic that Sumaru will find out he's Madara not Izuna and kill him before anything worse happens.

But why did Madara have to go involve Centre!!! Arg, he makes me so angry! I can't wait to see him fall. He is annoyingly persistent. And Shika is ready to join up just to protect Haru and his family, even though he has spent his whole life avoiding detection by Centre. It is amusing to think of perfect Centre gradually eroding from the inside and all of the Centralites running about in blind panic as things go wrong. It is tempered by the thought that they might mind-wipe Shika. Hopefully if it comes to Shika going to Centre, Garner Parrad will be able to watch out for him.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

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From ANON - SidonieStarr on November 15, 2012
Ah, Centre finally makes an appearance. It would seem Madara is playing with fire. The story is really cooking along - can't wait for the next chapter!
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on November 13, 2012
CHAPTER 57
THIS CHAPTER IS BRILLIANT!!!!!!
So.. Sasuke has man’ed up a little, huh? Sexy!
I know that a lot of sometimes awful stuff happens in this story but you wouldn’t give Shika away to the Cetralites, right? I kind of worry. I’m afraid that you will let them have him , kidnap him or take him away and then fight him back… I hope I’m terribly wrong. As appealing as at looks – Shika destroying the Centre….it’s too risky and too stressing!
SHIMON HIJIRI! I didn’t expect that! He’s so hot and not properly used in the manga!!! Thank you! Are his eyes visible in here or are they covered? Never mind. He was great! It was impressive that some things finally had been said a loud and published! SHIMON was great. He showed people what the NEW Uchiha is! And even more what isn’t. It was NOT the old Uchiha! Ha! It would be so great if this whole ‘Madara-situation’ could be solved solely by politics and smart dealings rather than any fighting! I wonder if they manage that.
I also hope that Izuna’s name will be cleared afterwards. That makes me wonder what about Pain and Kabuto….?
What happened to Shimon in the past? Why didn’t Akatsuki kill him and they even would????????
I hope we’ll see more of him.
SUMARU – wow! I didn’t expect that of him! I thought he was too… formal to send a message like that.

And to end it optimistically – Kazuki ripping Madara’s head off is a nice thought!

THAK YOU! This was…more than good! It’s everything I’ve been waiting for since some time now and MORE! Can’t wait till Saturday!

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From ANON - Slynx on November 12, 2012
AAaaah, they can't let Center take Shika away! Even though it would be good to see Shika destroying Center from the inside out, I don't want him separated from the family! I don't think he'd survive that..
It's good to see Madara feeling more and more cornered though. It's going to be a surprise for him to discover the 'real' rules about the children challenging him!

Another amazing chapter. I really loved reading it and I hope it'll get easier for you to write them. Thankyou for the update.
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From satterb on November 11, 2012
I loved it that Madara was called a "fossil"!!!! I almost peed my pants! But in reality he's very dangerous. I don't think I could stand it if Shikamaru was taken by Centre. Please protect him. Or even better, please let him get even with them for the threat to his self and loved ones. I sooo look forward to another update, no matter when you're able to get to it. Thanks for updating when you can.
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From Phoenixewolf on November 11, 2012
Poor Shika life is just plain rough for a type-seven genius. Madara, oh how I loathe thee, it was pretty funny though to imagine him going after Sakura and Sumaru being there instead. Another fantastic chapter, thanks for the updates! I am looking forward to more.
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From daughterofvirgo on November 10, 2012
Chapter 57. Damn that Madara. Just when Sasuke and Shikamaru get ahead of him, he does something or plots something that puts him in the lead again.

Thank you for another awesome chapter, Mannah, and I look forward to the next update.
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From ANON - sadie237 on November 10, 2012
SQ it was 'priceless' when old man broke the TV! That's a Yea Baby if there ever was one:) I get so in sensed when that fossil thinks he can just appear and take over!! You see how much I like his new name Fossil:) That was all so brilliant! SQ you get better and better. Then the smooth way Sasuke and Shika found out about the meeting with central. Was another stroke of genius my Space Queen:) That news reporter read my mind on the Fossil. You know I knew I was in good company when Naruto was laughing at it to:) My love for To-chan just keeps on growing:) Buying gifts of everyone! That's so sweet! Plus the love of his life lets him do it:) SQ I truly enjoyed every word. Hey thanks for fining time to write with work and all:) I don't think I could make it without a Saturday episode:) No Wednesday is painful but do able. But a missed Saturday would KILL me ^_^
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From ANON - eunmook on November 04, 2012
Very deft. I love how the pace of the thing changes with one elliptical little line from Garner San and suddenly we're hurtling down the slope of pursuit, all caught up in the thrill of the chase again. Haru as Master of the Universe, huh? Always knew it was a heritable position (what else for the virtual love child of Shika and Darent?) Kazuki vs Izuna!
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on November 04, 2012
56 - Oh Gods! So any important information in one chapter! …wow…
First things first: Naruto really was getting turned on by breasts before his bonding, Does that mean that Kazuki is not necessary straight or is it just my wishful thinking? He acts straight… Naruto was acting bisexual….

Garner!!!!! I was SO hoping to see him! That was much more than I expected!
The ending was… hard. You never let Naruto say anything like that before… I thought there will be smut and there was the most terrifying moment of the whole story….
I can’t help but wonder if Naruto will die fighting or of the old age…
Thanks for the update!

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From satterb on November 03, 2012
Sorry, but I'd still like to see Madara beheaded. Or having one of the kits rip his throat out would be nice too. LOL Thanks for updating. I love your work and look forward to each and every update!
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From ANON - sadie237 on November 03, 2012
Ok Queenie I have tears in my eyes and I feel like crying a river:) I just like Sasuke don't like to talk about To-chan not being around. I know that's life and we all have to go but SQ knowing that Naruto will go without Sasuke and before him some how gets to me. I'm going to TRY to stop being sensitive to that fact. I was speechless although I shouldn't have been at Kleen leaving all that to Haru. I have a better understanding of Neji and Shika relationship. After Shika told Haku-san. I didn't realize that Itachi was still so formal?! I don't think there could be a better name for this chapter than 'Rules':) I do like Garner for some reason. So I was laughing and jumping with Sasuke and Shika all thanks to Garner:) O Great Space Queen I loved it! ^_^
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From daughterofvirgo on November 03, 2012
Chapter 56. Leave it to Shikamaru to find a solution to their problems. And the ending was sweet and very true. Naruto will never leave them.

Anyway, thanks for another awesome chapter, Mannah, and I look forward to the next update.
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From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on October 29, 2012
55 - I thought that Oro-print would take the baby and kill Rin. It was smart of him to secure his child’s future like that… Impressive. And Rin – her comparison of the child to Sasuke… brilliant! It’s good that she believes that her daughter will grow up right but in the future with Madara as a leader of Uchiha…. I don’t know.
I really hope they’ll find Sai soon… or that Sai will somehow find them… Who knows what he’s up to. And no, I don’t consider his death anymore. He’s out there. He has to be. All this searching can’t be for nothing.
I hope Shika will not take Neji back so easily!
I wonder about what did you change in the previous chapter….? I will have to check sometime around because I think I’ve read it just after it showed in my e –mail…..
Saturday on.y updates – it’s still wonderfully often and regular.
You’re great!
Thanks for the update!

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From satterb on October 28, 2012
I love that the young ones can feel like they can act now and ask forgiveness later! LOL And it's good to see that Hi-chan is trying to make Ha-chan feel included. I loved this chapter and look forward to the next. I understand the need for adjusting the amount of updates for the time being and am grateful for what I can get. It also prolongs the story...LOL As always, I look forward to more. Your wonderful writing puts a smile on my face every time I see an new post.
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